Bimbofication/Sluttification chapter readthrough

[Flangelo]

Hey there, I’m writing a longterm Bimbofication story about the world being influenced by a magic fog that slowly turns everything and everyone into ultra busty, ultra slutty versions of themselves.

I’m looking for someone to read through the first chapter and tell me what I need to fix and give detailed notes about what you liked and/or thought needed improvement. It’s about 4000 words in length. I am free to answer any questions about it. Thanks!

 

[PennyThompson]

everything and everyone into ultra busty, ultra slutty versions of themselves.

Everything? I'm picturing fire hydrants and trees and parking meters growing big ol' boobies

 

[Flangelo]

Haha I hadn’t quite meant it that literally, that is to say that many normal aspects of life have become sexualized versions of themselves, and just general public and casual sex is as normal as anything.