Group poem "Live" by ProseActs

[ProseActs]

I have to say that since we <ProseActs> were on different continents and my puter problems; this edited version is the work of Debbiexxx and Savage Kitten. I didnt even get to talk to Debbiexxx today before editing the post as she is sleeping when I am awake. But I also didnt want to miss the deadline. Perhaps an extra day would be good?

~LTR

 

[Savage Kitten]

WOW! Bravo Debbie!

For your culinary delights we, the combined efforts of ProseActs, bring you:


The edited version

Live
by ProseActs ©

Candy waits, center stage; cloaked in dim shadow
Bright lights and lambada music startle the girl
"Dance for us.." A deep male voice demands
Tiny, creamy taut breasts jiggle as tassels twirl
Candy dances, her nubile body in perfect tempo

Candy moves her body in perfect sensual motion
Heads turn as Candy performs solo on stage
Her wide eyes full of strong sexual emotion
Eyes not seeing nor believing her true age
Candy dances, her nubile body in perfect tempo

Candy obeys, command performance
Hypnotic rhythm, her body sways
Captured audience sits in awe
Entranced by music, she smiles that way
Tempo of perfection in her nubile body, Candy dances


Please read and vote.

Your comments and thoughts are most humbly appreciated.

ProseActs
debbiexxx
lovetoread
Savage Kitten

I have to admit, due to working and time constraints I didn't get to help debbie with much more than just a couple suggestions. She did the rewrite. She did a wonderful job! I like how she switched the order of the lines in the second stanza to make it fit the pattern of 1 and 3. I have to say that I am very pleased with the finished product!

~you go girl~

Sk~

 

[Whispersecret]

If it was mine, I'd still tweak some of the words, but this is better. As daughter says, thanks for the read.