The Monthly Poetry Challenge - March 2007

[AChild]

wildsweetone

Thanks for the challenge and thanks for the critique. I read it without it and it does sound better. haha

really thanks. Who's doing the challenge for this month.

 

[Eluard]

Eluard, i really liked the poetry in this poem. i do have a couple of thoughts...
what is the wing from? it doesn't appear to be mentioned elsewhere in the poem. also, the diver seems to confuse me, i can't get a good image of what you are wanting me to see - that is possibly my own fault as i don't know much about diving, water or sky. thanks for joining the challenge. *smile*

The wing is from "the holy spirit" in the usual shape of a dove. The diving image is from falling backwards/leaning against a tree (as divers sometimes fall out backwards) and then continuing in a free-fall. I agree that these things are obscure. Cheers for the comment.