First Story - The Hotel Room

[Driftwood70]

Laurel removed a comment from one of my stories recently. I let it sit for a while before I decided to delete it, and by the time I got there it was already gone. It's happened before.

I absolutely did not remove any comments. The person who said I did is an Anonymous user. There is a also a longer post by an another Anonymous user. Now it could be the same person and they did not see that there is a “More comments “ link to click. I replied to that user anyway, but I did not remove any comments.

 

[Driftwood70]

I had to stop after the first few paragraphs. You said, "You was" instead of "You were". And the way it was written scared me. I wasn't in your story. Now I am looking over my shoulder, looking for a stalker.

Sorry to hear that. It’s not intended to scare. Maybe you’ll like my next story better. It’s got a female perspective.

 

[Emirus]

1. My other piece of advice, for what it's worth, is not to bother futzing with your first story. It is what it is, warts and all. Take on board whatever you want (which might be nothing at all, and that's okay), but put the effort into the next piece and the one after that. Do your apprenticeship, learn your technical chops, find your natural style. That takes about ten stories, I reckon.

2. Keep your first pieces short and simple before you embark on the world's next great novel. Writing wise, you're okay, editorial errors and glitches that are easily fixed, but I'm not sure you've found your natural voice just yet. Toddler steps, we all do them .

Follow these pieces of advice you’ve been given by EB66.

1. Follow the constructive advice you’ve been given by EB66 because they are all writers who know what they are talking about. Move on from this story but don’t change it or delete it because when you’ve had another few stories published you can look back and see how much you have improved.

2. Write your next stories at a length you feel comfortable with and don’t try to add unnecessary plot just to make it longer. Your stories will naturally become longer as you improve. Don’t be afraid to fail and write in whatever genre you enjoy because if you don’t enjoy writing that type of story then the story itself won’t be any good. Some writers on here stick to one genre and others diversify and write in several because they feel comfortable with doing that. Do what you feel comfortable.