Closure for your boyfriend

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danicanuck

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I have an idea for a story that I'm not sure if I can write well or not. The idea is myself and my boyfriend run into his ex girlfriend that he had before me. It's an awkward meeting because he never understood why she left him for another man and it's always haunted him. He's over her completely but his ego doesn't let him move on 100%. For the rest of the night his mood has changed and I finally bring it up. He admits how it eats at him because the guy seemed like such an arrogant and pompous jerk. He was decent looking but not a Brad Pitt or George Clooney. So I ask if he knows where this guy is today and he says yes more than likely. We go to the bar where he hangs out and he is there. I size him up to get an opinion. I think he is handsome enough and in good shape but he's nothing overly attractive. My boyfriend isn't satisfied and I make him an offer. I see how he is hitting on all the pretty women and feel I could his attention easily enough in my little skirt and heels. I suggest I let him pick me up and take me back to our condo. My boyfriend scoffs at the idea at first but then puts a plan together. He could go home now and set up the small camera he has in the living room and watch from the car in the underground parking. When he has seen enough he can call my cell phone and I will make an excuse for the guy to leave. I find it very exciting and agree to play along. He stresses to keep going until he calls. So I go over and be flirty and it doesn't take long for him to make his move. My boyfriend is gone and I quickly start seeing what his ex saw in him. He is extremely confidant and smooth. He has me eating out of his hand after a few drinks and I invite him home. We go back to the condo as planned and sit in the living room. I'm so anxious from having him there and knowing the phone will ring. I go to the kitchen and get us drinks. While I am in there he sees my phone and decides there will be no interruptions and turns it off. My boyfriend can't believe his eyes and can't stop anything unless he comes upstairs and sees him face to face which he doesn't want to do. I return and we proceed to kiss and he reaches up my top. I can't understand why my boyfriend hasn't called but do as I was told and let him go. He breaks the kiss and I am completely overwhelmed by him. He knows it and my boyfriend can see it too. He casually undoes his pants and pulls out a very hard penis, I understand fully now. It's beautiful and I want it. He motions for me to go for it and I glance at the phone one last time and nothing. So I lean down and hungrily take it. This leads to energetic and controlling sex where he moves me around the room and leaves me tired and understanding.

Thoughts or takers for writing?
 
finally you find that your bf and that men are friends, they set you up! what a story.
 
There is a lot of different emotions to deal with as well. Guilt on top of lust from both the girlfriend and the boyfriend. They guy who is being "played" is really the innocent of it all. lol
 
Oh, and we didn't cover this, but this will be a Lit. story, not a private one. You do however, get to read it before I submit it. :)
 
Well, for those that were curious about this idea. It's in the final editing process and as soon as that's done I'll submit it, and when it posts I'll toss a link up this way.

Thanks to danicanuck for the great idea! It'll most likely be in the Exhib/Voyeur category.
 
OK, you can't write, but you could start by learning to use paragraphs. Good synopsis for a story, though
 
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OK, you can't write, but you could start by learning to use paragraphs. Good synopsis for a story, though

Well a big thanks to you. I agree I could take more time to use paragraphs and more commas, I see how you like them in your comment. :)
 
OK, you can't write, but you could start by learning to use paragraphs. Good synopsis for a story, though

Could you send me a link to your stories, please? I'd love to take a gander at them, perhaps I too and many others can learn from your expertise and suggestions.

If you don't have any stories here, maybe you have written a "How To" on how to properly submit an idea to the story idea forum, or a text book on properly structuring a paragraph.

I hope to learn more.

Thanks!

Red
 
Could you send me a link to your stories, please? I'd love to take a gander at them, perhaps I too and many others can learn from your expertise and suggestions.

If you don't have any stories here, maybe you have written a "How To" on how to properly submit an idea to the story idea forum, or a text book on properly structuring a paragraph.

I hope to learn more.

Thanks!

Red

You don't need any instruction from me; you're quite happy to read difficult-to-read copy.

My memo to Danicanuck was friendly advice and was taken pretty well by her. What's more, she's pledged to take up my suggestion
 
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