A7inchPhildo
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Dranoel,
"Smegma prob'ly wouldn't help either." When I think Smegma I think of a white paste kind of like a yeast infection. Even if the readers like it, the writer don't. LOL, but thanks.
dirtylover,
'my sticky love potion', Or 'my excitement' That ain't all that bad.
Lime,
Tumescence? Noun 1. tumescence - tumidity resulting from the presence of blood or other fluid in the tissues.
"A" for effort! Who in their right mind is going to recognize such a word? "I never said I was in my right mind." Just a little over the top for an average reader.
myHoney,
honey is a sweet way to imply an active description. As Dirtylover mentioned it is a metaphore, a really common metaphore I might add. Perhaps with the addition of dew for honey dew it may be what a girl would refer to the fluid as.
I don't know why but someplace in my mind honey is a slang derogative term used by young men to describe a meaningless girl's wetness to their buddies. That works in most situations, just not this exact one. But I will consider it for alternate places to help.
Elizabetht,
Hi Elizabeth, 'slave oil', 'her oils' Wicked cool! I like this a lot. More so 'her feminine/silky oil/oils' I can picture this clear and to the point.
mismused,
If I write it in Latin or French do you think I will recieve the same feedback? I do like the Humix word it kind of has a Hummer and Felix feel to it. Honestly all I can think of is hummus and that is good on crackers and all, but...
Sshafer,
"I think some one reading your story will catch your drift." I am sure they will, but calling it duck butter, or the like passion piss. Places an entire different feeling into the story than even say tender loving excretions.
dr. M,
I agree Lube and wetness are my number one picks. The broken record is haunting me though. Exudation that could also be, transudation.
excrescence does exist. Not as you intended it;
Noun 1. excrescence - something that bulges out or is protuberant or projects from a form
`What has he done with his money.' asked a red-faced gentleman with a pendulous excrescence on the end of his nose, that shook like the gills of a turkey-cock.
A Christmas Carol by Dickens, Charles
herecomestherain,
Thank you for the post. I found the thread to be insighful. I even grabbed a few ideas from it.
Thank you to everyone, I have learned quite a bit from all your imput. I plan on utilizing several of the ideas so I can go back and make some alterations through out the stories. With your good help maybe the stories will entertain the readers other than with circus like repeating words.
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
You get the point!
Phil
"Smegma prob'ly wouldn't help either." When I think Smegma I think of a white paste kind of like a yeast infection. Even if the readers like it, the writer don't. LOL, but thanks.
dirtylover,
'my sticky love potion', Or 'my excitement' That ain't all that bad.
Lime,
Tumescence? Noun 1. tumescence - tumidity resulting from the presence of blood or other fluid in the tissues.
"A" for effort! Who in their right mind is going to recognize such a word? "I never said I was in my right mind." Just a little over the top for an average reader.
myHoney,
honey is a sweet way to imply an active description. As Dirtylover mentioned it is a metaphore, a really common metaphore I might add. Perhaps with the addition of dew for honey dew it may be what a girl would refer to the fluid as.
I don't know why but someplace in my mind honey is a slang derogative term used by young men to describe a meaningless girl's wetness to their buddies. That works in most situations, just not this exact one. But I will consider it for alternate places to help.
Elizabetht,
Hi Elizabeth, 'slave oil', 'her oils' Wicked cool! I like this a lot. More so 'her feminine/silky oil/oils' I can picture this clear and to the point.
mismused,
If I write it in Latin or French do you think I will recieve the same feedback? I do like the Humix word it kind of has a Hummer and Felix feel to it. Honestly all I can think of is hummus and that is good on crackers and all, but... Sshafer,
"I think some one reading your story will catch your drift." I am sure they will, but calling it duck butter, or the like passion piss. Places an entire different feeling into the story than even say tender loving excretions.
dr. M,
I agree Lube and wetness are my number one picks. The broken record is haunting me though. Exudation that could also be, transudation.
excrescence does exist. Not as you intended it;
Noun 1. excrescence - something that bulges out or is protuberant or projects from a form
`What has he done with his money.' asked a red-faced gentleman with a pendulous excrescence on the end of his nose, that shook like the gills of a turkey-cock.
A Christmas Carol by Dickens, Charles
Excellent point indeed, thank you. That is why you are an author, and I just play one at Lit. I would have never caught that glitch the way I was thinking.
herecomestherain,
Thank you for the post. I found the thread to be insighful. I even grabbed a few ideas from it.
Thank you to everyone, I have learned quite a bit from all your imput. I plan on utilizing several of the ideas so I can go back and make some alterations through out the stories. With your good help maybe the stories will entertain the readers other than with circus like repeating words.
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
Pete and Repeat were out in a boat. Pete fell off who was left?
You get the point!
Phil
