Broken Wings

[Guest]

Round and round, round and down;
Seems that's how it's supposed to be.
Spinnin', spinnin', shakin' free -
Seems that's all that happens to me...

Seein' smiles as they span those miles;
I guess I find some kind of piece of mine.
But if that's true, then why these fears -
I've cried so long, so many tears...

And I get 'em;
And they fly...
I fix their broken wings -
Just to watch 'em fly...

And when at last my work is done;
I'm in love, but I'm the only one.
Now I'm off to chase again -
A broken wing, I think I'll make me a friend...

 

[Suzi]

Round and round, round and down;
Seems that's how it's supposed to be.
Spinnin', spinnin', shakin' free -
Seems that's all that happens to me...

Seein' smiles as they span those miles;
I guess I find some kind of piece of mine.
But if that's true, then why these fears -
I've cried so long, so many tears...

And I get 'em;
And they fly...
I fix their broken wings -
Just to watch 'em fly...

And when at last my work is done;
I'm in love, but I'm the only one.
Now I'm off to chase again -
A broken wing, I think I'll make me a friend...

So sad! I am feeling depressed myself...just broke up with someone and....well nevermind.

Only thing I have to say is: spelling

"I guess I find some kind of piece of mine" should be peace of mind dear friend! I leave the real criticizing to Senna Jawa; he is adept at that. I for one understand how you feel. If you ever need to talk....and have yahoo messenger, add me as astrol64, ok?

Suzi

 

[phoriner]

The line "I guess I find some kind of piece of mine" is correct; it references "smiles" from the line before.

 

[Senna Jawa]

This reminds me strongly of a disco song from the early eighties.

BTW, instead of "piece" it should be "peace", I think. I am not sure though.

Regards,

 

[WickedEve]

I especially like your first stanza.

 

[phoriner]

Piece

Senna;

"piece of mine" refers to smiles in the line before...this is a truism of this world that people you help invariably move on from your life...I wrote this about a cretain individual but it has proven to be my most popular song from my first CD...

 

[Hot4Heels]

I got the disco feel aswell but that is not a bad thing it means there was actually some kind of meter involved.

 

[dragonhearted]

*sigh*

What a fateful day this was......the day I changed my name....and the day I met someone who proved to not be a friend to me at all.....

 

[WickedEve]

Re: *sigh*

What a fateful day this was......the day I changed my name....and the day I met someone who proved to not be a friend to me at all.....

More details, please. I'm confused, and I'm confused often -- and I don't like it.

 

[dragonhearted]

ooooooooohh

he led me to think he was interested in getting to know me...date me...maybe even fuck me... Now he seems to be most happily involved with someone (stated in his sig. line...and he is stated in hers!) Till then, he complained about not being able to find anyone. I live in Maine, he lives in NH! I guess he's just out of my league!

 

[littlekateyes]

 

[Rybka]

Re: ooooooooohh

he led me to think he was interested in getting to know me...date me...maybe even fuck me... Now he seems to be most happily involved with someone (stated in his sig. line...and he is stated in hers!) Till then, he complained about not being able to find anyone. I live in Maine, he lives in NH! I guess he's just out of my league!

We in New Hampshire do go "down" Maine.

Regards,                       Rybka

 

[dragonhearted]

Rybka........

but aren't you married or...not interested or something?

 

[sanjuaneros]

Re: Piece

Senna;

"piece of mine" refers to smiles in the line before...this is a truism of this world that people you help invariably move on from your life...I wrote this about a cretain individual but it has proven to be my most popular song from my first CD...

What is the name of the cd?

 

[phoriner]

Stalked

*~...interesting...~*

What ever happened to trust?

 

[littlekateyes]

Sorry wrong thread