What I Wrote and Why: orgasms

[AG31]

Just a wild guess here: are you a man?

 

[countdowntolov3]

My problem is, I sometimes use the Big O as a plot point of sorts, not just a scene climax.

Good point. I actually thought about addressing it in my first post, but I didn't want to muddy the waters by saying too much stuff at once.

I do think you're right that many (most, all?) of the things we're talking about in this thread:

A) Are only true when you want to make orgasm a climax of the scene. Which is the case often enough, given the naturally climatic nature of orgasms (especially for men), but certainly not always.

B) Are not really specific to orgasms. They could be applied to any event the author wanted to highlight. Sometimes when I'm writing sex it's a particular act I want to highlight, and I think I use basically the same hey-reader-slow-down-and-listen-up for that.

 

[countdowntolov3]

(Honest truth, I have no idea of this. Just sounded good.)

How do I make this my post signature?

 

[jehoram]

Well, a satisfying orgasm is a great way to leave a stroke story. When they're done, the reader's done, too.

For more elaborate stories, I like to dwell on the afterglow, even if it's the next morning when the MC remembers that climax.

My own observation is that when the story is written from the viewpoint of a male MC (whether or not the author is a man), the orgasm is the end of the scene or the story. But when the story is written from the viewpoint of a female MC (whether or not the author is a woman), the orgasm is usually followed by a meditation on the quality of the orgasm or the intimacy of the person she's with.

 

[StillStunned]

Bumping this thread as an example of a WIWAW.

 

[AlexFourways]

Very Interesting - and not at all Supid (cf Rowan and Martin's Laugh-In)
I posted elsewhere and included in my The Delight is in the Detail? WIWAW 24 Submission, I have done both vocalised and described orgasms (principally female as I tend to write from that POV). Now all of the above discussion seems to be the described version (which is what I now tend to do) rather than vocalised (which I thought was normal from reading other stories). So which is better, or are either OK.
To save people looking up the above entry (that spends most of the time talking about character descriptions).
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Inspired by the likes of Joanmcarthy, my early stories tended to have the female orgasm* written like this... from The Wrong Person

Alex reached up and started to play with my tits, massaging and tweaking my nipples ... . All this stimulation was quickly driving me to another orgasm.

"OHHHH AALLLEEEXXX... FUUUCCCKKK! HHOOLLY FUCKKKKIIINNGGG FFFFUUUCCCCKKK!!!"

As I screamed and shook, I could see the look on Alex's face and he also trembled and his dick surged with another of his semi-orgasms.

The disadvantage for this for me as an author is keeping the sense of the orgasm similar without being to repetitive.

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But latterly I have changed style, again inspired by other authors to something like this... from 1x: To Fool a Nerd and a Geek

Having got him responding to my needs, he rode me to another orgasm and as I screamed, I know not what, and spasmed and thrashed, but Dav just held me whilst I passed through nirvana.

As my breathing steadied, he gently kissed my mouth and then he bent down to kiss my breasts as he started to slowly move in and out of me.

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There are examples that lie between the two extremes.

 

[TheGreatOz]

In my last story I wrote about 8k words setting the scene with gradually then rapidly escalating intimacies as my main character fell under the spell of her roommate then another 1500 or so with their first sexual contact, about 500 devoted to the first orgasm. With the long lead up I wanted to dwell on the orgasm, sort of like a reader reward but also because it was closing off that part of the story and marking a huge fundamental leap in the dynamic between the two girls.

Emily's breathing is even faster again now, more ragged. Her pussy has swelled and reddened, engorged with excitement.

It sounds stupid but I only now realise my Goddess is going to cum. That I'm going to make her cum. My work, my duty, my devotion. It's going to happen because of me and I am filling with elation and almost giddiness at the thought.

She is starting to soar, climbing towards peaking.

I feel it... I feel it... I feel it in her body. I feel her cunt tightening on my fingers. I feel it in her hips starting to jerk, her grip on my head, the tautness of her thighs around my face. Her body is talking to me. Her clit is swelling even harder under my busy tongue.

I have wondered before what she would be like while cumming. Demure and quiet and ladylike was my guess.

Wrong!

She is a loud, foul mouthed dirty talking screamer!

She is nearly there now and the flow of words starts.

"Oh fuck... oh fucking fuck monkey... oh God lick that cunt, lick my fuckhole you little yellow slut. Oh God get your slutty tongue up there, fuck fuck oh God... oh you dirty little whore, fuck... oh God... oh fucking God... I'm going to cum... oh fucking lick it you little cunt... fuck fuck oh fuck, oh God... oh fucccckkkkk..."

And then she is there and I am right there riding her waves with her and she is thrashing and jerking and holding me tightly to her red hot cunt and there is nothing in the world but me and her and her taste and her smell and her juices... and I wish this moment, this perfect moment, would never end... and her thighs are tight around my face and she is moaning and the spasms are racing through her and she is babbling... then...

and then she is going again... climbing again... cumming again, foul mouthed again and moaning about the slutty Chinese whore still slurping on her clit... and I am lost, hopelessly lost in cunt and happiness... and I am sucking her clit hard and working a third finger up her drooling fuckhole... and I lick and slurp and nuzzle while she jerks about and moans, with waves of pleasure that I gave her surging through her... and please there is nothing I wouldn't give to be trapped in this moment forever in perfect communion with my Goddess... trapped in joy knowing that Goddesses are real and Paradise is real and that this monkey's gone to Heaven and that nothing in my life has ever meant more to me than this...

The last spasms end... I feel all the tension drain from her body.. she is like a limp doll now, thighs relaxed, her cunt no longer tightly pulsing around my fingers. Her hand rests lightly on my head, she strokes my hair gently now. Her breathing slows, eases.

"Oh my God, that was huge."

“No clit now. Sensitive.”

I stop my licking.

She has turned slightly. My head is resting on her thigh like a pillow. I am gazing into her cunt.

How silly it was of me to be afraid of this beautiful cunt I'm now staring dreamily into! I cover her pussy lips with soft gentle kisses and licks. Soft tender little smooches for the gates of Paradise.

I like that she is waxed. She's so smooth against my face. I rub my face in her.

“Mmmm, I like that.”

We are quiet. Not awkward, relaxed and happy. She is spent. I don't need to ask if I did good. She doesn't need to ask if I enjoyed doing that. We both know the truth. We were there. We lie there together for a while.

“Go to your own bed now Monkey. I'm going to sleep now.”

 

[lit_ch3]

If you do it real well, the reader gets off way before they get to the orgasm paragraph.

(Honest truth, I have no idea of this. Just sounded good.)

If the scene is set, and the writing is good, I sometimes get off before the sex really starts!

 

[lit_ch3]

To all that are contributing their writings here: These are all really hot. Thank you. Wish I'd found this a while ago.

 

[StillStunned]

This reminds me: I was going to rework and update this WIWAW for publication story-side.