yeishia
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Hello Veroe
As we do not have an OOC thread and I fear my Last PM has gone astray, I thought I would try running this by you here before finishing up my post for Inferno which is almost done.
In inferno even though Rose is not Aware of the hidden cameras, of course I shall be playing to her hidden voyeur unaware. I am going to have her do a very slow mediative salutation to the sun which I thought is something they could do together later on much like the tai chi he did with his former sub. Think the picture you posted of the man and woman exercising face to face. I will include a link to a video.
Any ways my question has to do with how I am ending the post. After she has changed and done her pre-sleep routine she climbs into bed and had a dream/ nightmare.( I shall not give away the context of the actual dream here)
In the is dream it will be very obvious she is tied to a bed. At the end she will be screaming hysterically.
I could leave it there, however I was thinking as Dom will be watching all of this he may rush in the room to try and bring her down.
May I write for your character a tiny bit...saying that he does indeed do this this?
I would write that the timber of the hands pressing into her shoulders changes, the smell changes...her eyes fly open and the image of her tormenter is superimposed with that of Dom's . She struggles to unsuccessfully escape from the dream still fighting.
I would leave it there so you have control of what happens next.
I could post that and if you do not like it ...edit.
What do you think?
I know my writing is still very rusty which is why I wanted feedback on my last post. I went ahead any ways writing this and am almost finished.I just have to write the ending then post.
Goodness, I hope you like it.
I wanted you to know that I am very excited to be writing with you again. For good or bad this post and my last one almost wrote themselves .
As we do not have an OOC thread and I fear my Last PM has gone astray, I thought I would try running this by you here before finishing up my post for Inferno which is almost done.
In inferno even though Rose is not Aware of the hidden cameras, of course I shall be playing to her hidden voyeur unaware. I am going to have her do a very slow mediative salutation to the sun which I thought is something they could do together later on much like the tai chi he did with his former sub. Think the picture you posted of the man and woman exercising face to face. I will include a link to a video.
Any ways my question has to do with how I am ending the post. After she has changed and done her pre-sleep routine she climbs into bed and had a dream/ nightmare.( I shall not give away the context of the actual dream here)
In the is dream it will be very obvious she is tied to a bed. At the end she will be screaming hysterically.
I could leave it there, however I was thinking as Dom will be watching all of this he may rush in the room to try and bring her down.
May I write for your character a tiny bit...saying that he does indeed do this this?
I would write that the timber of the hands pressing into her shoulders changes, the smell changes...her eyes fly open and the image of her tormenter is superimposed with that of Dom's . She struggles to unsuccessfully escape from the dream still fighting.
I would leave it there so you have control of what happens next.
I could post that and if you do not like it ...edit.
What do you think?
I know my writing is still very rusty which is why I wanted feedback on my last post. I went ahead any ways writing this and am almost finished.I just have to write the ending then post.
Goodness, I hope you like it.
I wanted you to know that I am very excited to be writing with you again. For good or bad this post and my last one almost wrote themselves .
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