My Perv's Sex Toy

[CeriseNoire]

Much as I love threadjacks I just want to say I really give ESL writers a break. But if you're for real, then no, because of your attitude.

That's what I was thinking. I'm technically one as well, so i try to give them some slack.

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

I try to type better

T just share of my experience i had in real life, wasnt meant to put it in book! I love stories on literotica site,

I am a bad writer and a bad speaker as well, just wanted share with u what i like, uhm, bad idea it was soz

 

[tickledkitty]

Awww...she's soz. Now, don't you all feel bad?

 

[tickledkitty]

Haaaa!! That is so cool. Now somebody has to write a real story with this title.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Thing is i didnt know you all will judge my english wich suck and do know it, i am working on making it better tho. If I knew it i wouldn't say a word lol :O
To my story... uhm, it suposed be just share of my experience i had in real life, wasnt meant to put it in book! I love stories on literotica site, but i wont post any anymore then hehe, will just keep reading urs profi ones, soz peeps.
ohh and with the callin u bitch i was just jokin btw, soz if u took it serious ..
I am a bad writer and a bad speaker as well, just wanted share with u what i like, uhm, bad idea it was soz

Your mistake was referring someone who took the time to read your 'story' as a lazy bitch. I think you lost any credibilty at that point.

 

[starrkers]

Why would someone post a story in the "story feedback" section and not expect feedback?
I read the first par and a bit.
Sorry, pal, but the story wasn't interesting enough to keep wading through the poor English.
Why not try writing in your native language and posting on the Lit site for that language (whichever one it is).

Or are you just wasting our time?

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

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I just thought I could find here some peeps who like the same things as I do.

you all writing nice stories with perfect english, n1! I just like dirty things and peeps who loves the same.

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

Awww...she's soz. Now, don't you all feel bad?

no need to feel bad really, i know all about peeps and how lovely they can be

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

Why would someone post a story in the "story feedback" section and not expect feedback?
I read the first par and a bit.
Sorry, pal, but the story wasn't interesting enough to keep wading through the poor English.
Why not try writing in your native language and posting on the Lit site for that language (whichever one it is).

Or are you just wasting our time?

uhmm, no I am not wasting ur time, I didn't force u to read it!!
eventho force you to do things could be quite sexy if you got tits as on ur avatar

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

Your mistake was referring someone who took the time to read your 'story' as a lazy bitch. I think you lost any credibilty at that point.

ohh, you aint callin each other bicthes in here!?? cuz me and my friends use this world in a normal talk and it means no ofense lol, meant no ofense in the way i used it. If she pissed me off with what she said about my story i would just tell her "fuck off you fuking whore" that what i use when i am mad heh, call someone a bitch its still quite sexy!! and i love to use it.
English peeps with who i chat taught me to use it, blame them not me!

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Haven't you people figured it out yet? This is a guy fucking with you. This person just needs to fuck the hell off and leave us alone.

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

hehe I am a woman but think what you like

if you all wanna be usefull rather tell me how to remove the "virgin" shit under my alias lol, i am no virigin!! Dunno how the hell i get it in there

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

Haaaa!! That is so cool. Now somebody has to write a real story with this title.

Well mine suxed, so you write pervy one to show me how it should looks like?
Mine suxed in my own words, but you didn't get the point cuz u was too busy dishing my english lmao Perv would like what i have wrote even if my english suxed.. you know why?? cuz we love this dirty things. I spoke with many peeps, pervs and filthy bitches as I am and they always understand what I am saying, you too busy correct my mistakes instead trying understand the point of this story, of what I love to do etc, nvm

 

[tickledkitty]

Well mine suxed, so you write pervy one to show me how it should looks like?
Mine suxed in my own words, but you didn't get the point cuz u was too busy dishing my english lmao Perv would like what i have wrote even if my english suxed.. you know why?? cuz we love this dirty things. I spoke with many peeps, pervs and filthy bitches as I am and they always understand what I am saying, you too busy correct my mistakes instead trying understand the point of this story, of what I love to do etc, nvm

Oh, well, see, the thing is, I just don't care what you like. So I guess you're the one missing the point. This is a writer's forum, and this is a story feedback thread. If you didn't want feedback, then why post here? What makes you think the fact that you're a cyber whore and can put on a show in front of your cam is something that we'd all be interested in? It's not difficult to get that kind of attention. If your "peeps, pervs, and filthy bitches" (Oh my!) understand you, then please, by all means, go back to them and have a ball.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

ohh, you aint callin each other bicthes in here!?? cuz me and my friends use this world in a normal talk and it means no ofense lol, meant no ofense in the way i used it. If she pissed me off with what she said about my story i would just tell her "fuck off you fuking whore" that what i use when i am mad heh, call someone a bitch its still quite sexy!! and i love to use it.
English peeps with who i chat taught me to use it, blame them not me!

