On-going challenge: Lift a Line

Altered Guidelines: the hommondori-

Thank you to all who played along! Some terrific poems came out of this challenge. Want to go again? I have tweaked the challenge:

Challenge:

UPDATED CRITERIA!

This thread will now be reserved for:

hommondori- HOME-MON-DOOR-EE J: the direct borrowing or taking over of a passage from an older work more or less as it was. When done in English the section is positioned under the title and poet’s name, set aside in italics with the original author’s name. It is a method of giving homage or recognition for the inspiration for a work.

1. I will lift a line from a poem * and post it here at the rate of 1 per week.
If you choose, post a line from any poet anywhere any who, you don't have to use my suggested line.

2. Post poems here for review/comment/critique (please not if you do not want a critique.) This can be done all of a sudden passion impromptu brainstorm etc if you choose of course.

3. If you choose, submit it to lit the following Monday (or whenever you want)


Reason for changing criteria--

1. It is distracting to have italics embedded in the poem and to have the footnotes. Sure it is cool for the challenge, but if anyone wanted to go further with the poem-- outside lit-- it would be difficult to accomplish.

2. Not everyone will be moved by the quote I select, and do not want this to be an exclusive thread.*


*Please pm me with ideas for new first lines you think would be good features.
 
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Hommondori #1 lifted from Liar

with Liar's approval:

There And Back Again
by Liar ©


"It will always be like this,
one blessing at the cost
of one curse."



hommondori- HOME-MON-DOOR-EE J:
the direct borrowing or taking over of a passage from an older work more or less as it was. When done in English the section is positioned under the title and poet’s name, set aside in italics with the original author’s name. It is a method of giving homage or recognition for the inspiration for a work.


Let's see what we can do with this, shall we?

Play nice, try to post it here by next Monday.

:)
 
I didn't want you to think that I had forgotten. I am just at a point where I have to wait for more inspiration. I had been thinking of a sonnet, but now I don't know. This is where I am so far: :(

A Number For Not Quite Yet

Invent a number for not quite yet - line from left alone words by Doug G., aka 2Rivers

What's the number of might have been
and all those things that didn't win
the possibles of "just not now"
wrinkles left on a dead god's brow.

Infinities of never was
The aleph five of just. . . "because".
A Big Bang swirl that didn't stir
I wonder if they really were

???
???
???
???

Why's it so easy to forget,
the multitude of not quite yet.
 
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today? tomorrow? a week? a month?
when will the emotions fade,
calm serenity return?
a kiss, a touch, a whispered word...
how many days will be enough?
one, ten, a hundred?
when will the memories of you no longer
fill my heart and dreams?
a lover, a friend, a wife...
invent a number for not quite yet
and thats when I'll be ready
no matter how much time's flown by



The line invent a number for not quite yet is from the poem "left alone words" by 2Rivers.
 
with Liar's approval:

There And Back Again
by Liar ©


"It will always be like this,
one blessing at the cost
of one curse."

The Fates

The hags gathered around the pot
and tormented poison toads
as they dangled them over the hot,
hot fire, and muttered ancient, celtic codes.

The first looked down, through squinty eye
and stirred the fomented brew,
"There's trouble cooking in this pot and I
"think I'll call it Poet's Stew."

The second shook in some summer frost
and tried to bestow her witchy worst
"It will always be that a blessing cost
a sometimes subtle curse."


The third grunted, "S'all true, I suppose."
and stroked her whiskered chin
"This one shall have a lovely rose
and this one, the shit it grew in."
 
Reltne said:
I didn't want you to think that I had forgotten. I am just at a point where I have to wait for more inspiration. I had been thinking of a sonnet, but now I don't know. This is where I am so far: :(

A Number For Not Quite Yet

Invent a number for not quite yet - line from left alone words by Doug G., aka 2Rivers

What's the number of might have been
and all those things that didn't win
the possibles of "just not now"
wrinkles left on a dead god's brow.

Infinities of never was
The aleph five of just. . . "because".
A Big Bang swirl that didn't stir
I wonder if they really were

??? If you can find the clues for me
??? If you can warp reality
??? Then nevermore will be here now
??? to soothe the wrinkled dead god's brow

Why's it so easy to forget,
the multitude of not quite yet.

Very nice Reltne. I see a different side of you here, and I like it. Mine's a meager offering (toss it if you like), but it's well intended. Does that count, or is it politically incorrect in some way?
 
I thought the line from Liar's poem would have stimulated more replies than mine.

Bump!
 
champagne1982 said:
I thought the line from Liar's poem would have stimulated more replies than mine.

Bump!


me too and I dropped the ball, sorry I will pick it up and run with it, but Happy New Year! Kids are home...

I did one in passion, have to work it up and put it here....

Thanks Champ for the bump
 
There is, apparently, a fine poetic tradition of line lifting. I just finished reading a very interesting article, A Brief History of Appropriative Writing. Ted Berrigan wrote a poem "cento: a note on Philosophy," in which every one of the 58 lines is borrowed from a different poem. That sounds fascinating. I must find that poem.

There's also interesting info on how some poets credit the writers from whom they borrow.
 
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