Review: Stories by RedLegoDragon

[DarkSollat]

The new @RedLegoDragon 's story is up -> A Fertile Competition. I experienced a brief setback with reading, as Lit posted the work at 8AM instead of usual 7AM so I didn't noticed till afternoon, but I'm back on track.

When it comes to general themes, usually RLD has been alterating between silly works and serious ones. AFC seemed to belong to the former category, same as Wet Hot Eroshire Summer Ch.01, so it looked like the cycle was broken. But in fact, it didn't, because it turned out despite the overaching art (a competition who'll manage to get Alexa pregnant) is silly as fuck, each of the main four sex scene has rather serious tone. For two - Jacob's and Logan's - it straight up therapy sessions, while for the other two - Kyle's and Leona's - it was about making their sordid dreams come true. And don't get me wrong - sex were pretty solid too, and quite silly as well, but to be honest, pretty solid isn't what RLD accustomed me to - I expected something great. In fact, I was enjoying psychological aspect over sexual one. Same may be said about further DP threesomes scenes.

The work however starts with Alexa being worried if her husband knows their daughter isn't his - it was quite fun. But then comes the main twist and it's... weird af - tbh I know what the characters' deals are, but what they tried to get during this particular scene, I don't know. Next fucking session is also weird and I felt slightly uncomfortable reading it while I doubt it was RLD's intention. Also, as always, there was editorial mistakes every beta reader would catch on (misspelling Alessa name, Kyle and Mark's bet described on two separate occassions with different details, two dialogues about Leona having the same plastic surgeon as Alexa between the same characters one page away).

But, despite this work as a whole is only OK, there is one scene which stands proudly side by side with RLD's best: the scene of Leona and Alexa cumming together - it beats analogical scene from A Fertile Opportunity in my books. The second place belongs to the start of Jacob's scene, when he fucks Alexa in some creepy but hot manner.

 

[RedLegoDragon]

Thank you for the review!

I'd like to say every conflicting detail is deliberately calculated by a skilled writer. However, in this case I'm just a dumbass!

 

[DarkSollat]

New @RedLegoDragon story Cursed is now on, so here's the review.

In fact, this is hard for me to write this review. Because even if the story has sex in it, it's not really a sex story. I know, Three's a Crowd or Get Cucked! also had complicated plots, but sex in them were hot, lusty, and erotic (even in case of Dani and Jake, however weird it is - but it was the same for the characters, so I'm forgiven). Here's, sex scene is mostly... awkward? concerning? And don't get me wrong, it fits the overall theme, characters involved, and their relationship, so there is a certain... appeal in it. I'm just saying that if you want something to beat your meat to, Cursed probably won't do the work. Or maybe it will, I'm not kinkshaming (not after some works I've read on AO3). And also, there is a small segment of this sex scene which is - for me - genuinelly hot, so maybe I'm into weird shit too. (Not maybe. I am.)

What really works in this story though, are characters. Erith is in fact more likeable than Erin, and also chances are that she's better than sex than her sister. Nathan is for sure creep, but a creep, this story needed, and it pains me that people with his views exist irl too. Just please, don't call him/them an incel. Incel is just a shortcut for involuntary celibate; I'm an incel, and probably many other guys here. It's so called pill ideologies the problem, so call them pillers when the potential sequel hook will come into life. Secondary cast is also OK.

On weak points, I don't think a moral of this story really delivers. It should be that sex isn't the most important thing in life, but I don't think that Eroshire as a whole support it even a little. Like, Erin was literally unhappy until she started having proper sex, so when the sentence above come from her, it sounds hypocritical as fuck. The secondary moral is that sex is only good with at least temporary relation and no, I'm not buying it here. I could agree that it's better, but I seriously doubt if Brad, Kyle, or Erin really needs connection to have a great fuck, not even beginning with the likes like Alexa or Theo. (Just to be clear: I believe in both irl, but we're talking the fictional universe and its denizens.) But maybe it's a soft reboot, who knows.

Ah, this work has the marathon ofc, but this time it's more emotional than lustful. Not a bad thing itself, but still - nothing to make my dick flutter.

Summarizing, Cursed was for sure an interesting read, much different than the rest of Eroshire. It's not bad, but I won't probably be coming back to it.