BDSM Haiku

[MilkFountain]

Some people are more into the fun, happy side of this site, and life, and less so the anal retentive part (though that's obviously popular here as well). And I would rather read all of the HORRENDOUS DRIVEL people have written here in an honest attempt at fun than your pedantic, negative lectures. Take it to the general board.

The Uninformed quote,
Defending blithe ignorance

"Pedant!" In wit's place


. . . If handed a sword, you would cut yourself, not taking it seriously.

It is you who are the interloper: This site purported to be about Haiku; with good intent, I tried to add to the conversation, while edifying. (Aaah . . . But Archie Bunker is alive! Why don't you admit when you're not only wrong, but out of your depth?) As you have, I have not sunk to call you names, although there are a multitude.


Shakespeare:
1.)
The dolt takes offence
Where good intentions to teach

Highlight ignorance


2.)
You have called me names
Screaming you are Common Man

Indeed, such you are!

Yes, there is a difference between such as you and such as I . . . I love life, a joke, taking a risk and poking fun, but I would never defend my deep, broad and often ridiculous ignorance, rather, we hope . . . learn!

 

[Endless_Night]

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2.) a season MUST be mentioned directly or implied. Such as the mention of dying leaves is fall, a frozen bird is winter, a budding branch is spring and waving wheat is summer.

HAIKU is a Fine Art, not a casual plaything.

Now, let's see if I can produce a BDSM haiku . . .

What said the Sadist
When Masochists begged for more?

Slyly, said he, "No!"

The Uninformed quote,
Defending blithe ignorance

"Pedant!" In wit's place

What? Two attempts and no seasonal reference?

Treating Haiku like a casual plaything, for shame. For shame, I say!

It's okay though, you seem well versed in cutting and pasting. It's a talent. Really. *encouraging nod*

 

[MilkFountain]

What? Two attempts and no seasonal reference?

Treating Haiku like a casual plaything, for shame. For shame, I say!

It's okay though, you seem well versed in cutting and pasting. It's a talent. Really. *encouraging nod*

Wonderful! . . .Yes! Precisely, mocking a mockery . . .What do you mean, "cut-and-paste"? (I lied, those near-haiku were written by me. Had you known that Shakespeare was before the first 5-7-5 haiku were written, and because to academic knowledge he didn't invent haiku, you would have picked that up. ("Haiku was so-named in the late 19th century, before which it was called, variously, hokku.) Before the 5-7-5 form, there were others, dating from about the 3rd millenia B.C.)

(I'm sad and taken aback to realize that some people here are capable of replacing the stones on a go board with M&Ms, never finishing a game, to always end up with tummy aches--blaming the Chinese for not being "funner".)

 

[MilkFountain]

No one wants to play . . .

This just became boring; won't return; dissatisfying exercise.

 

[EbersMoll]

Is this what you're after?

A Fountain of Milk
In the heat of high summer
Turns horribly sour.

 

[vrmmsm]

I would like to shout:

Haiku has three requirements:

1.) There are three lines.

2.) They MUST have:
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables
. . . respectively.

2.) a season MUST be mentioned directly or implied. Such as the mention of dying leaves is fall, a frozen bird is winter, a budding branch is spring and waving wheat is summer.

HAIKU is a Fine Art, not a casual plaything.

Really, MUST have a reference? I agree with your #2 (the first one) about 17 syllables and their separation into 5, 7, 5 syllables. I find that in art, there are guidelines, but there are rarely hard and fast rules. The true artist often bends and breaks the rules with great success. I also understand that while, yes, there is often a mention of the seasons, that is really more of an old rule that is not followed as strictly today.

The Uninformed quote,
Defending blithe ignorance

"Pedant!" In wit's place

Was that supposed to be a haiku? Where's the seasonal reference and watch the number of syllables.

. . . If handed a sword, you would cut yourself, not taking it seriously.

Again, this reads like a haiku, but misses the mark

This site purported to be about Haiku

Hmm, no, I'm pretty sure this site is about kink. This is a thread, on a kink site, about haiku.

Shakespeare:
1.)
The dolt takes offence
Where good intentions to teach

Highlight ignorance


2.)
You have called me names
Screaming you are Common Man

Indeed, such you are!

Yes, there is a difference between such as you and such as I . . . I love life, a joke, taking a risk and poking fun, but I would never defend my deep, broad and often ridiculous ignorance, rather, we hope . . . learn!

I feel like Charlie Brown. Oh Good Grief. What does Shakespeare have to do with Haiku?!?

Why do you insist upon using ellipses? I guess you are taking a bit of poetic license. When you are trying to bolster your shaky self image by lording your superiority over folks, you should ensure that your own posts don't include any mistakes of grammar or syntax or spelling.

If you were actually trying to help, you'll get much farther along without being an ass about it, but since that's not your motive.

This won't be nearly as good as EbersMols' example (I'm not that poetically clever), but here goes anyway.

Douche nozzle blows hard
Hot, wet air. Flies in summer.
maggots on poopy

 

[Curious_in_Cali]

Haiku's a challenge
so we share the process of
learning as we go.

Mastery's worthwhile
but it is the students that
give teachers purpose.

Language must live in
bondage of rules, but poets
work to set it free.

 

[CherryOh]

Edit edit

 

[EbersMoll]

Lace curtains billow
Carried on warming currents,
Stroking her chaffed rear.

 

[minette05]

How can we nourish
warm words like summer's caress
When harsh words cut down

 

[EbersMoll]

Stems grow in the warmth,
But harden with a cool wind -
We should do the same.

 

[minette05]

Cool winds may calm minds
Soothing sun-seared spirits
Summer winds bring play

 

[Collar_N_Cuffs]

I struggle with it
even as my hand rises,
only to descend.

 

[EbersMoll]

The bedroom's close heat,
Coats our protagonists' skin,
Painted by The Mistral.

 

[minette05]

The sheen of desire
glistens on his face, heated
seeing his Beauty

 

[le_kitty]

Cold leather on skin,
Darkness here I cannot see,
Your scent lingers on.

 

[nicewon4u]

Cougar

Wanton desires
Ravish my aching body
Edging, ove and over

 

[EbersMoll]

Coated glossiness,
Like the sheen of oiled leather,
Records their efforts.

 

[LibraStud]

Sudden excitement
Never able to hold back
Foreplay begins

 

[DeepGreenEyes]

"Now." Voice reclining.
As cicadas go silent
You nod with eyes wide.

 

[Collar_N_Cuffs]

It wrapped around her
like a vine seeking high ground.
Or smoke, the night sky.

 

[Curious_in_Cali]

with a green thumb and
some tongue ties his new trellis
laced her to the edge

 

[DeepGreenEyes]

Her chattering mind
Smooth as windswept sand
He expects success.

 

[Curious_in_Cali]

the quiet read on
clean sheets is where he likes to
begin her sentence

 

[DeepGreenEyes]

As rain pounds beech leaves
He looms, smears his sticky brand
On her upturned face.