Remec
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Stories? cool. I shall want to read
Please do...*sliding list over* My old ones could always benefit from more views. I will, hopefully, have new ones soon. *crossing fingers*
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Stories? cool. I shall want to read
waiting at the finish line, hands Angie her medal and throws the score cards up... 6's all round for that last one. did you watch the pairs ice skating in sochi? i'm guessing you did. their programme (swan lake russians) was more beautiful to watch than their rivals who got higher scores!
2-21 - My response: not really, no. The first thing I thought was that he was lying down on a hillside, upon flowers, whispering her name (so, someone in love). Then I thought he had written her name with petals (she looks through the window and sees it). And then I reached the end of the sentence, and thought he was whispering her name to the flowers on her grave.
what i saw there, tsotha, was he'd planted perrennial bulbs in autumn... come the spring/summer, her name appears each year
doesn't make me right, though... maybe the petals were individually plucked and strewn in a 'she loves me, she loves me not' affair. i like that it's open to interpretationOoh, that's smart. Much more efficient than using petals. He'd also have to glue them to the hillside, now that I think about it.
Congratulations, Angeline. Never doubted you'd finish.
The AS format doesn't leave much room for discussion, I think; it's too short for that. And yet, the american sentences I like best either conjure a strong image or have some kind of twist half-way through. Some caught a bit more of my attention:
2-3 - a quirky remark at the end of an affirmation.
2-12 - This works well for what it leaves to the imagination; with "something that never happened", each person will think something different.
2-15 - Funny.
2-18 - Another that leaves to the imagination. Why is it inconvenient? It conjures a scene that is much longer than what is just written there. E.g., I imagined someone driving to the lake to show the moose to someone else ("let's go see the moose; it will be great!" ).
2-21 - My response: not really, no. The first thing I thought was that he was lying down on a hillside, upon flowers, whispering her name (so, someone in love). Then I thought he had written her name with petals (she looks through the window and sees it). And then I reached the end of the sentence, and thought he was whispering her name to the flowers on her grave.
2-24 - Conjures a complete scene in my mind with very few words.
Yay! Another one finished! Good job, Angeline (great even on occasion...I really like 2-30)...are you restarting right away or taking a short break?
Happy dancing here Ange
Thank you it is interesting to see someone elses take on my poems ....... I would like to point out the reality of 1-20 though. It was my ex, his Mother thought the sun shone from out of his backside, but in reality he was a bastard to me with his punishments of month long silences for things, like asking to learn to drive/go to work/ have a baby .......... all normal everyday things but they would take the attention from him.
Let's see how the song theme goes. Starting with a dud; rushed to post before midnight, and still missed the deadline. Oh well.
I decided to join you and painful_rapture for another round of torture.
Love the song idea but will you tell us the songs? I read your first poem and thought of a Bob Dylan song, but I'm probably wrong.
I'm back to select some of those written after I finished my 30/30 run.
Remec:
2-11 - It catches one's attention with the format (that's important ). It also had interesting line breaks, which didn't come when I expected them.
2-14 - Very strange. Conjured two different scenes in my mind. The first reading pointed toward a simple box of mementos, from places he has traveled to that can no longer be visited, for some reason. The second reading, a person who left "pieces" inside a box, a box he can no longer visit because it has been cordoned off with police tape!
2-15 - I like your use of "digital tears" in this one, you expanded that little bit into a full message that is interesting. I like how digital tears takes a sarcastic tone (like "shark tears", I guess), but also describes the reality of a relationship that only exists virtually (that is, it isn't real, because it doesn't have a point of contact with real life. Yet for him, it was real because it was important).
2-21 - Cool AS, it starts a bit fuzzy but conjures a complete scene by the end of 17 syllables.
*hugs Angeline* Thank you, thank you! Whew, I'm so relieved that it isn't going to be a wall of Tsotha...
Oops. Fixed. I'm posting the song's title and a link to the lyrics right there with the poems, from now on. Or perhaps it would be better to put them here? I'm not sure.
The idea is to use either a line or the title of the song as inspiration for an "all of a sudden passion suddenly" style piece. That is to say, it should help see me through the 30 in 30, but I can't guarantee that it will make sense.
I've written two others before in the writing live thread, as an experiment:
No Quarter
Communication Breakdown
As you can see, I'm just taking some idea from them and going with it without trying to keep true to the song.
Awww.
I like doing these with company. I feel like a fly on the wall that everyone sees crawling around when I do it alone. Oy what an image!
Hey I was close on the song! I thought you were referencing Dylan's Keep on Rainin The Levee's Gonna Break. I know, close but no cigar, right?
Damn, painful_rapture. Are you mocking us? Now I want to see b's up 'till the 1-30.
I didn't see anything saying it was against the rules to post more than what was asked for...
No mocking intended.
I didn't see anything saying it was against the rules to post more than what was asked for...
No mocking intended.