Well, go back to your friends.

 

[tickledkitty]

Well, go back to your friends.

Are you following me?

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

i see.. wrong site as i said

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Are you following me?

You weren't supposed to see me....

 

[CeriseNoire]

Thing is i didnt know you all will judge my english wich suck and do know it, i am working on making it better tho. If I knew it i wouldn't say a word lol :O
To my story... uhm, it suposed be just share of my experience i had in real life, wasnt meant to put it in book! I love stories on literotica site, but i wont post any anymore then hehe, will just keep reading urs profi ones, soz peeps.
ohh and with the callin u bitch i was just jokin btw, soz if u took it serious ..
I am a bad writer and a bad speaker as well, just wanted share with u what i like, uhm, bad idea it was soz

Well, let's assume you are actually learning English from some friends. They're obviously just teaching you poor slang at best. It reminds me of when we had exchange students in college, and people would teach them vulgarities instead of what they'd asked.

As for the 'bitch' thing, it's about context. Considering we aren't friends, or had even spoken here on Lit before, it was just out of place. Anyway, as I said, I had to learn English some years ago as well, so I'll blame it on being lost in translation.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

As for the 'bitch' thing, it's about context. Considering we aren't friends, or had even spoken here on Lit before, it was just out of place. Anyway, as I said, I had to learn English some years ago as well, so I'll blame it on being lost in translation.

Not only that, if they would have taken the time to read any of the threads, they would have realized that we don't go around calling each other "bitch".

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

I noticed you don't call each other bitches.. well i am really sorry. I never learned english in school so what i know i have learn from talking with my english friends on MSN. Thing is we are friends so they don't mind if my english suck a bit if u know what i mean? I am kinda happy i can say what i'd like to say. They always understand even if my gramar is crap.

About the story i posted... Think it was my crap english again why i posted it where i posted it :/ This wasn't mean to be any serious post and i wanst asking for peeps to love it. I just wanted write a story about my experiences with sex, thought i can in here.. Thought some kind of peeps like me might like it, oh well

 

[CeriseNoire]

I noticed you don't call each other bitches.. well i am really sorry. I never learned english in school so what i know i have learn from talking with my english friends on MSN. Thing is we are friends so they don't mind if my english suck a bit if u know what i mean? I am kinda happy i can say what i'd like to say. They always understand even if my gramar is crap.

About the story i posted... Think it was my crap english again why i posted it where i posted it :/ This wasn't mean to be any serious post and i wanst asking for peeps to love it. I just wanted write a story about my experiences with sex, thought i can in here.. Thought some kind of peeps like me might like it, oh well

Well, like I said, maybe those friends are not the best to learn English from. Even without looking at the grammar, it's mostly "street language". Anyway, this part of the board is for feedback on stories. Maybe try the role play forum or the general board to share experiences Or maybe you can find someone on the personals board who'd like to swap stories with you.

 

[BiaTcHiNFiRe]

okay, than you

 

[Lezbosexual]

Now I remember why I don't usually bother with this form, it's full of humourless, elitist saddos

Don't listen to these people Biatchinfire. I'm english, I realised you obviously weren't as I started reading your story, but could easily understand, and quite enjoyed it.

Can't believe the attitude of people on here, "Oooh I can't live without perfect paragraphs and oh my god theres a comma out of place!" get a life you sex starved bores!

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Now I remember why I don't usually bother with this form,(should be forum) it's full of humourless, elitist saddos(you forgot the period)

Don't listen to these people(insert comma here) Biatchinfire. I'm english(English a proper noun, and needs to be capitalized), I realised you obviously weren't as I started reading your story, but could easily understand, and quite enjoyed it.

Can't believe the attitude of people on here(Fragmented sentence), "Oooh I can't live without perfect paragraphs(insert comma) and oh my god theres a comma out of place!" get a life you sex starved bores (New sentences should be capitalized.)!

Thank you for you opinion.