Nightscream89
novice writer
- Joined
- Nov 11, 2024
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Hi everyone,
I am new to Literotica and have finished the first chapter of my story.
I decided to write this story because I don't see alot of stories about swinging where the husband actually has a dominant role and I think it would be a good idea to write a story like that.
I am looking for an editor that can help me.
Feedback/help I am looking for:
- Paragraphing, just changed writing style to shorter paragraphs, but unsure still.
- Descriptiveness, Should I describe certain things more and/or less?
- General Spelling and Grammar.
Other details:
- English is not my first language.
- First time writing in English
- first time writing Erotica.
- Written in Google Documents (English spelling and grammar tool enabled)
- Word count first chapter: 2744 (I know it's on the short side, but I thought this would be better since I still have some things to learn.)
story title: 'The gentlemen's club'
Short description:
The story is about a businessman (billionaire) who is retiring and his wife. While pondering what to do with his retirement he comes across a club called 'the gentlemen's club'. Within this club the men are the 'Master's' and the women are the (Consensual!) Servants. Servants are either personal servants (servant to one man) or club servants (serve all the men) however the men in the club do like to share their personal servants as well. The story is about them joining this club and widening their sexual experiences.
The couple also has a 18 y/o step-daughter, who will be in the story, but not a main character.
Themes that will come include but are not limited to. Swinging, Sharing, Loving Wife, pregnant, group sex, Vaginal, Anal, DP, gangbang, virgin, Incest (step-family, no blood relation).
Chapter one is about the Male MC's first day of retirement, here he finds out about the club and wants to convince his wife to join.
A lot of character introduction. And a husband/wife sex scene in the second part of chapter one.
It's pretty vanilla still to be honest. With just some loving cunnilingus, vaginal and anal sex.
I hope that is enough information, if you have any questions please ask and I hope there is someone willing and able to help me with this.
kind regards,
Nightscream89
I am new to Literotica and have finished the first chapter of my story.
I decided to write this story because I don't see alot of stories about swinging where the husband actually has a dominant role and I think it would be a good idea to write a story like that.
I am looking for an editor that can help me.
Feedback/help I am looking for:
- Paragraphing, just changed writing style to shorter paragraphs, but unsure still.
- Descriptiveness, Should I describe certain things more and/or less?
- General Spelling and Grammar.
Other details:
- English is not my first language.
- First time writing in English
- first time writing Erotica.
- Written in Google Documents (English spelling and grammar tool enabled)
- Word count first chapter: 2744 (I know it's on the short side, but I thought this would be better since I still have some things to learn.)
story title: 'The gentlemen's club'
Short description:
The story is about a businessman (billionaire) who is retiring and his wife. While pondering what to do with his retirement he comes across a club called 'the gentlemen's club'. Within this club the men are the 'Master's' and the women are the (Consensual!) Servants. Servants are either personal servants (servant to one man) or club servants (serve all the men) however the men in the club do like to share their personal servants as well. The story is about them joining this club and widening their sexual experiences.
The couple also has a 18 y/o step-daughter, who will be in the story, but not a main character.
Themes that will come include but are not limited to. Swinging, Sharing, Loving Wife, pregnant, group sex, Vaginal, Anal, DP, gangbang, virgin, Incest (step-family, no blood relation).
Chapter one is about the Male MC's first day of retirement, here he finds out about the club and wants to convince his wife to join.
A lot of character introduction. And a husband/wife sex scene in the second part of chapter one.
It's pretty vanilla still to be honest. With just some loving cunnilingus, vaginal and anal sex.
I hope that is enough information, if you have any questions please ask and I hope there is someone willing and able to help me with this.
kind regards,
Nightscream89