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Falling Into Darkness...constructive feedback please!!!
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Jenny_Jackson
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First of all, that (I guess) run-sentence makes absolutly no sense. Second, It's not really helpful to make comments if you haven't even bothered to read the bloody story.
Now go away.
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Jenny_Jackson
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I read parts one and two...
Not my kind of story, Elianna, but I like your style. As TK told you, this could use a good editor, but that doesn't detract all that much from the story.
The writing, overall, is pretty well done, You set up a clear plot and kept to the plan without a bunch of wandering bullshit that you see in a lot of stories. I did think a couple of your scenes were a little overly rough, but that's just me.
Keep writing. I have high hopes here.
Not my kind of story, Elianna, but I like your style. As TK told you, this could use a good editor, but that doesn't detract all that much from the story.
The writing, overall, is pretty well done, You set up a clear plot and kept to the plan without a bunch of wandering bullshit that you see in a lot of stories. I did think a couple of your scenes were a little overly rough, but that's just me.
Keep writing. I have high hopes here.
Elianna
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Thanks, Jenny. I really value your critique and that you read something "not your kind of story" to help me out.
I'm battling the dilema; post sooner to keep people happy or send to an editor to make it perfect... I haven't decided the balance. On one hand, I know that you have to keep up with posting chapters in order to keep your readers, but I'm a perfectionist and damn it if I don't find TONS of mistakes after posting no matter how much I read it over, and over.
I might open that up to all the people who keep pushing me to post so soon... what would they prefer? Perfect stories make for better ratings, but ones that don't get posted in a timely manner also drop off the edge. I know I could use a second set of eyes to help me out, especially in the "rough" sections. At the rate I'm going I'm about a week in between chapters because I don't have the time or focus to write during the work week. Add an editor to that mix and it might just double...
What's the proper balance guys?
Jenny_Jackson
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PM me, Elianna. We can talk about this.Thanks, Jenny. I really value your critique and that you read something "not your kind of story" to help me out.
I'm battling the dilema; post sooner to keep people happy or send to an editor to make it perfect... I haven't decided the balance. On one hand, I know that you have to keep up with posting chapters in order to keep your readers, but I'm a perfectionist and damn it if I don't find TONS of mistakes after posting no matter how much I read it over, and over.
I might open that up to all the people who keep pushing me to post so soon... what would they prefer? Perfect stories make for better ratings, but ones that don't get posted in a timely manner also drop off the edge. I know I could use a second set of eyes to help me out, especially in the "rough" sections. At the rate I'm going I'm about a week in between chapters because I don't have the time or focus to write during the work week. Add an editor to that mix and it might just double...
What's the proper balance guys?
Keep the far future in mind too.
When you are done with this story:
Will you want the feeling that you made a lot of people happy.
Or
Will you want the feeling that you have learned a lot.
Or both.
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If you rush yourself to post faster than you can cuddle and care for, and thoroughly edit your work, and have your work thoroughly edited. Then you will detract from 'learned a lot'.
Your work is already of so high quality that in the short term (I think) most readers will appreciate faster satisfaction of receiving the next chapter, over the later publication with more edits. For this story.
But if you have more to learn on the editing part, and you choose not to, for the sake of the impatiently waiting. Well then you will have this same problem on the next story again^^.
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This story is worth waiting for. Can't speak for others but you wont loose me as a reader if you decide to cuddle more for each piece. I'll still yearn impatiently and beg for more n say 'chop chop'. But take that as compliments regarding what is already posted, rather than as a sign that you should skip parts of the creative or editing phases of pieces yet to be submitted.
When you are done with this story:
Will you want the feeling that you made a lot of people happy.
Or
Will you want the feeling that you have learned a lot.
Or both.
----
If you rush yourself to post faster than you can cuddle and care for, and thoroughly edit your work, and have your work thoroughly edited. Then you will detract from 'learned a lot'.
Your work is already of so high quality that in the short term (I think) most readers will appreciate faster satisfaction of receiving the next chapter, over the later publication with more edits. For this story.
But if you have more to learn on the editing part, and you choose not to, for the sake of the impatiently waiting. Well then you will have this same problem on the next story again^^.
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This story is worth waiting for. Can't speak for others but you wont loose me as a reader if you decide to cuddle more for each piece. I'll still yearn impatiently and beg for more n say 'chop chop'. But take that as compliments regarding what is already posted, rather than as a sign that you should skip parts of the creative or editing phases of pieces yet to be submitted.
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Sorry but maybe just me, but can't find chapter 4
Just click on my profile and you'll find it. Ch 5 posted last Friday and I just threw Ch 6 into the cue!
OH; GOODY! I'm anxious for #5! The cel-phone tag with Kael's second with anna was a GREAT GIGGLE! I thought the dialogue was terrific. The code words Anna was given to use on his second is a grand puzzle for the reader to figure on. A very complicated foreshadowing! I loved the technique! I am anxxious to hear inside the mind of what'shis name-the second's mind. Poised and waiting: Quesla With lots of Love & Light!
