Dad team fucks his daughter with her boyfriend!

[BedtimeStories77]

How about this idea: the father and boyfriend get really carried away while double-teaming the girl and get to a point where they're betting on who will be the first to get her pregnant. They fuck her over and over again, each one not wearing any protection, trying to prove they can knock her up, thus making themselves the real Alpha male. It's a horny idea, I think, but perhaps not too realistic.

Should I include this?

I'd say that could work if you want to develop a "series". It seems a bit too busy for one submission at Lit with everything else you want to add to the story. But I have heard that impregnation stories in the Incest category are quite popular here if you have the dad "win".

 

[Texguy84]

I would make the story 1st person or 3rd person limited, Boyfriend's POV, since he's the one who's not "in on it" in regards to the arrangement between the father and daughter. Of course, you could also do the same thing from the daughter or dad's POV if you want it to be about them having fun fucking with the boyfriend (not to mention fucking eachother)

How about names? I think either "Jezebelle" for the girl or else we can go for something really innocent sounding, like Mary. The dad needs to have a strong sounding name, preferably short, like Frank or Brad. The boyfriend needs a very common name if we're going to make him the Everyman. John or Mike/Micheal come to mind.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

I think that's a good idea too, Texboy, if HotChip wants to delve into the boyfriend's thoughts/feelings during the story.

 

[thehotchip]

Yes, thanks for all comments! They're certainly giving me ideas for my writing!

I would like a scene fairly early in the story, which would be something of a "comedy" scene and also act as light relief from the main issues at hand. Because the girl initially refuses her boyfriend sex (as she's already getting it from her dad) the boyfriend gets really sexually frustrated. I was thinking maybe he gets to a point where he has to release the tension that's been building up over the weeks he's been dating his girl, and so in a rage he storms home and gets naked and humps something eg: a melon/ pillow/ or even the couch, and gets caught by his mum (or whoever) coming home from work earlier than expected.

It would just be a bit of fun and a naturla teenager thing, to break up main action. What do people think to this?

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Not sure if the story would be too "busy" bringing in the boy's mother as a character in a scene as well.

Maybe he starts to storm off since he's mad and sexually frustrated, but realizes he forgot his keys inside or something... So he walks back up to the house, and something catches his eye in the window. That's when he catches the girlfriend fucking her dad. He either is grossed out/pissed off and leaves. (Adding that conflict to the story.) Or maybe he stays and watches, giving him a chance for release as he masturbates at the window?