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Ah lurve you! :rose:



I don't have any cuntal hair to dye *sniggers*

....wouldn't it be a bit dodgy skin wise to dye one's cuntal hair anyway? *ponders*

You are making me laugh, and my daughter keeps looking at me like I'm nuts.

Yes, dodgy. Painful, possibly. Hmmm...must Google.
 
Ahem. Who'da thunk it? :confused:

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damn, there goes my fantasy of being a cuntal blonde.

:mad:
 
if they had a proper red one I could grow out and have collars and cuffs to match thus fooloing people into thinking me a real red head :D
 
I see you didn't like it and I editted it a bit so it could be more comfortable to read
 
I see you didn't like it and I editted it a bit so it could be more comfortable to read

Even assuming it's true, it still reads badly. I'm rubbish at editing but from the first paragraph it's pants. My suggestion is beg a good editor to knock it into shape.
 
I see you didn't like it and I editted it a bit so it could be more comfortable to read

Gee thanks. Now I got to see this line:
"[She peeled] my skin back and some pre-cum globs appeared on its piss-hole"

As much of a /d/eviant as I may be that's just not something I want to read, and frankly I can't imagine anyone who would.
 
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Gee thanks. Now I got to see this line:
"[She peeled] my skin back and some pre-cum globs appeared on its piss-hole"

As much of a /d/eviant as I may be that's just not something I want to read, and frankly I can't imagine anyone who would.

Don't be cuntal. That line is not new. Pretty sure it was there before. That peeling skin thing sounds painful though, doesn't it? I'm picturing it being like a banana.
 
Gee thanks. Now I got to see this line:
"[She peeled] my skin back and some pre-cum globs appeared on its piss-hole"

As much of a /d/eviant as I may be that's just not something I want to read, and frankly I can't imagine anyone who would.

I think he's probably uncut:rolleyes:

I'm quite a fan of pre-cum so I wouldn't mind reading it, but it's getting through the rest of it...
 
I see you didn't like it and I editted it a bit so it could be more comfortable to read

Well it's positive that you at least came back and took a bit of the advice that was given to heart. There is a lot more though that you ignored.

I see that you crank out stories at a pretty high rate over at the Story Ideas Forum. You might want to consider focusing on quality over quantity. Otherwise there's not much of a point in coming to story feedback, as there's a lot that needs fixing with the story you posted.



Don't be cuntal. That line is not new. Pretty sure it was there before. That peeling skin thing sounds painful though, doesn't it? I'm picturing it being like a banana.

*shudders*
 
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