Double blind/Same line challenge poems

[Magnetron]

.........................

I sure as hell can't dance to this.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

11.
UnderYourSpell
.
He heard her plaintive singing
as he opened up the door.
"I'm cursed to wander aimlessly,
twixt this world and the next.
The crime that I committed
horrendous to be sure,
was done for love of you my dear
although you can't see that now."

He whispered "I forgive you,
show yourself once more"
and at his words a headless
wraith sashayed across the floor.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I sure as hell can't dance to this.

Not into Line Dancing then?

 

[Magnetron]

11.

He heard her plaintive singing
as he opened up the door.
"I'm cursed to wander aimlessly,
twixt this world and the next.
The crime that I committed
horrendous to be sure,
was done for love of you my dear
although you can't see that now."

He whispered "I forgive you,
show yourself once more"
and at his words a headless
wraith sashayed across the floor.

I can at least dance to the 2nd Stanza.

 

[Magnetron]

Not into Line Dancing then?

Oh, my aching heart
My achy breaky heart
A headless wraith sashayed across the floor
If you break my my heart
My achy breaky heart
I might just flee out the motherfucking door

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Oh, my aching heart
My achy breaky heart
A headless wraith sashayed across the floor
If you break my my heart
My achy breaky heart
I might just flee out the motherfucking door

Is that double 'my' intended and the last line just broke ranks

 

[legerdemer]

How could triage spell doom to a headless wraith?

Triage that sends the headless wraith to the cutting room floor, no? At least that's the way I read it.

 

[Magnetron]

Is that double 'my' intended and the last line just broke ranks

Not intended and it is very rank.

That's what happens when typing shit on the fly with a stylus on a pad.

 

[Magnetron]

Triage that sends the headless wraith to the cutting room floor, no? At least that's the way I read it.

We are reading the same poem, right?

 

[AlwaysHungry]

2.
A headless wraith walks into a bar and says .....

Numerous rumors claim that back then
Corporeal Annie, quite chilled, came unglued
scared out of her bloomers when
composing with quilled pen in hand
torn between paradelle and pantoum
a wraith sashayed headless across the room

According to supposing snickers sneaked now
Corporeal Annie, semi nude
was frightened out of her knickers
"How?" you may ask
Well, she shrieked, "Bloody hell!"
amidst her task of pantoum ( or paradelle perhaps )
when in nothing more than assless chaps
across the room sashayed a headless wraith

The only thing for certain?
Tested this day was her faith
while the truth of the matter to be told
was left to the imagination, unspoken
For all anyone really knows
Corporeal Annie was nip nipply cold
zipper jammed beyond broken
with her bosomers out on full display
during a Royal Navy cosplay session
headless, a wraith sashayed across the room

Across the room a headless wraith sashayed
All along, it was I, Admiral Andrew!
anticipating getting laid
filling my dear Corporeal Annie
with doom, gloom 'n' dread
as I hithered to and fro
swithered her way

unbeknownst during the visit paid
that I was already dead
for almost a year to this day

and of course
completely missing my head

Those are factual details straight from the source
and now that you know what actually happened
the only question remaining
concerns the poem Corporeal Annie penned
Was it a paradelle?
Might it have been a pantoum?

Who gives two shits!
I still can't get over seeing those tits!

A headless wraith sashayed across the room

Magnetron, playing doctor with UYS.

 

[AlwaysHungry]

Not into Line Dancing then?

I approve.

 

[Magnetron]

Magnetron, playing doctor with UYS.

Was it that obvious?

 

[Piscator]

5.
Spooked

This stately home has a reputation,
the most haunted place in all the nation.
Mistreated servant or jilted maiden,
this lovely place is tragedy laden.
For a bet and on a whim, we agree
to spend the night. He is brave unlike me
who is scared by shadows, spiders and bats.
The hallways are lined by aristocrats
whose eyes seem to follow us through the gloom.
A headless wraith sashayed across the room
and that was quite enough, for me. at least,
We turned and ran from haunts of the deceased.
My valiant beau, not valiant now
swore me to silence or he’d disavow
saying I’d forced him to rush out of there.
Now the memory is just a nightmare.

Hark a sonnet doth emerge, mahaps penned by AH

 

[Magnetron]

Hark a sonnet doth emerge, mahaps penned by AH

This one doesn't appear to be AH's either.

 

[Magnetron]

6.

The whole performance must have gone awry.
A headless wraith sashays across the room
To vehement applause, and as the gloom
Of evening deepens, now must you and I
Decide: because we know that, by and by,
A denouement must come that may consume
The actors and the crowd, and make a tomb
Of this pretentious theater, then why
Can't we reject the premise, and the script,
Perhaps unmask the author as he hides
Among the cast, and let the stage be stripped
Of opulent deceits that it provides?
Let's craft a tale that isn't from the crypt,
And find out if the audience abides.

This is most definitely AH.

 

[AlwaysHungry]

Hark a sonnet doth emerge, mahaps penned by AH

I am guessing UYS for that one.

 

[Magnetron]

I am guessing UYS for that one.

I'm guessing you are blowing smoke up our asses.

 

[AlwaysHungry]

I'm guessing you are blowing smoke up our asses.

Mark my words, it's a plausible guess.

 

[greenmountaineer]

I am guessing UYS for that one.

I'm guessing you are blowing smoke up our asses.

Mark my words, it's a plausible guess.

It's very good no matter who wrote it. The words paradoxically both flow and jar, just like the headless wraith sashaying across the stage.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I'll get the names up soon and UYS doesn't write sonnets if she can help it!

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I can't remember what I do now! Do I put up names first or ask for revisions first?

 

[AlwaysHungry]

I can't remember what I do now! Do I put up names first or ask for revisions first?

I vote for revisions.

 

[Magnetron]

Not much critique this time around, so I'd say revisions aren't really necessary.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I tell you what, I've had one revision so if anyone else wants to revise please send them to me. I'm back to hospital on Thursday for an Endoscopy (yuck) so I'll sort you out when I'm able. Sorry I'm all over the place with this challenge but life intruded

 

[Magnetron]

I tell you what, I've had one revision so if anyone else wants to revise please send them to me. I'm back to hospital on Thursday for an Endoscopy (yuck) so I'll sort you out when I'm able. Sorry I'm all over the place with this challenge but life intruded

Yuck? Yikes. Tell them you'd rather swallow a Kodak and wait a few days to see if there are any developments.