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echoes_s said:predatory creation
Welcome to the valley
of dead
the land of marauding
nightmares
death in torchlight
shadowed gloom rise
inevitable doom
stagnant pools of blood water
stones with teeth
welcome to the home
of the Drew
living in caverns
roughly sloped stalactite
stalagmite
a cruel facade
hiding chaos and will
sharp and haunting
pain thrusting
where a sleeping dragon
leers with soundless threat
silence foreboding
crouched hush
stillness disturbed
beating heart of
a waking beast
untimely
predatory creation
i am still not happy with the last stanze or stagnant pools of blood water, dragon leering, sleeping to waking is missing something....more work to be done.
echoes_s said:predatory creation
Welcome to the valley
of dead
the land of marauding
nightmares
death in torchlight
shadowed gloom rise
inevitable doom
stagnant pools of blood water
stones with teeth
welcome to the home
of the Drew
living in caverns
roughly sloped stalactite
stalagmite
a cruel facade
hiding chaos and will
sharp and haunting
pain thrusting
where a sleeping dragon
leers with soundless threat
silence foreboding
crouched hush
stillness disturbed
beating heart of
a waking beast
untimely
predatory creation
i am still not happy with the last stanze or stagnant pools of blood water, dragon leering, sleeping to waking is missing something....more work to be done.
Tathagata said:it's not the act of adoration
that makes the unattainable ordinary
it'd the desire to possess it
to drag it into our twisted light
and fitting it to
our mutant eyes
the angels lose thier divinity
the treasure , it's worth
the love , it's gossamer caul of simplicity
and christmas snow
we trust the base senses
the kiss ,the touch
to reassure us of what's real
that we are real
and here
but lying wrapped in deceitful blue sheets
the hunger gnaws again
a rat in the belly of a ship
bringer of the deluge
bringer of failure
and we drown in doubt and claw at what remains
blue smoke moonlight on her still trembling thigh
postobitum said:Wow, was this to fix my poem? (tired and goofy headed tonight, please excuse dear monkey man) Either way it's great. Blew my nameless dud out of the water in a big ker-sploosh!
postobitum
PatCarrington said:From everywhere, you hear it.
It talks,
in wandering voices that come bursting
from the fields like scared crows, black
and dodging. In the gossip of the wind,
the wild whispers of night that find your
hiding ears, prod and pull your blood
like some bad moon, multiply themselves
to crawl across rooftops and the battered
hand. In creaks and rattles words crackle
and scream, bend you like the old barn
down past the south forty, boards curved,
nails screeching as they scratch their way
out to run away with midnight, eloping
with the storm. In your sleep you dream
of spring and her and walking in the rain,
humming on a child’s legs. You love that
dawn, and the rest of your life. You break
dirt and seed cornrows, sing the sparrows
hoarse. But your song can never make it
to the daybreak, you awaken in the dark.
And now what comes with morning?
Stacked like dry logs, mornings wear
flames on their hearts, await a spark
to burn them with your dreams. And if
you really knew tomorrow, knew just
what it will be that lays your music low,
would you stop singing now?
Tathagata said:No No
it just happened to follow yours
had it been about yours i'd have quoted it
no worries
: )
I had posted this on another thread and no one threw rocks at me, so hesitantly I'll try it here, thank you.SeattleRain said:
So, this thread is for:
2. You are looking for a little feedback and exposure and are not interested or ready to submit.
Seattle
Christina O. Leigh said:And an awesome job you did!