Do You Really Wanna Touch It?

Kassieme

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Hey read my poems on my webpage and tell me what you think!!! here is a sample one! Its not erotic but it is about love!!!

:heart: Your Love Surrounds Me :heart:



I was lost, pale and scared.

I was a hopeless case, then you appeared.

Then I was suffocating, but not from dying and despair.

But from your love.

Your love's like treasure hidden in a pirates cove.

It surrounds me, but unlike pirates I will never flee.

Its in my newfound smile, I havent done that in a while.

I dont care what the people say.

Because Im having so much fun living life your way.

Hot nights turning into days watching the sun rise.

Or cool relaxed days just gazing into your eyes.

Your love is all around.

For your love, I was bound.

Maybe its the fact I cant get you out of my head.

I have to keep those memories fed.

Or could it be - simply

that you love surrounds me.

Like skin or candy coated M&Ms

Your precious love is just there like jewels and gems.

I feel that my life is complete.

Haha! life look at me now, those twist and turns I did cheat.

No bumps and sharp turns with my newfound love.

I was on the path of a destructful life and he just fell from above.

Heaven sent, you might say.

HELL, he's my Savior in a way.

If you felt the way I did.

Like a lost little kid.

Just move around the path of life - you will see.

You too have love that surround you and me.
 
Too many words

Down at the end you have a nice beat going. Before that
it seemed to be prose that rhymes. The thoughts are nice
but edit the hell out of it. Then again what do I know. I
try to pick a flow and couldn't find one.
 
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