Freud and Hysteria

[TheWritingGroup]

Some advice that @ElectricBlue once gave me: they told me to be more visceral and sensory when I describe sex. Not "He caressed her until she came," but "His fingers traced slowly and gently down her outer lips, wakening her. He caressed her like this many times, each one more exciting than the last, while kissing her passionately. After that, he gently parted the outer lips to reveal the inner ones, now darkened and swollen and warm. He whispered, 'You are very beautiful down there,' then leaned in to lick her."

-Annie

 

[TruthSeeker12345]

Some advice that @ElectricBlue once gave me: they told me to be more visceral and sensory when I describe sex. Not "He caressed her until she came," but "His fingers traced slowly and gently down her outer lips, wakening her. He caressed her like this many times, each one more exciting than the last, while kissing her passionately. After that, he gently parted the outer lips to reveal the inner ones, now darkened and swollen and warm. He whispered, 'You are very beautiful down there,' then leaned in to lick her."

-Annie

You are right about being more descriptive. In the story I am working on now, I am trying to write it in a way that it evokes a visual picture of the story.