Is there any dedicated Editors out there?

[Guest]

Okay, so I'm the bad guy here.

That's okay, I can live with that.

No, you're not the bad guy here. There aren't any bad guys here--just people, doing the best they can.

I'm a people, and sometimes my best is fuckin' awesome, and sometimes it royally sucks, but it's still my best.

I understand your frustration, I think, when people who earnestly desire to improve their writing can't find an editor with whom to work.

But I learned over the course of providing therapy for 20 years that I can't help everyone. If I keep giving and giving without let, I'll eventually give out.

So I don't.

 

[faq52]

It isn't common knowledge who all I work with. That's a mutual agreement that I like. I don't help them just to see my name on their story, but my regulars do thank me -- all the time.

As for this writer, their stories need a lot of work. Errors screamed at me from the piece I glanced at. Is there a plot in there somewhere? Maybe, I didn't read that far. Flat out, I wouldn't know where to begin without 'rewriting' it myself. And I don't do that.

Oh yes, the spanking, either works for me.

To be fair to you I read the whole of the maid story very quickly with no attention to detail.
still plenty of spelling errors, words used in ways that stopped me dead mentally thinking huh? what does he even mean here.
My base assumption here reading this without prior information would be that this was written by someone not a native english speaker.
the sentence structure is dire.
I only noticed narative, no character developement and no real feeling for the scene that the story is set in. cardboard cut out land if you undersand me.
There is nothing erotic about this story as written. turn on level zero. If I was not reading to help you I would have clicked out after ten lines without even bothering to vote

sorry but I am in agreement with Mistress Lyn.

nothing less than a ghost write would resurect this story.
I make no claims to be a great writer myself but I could see someone taking as long to do something with this as it took you to write if not longer as the editor would be trying very hard to leave a hint of you in the final script which would be more work than taking the plot and writing the story from a blank screen.

wanting to be creative is a great and wonderful thing but you are asking your editor to do all the work.
you need to learn how to write in English. that is very different to simply putting your thougths on paper as you have done.
three quarters or more of your story is still in your imagination.
So when you are reading your own work you are also remembering the vivid images you first created when you wrote the piece.
to achieve success you have to take what you see in your mind and express every part of it in word on screen.

Dude you did not even give your characters names. there is no emotional feel to this. it has the emotional content of a shopping list.

 

[Dommoser]

Thank you for taking the time to teach me. I understand what you are saying. Please know that I do not expect to be a professional writer but I still want to be the best I can be at everything I do. I will work on my current stories to rectify what you are saying to the best of my ability. I hope at some point in the futue you again revisit some stories of mine after this date and see what you have helped me with. You are sadistic though. lol The editors here are just great, thank you to all.

DM

 

[faq52]

Thank you for taking the time to teach me. I understand what you are saying. Please know that I do not expect to be a professional writer but I still want to be the best I can be at everything I do. I will work on my current stories to rectify what you are saying to the best of my ability. I hope at some point in the futue you again revisit some stories of mine after this date and see what you have helped me with. You are sadistic though. lol The editors here are just great, thank you to all.

DM

You want me to lie to you?

ancient Sufi mystic wisdom.
Everything we say should pass though three gates
1) is it honest?
2) is it necessary?
3) is it kind?

everything I say passes the test.
it is my honest opinion only posted with a desire to help you.
it is necessary for you to see things as they really are before you can hope to improve.
I would be a bastard if I lied and told you it was wonderful would I not? and then your stories bombed and never got great reader interest.
you would do well to read more and when you do pay attention to the details. ]

when you write make every word count.
words are a tiny part of face toiface communication it is said taht 93% of communication is in your voice qualities and body language.
you lose all that when you are working on screen. so now you must not only fill in the background but your communication of the conversation must be vastly more effective. instead of having all that other communication to get your message across you must put it all into words. thus converting the 7% into 100% again. this is why I made a point about emotions you have to dig deep and I know that is hard you are a guy. write from your soul. you have to make it that the reader can feel your fingers sensously drifting across your female character's skin sending shivers down her spine all the way to her dripping pussy.Leaving her with the hairs on her neck standing erect. her heart beating, blood rushing like a river in spate and her cunt throbbing with desire for your cock!

writing is fun!
remember that and you are a winner.

Philip

 

[Dommoser]

My skin is thick and it needs to be in order to be the best I can at everything I do. It is a narrow mind that sees only what makes them happy and shuns the criticism. They are mediocrity.

Thanks Again Sir

DM