Laptop vs Phone

[LegendInMyOwnMind]

I'm new to writing for phones, I've always written on a laptop, for laptops, which is the only way I read. Here are two passages from a WIP that are my best understanding of:

1) Optimized for laptop

They met on Sunday, May 16th, 2020, at the Pasadena AllRite pharmacy. It was Thomas's birthday, so the date stuck. The tech behind the counter was new to him, but obviously not new there — she knew the place too well.

She read his prescription and pulled it from a low shelf. "Hello, fellow Taurus, if you believe that bullshit," she said. "30 on April 23rd."

2) Optimized for phone

They met on Sunday, May 16th, 2020, at the Pasadena AllRite pharmacy. It was Thomas's birthday, so the date stuck.

The tech behind the counter was new to him, but obviously not new there. She knew the place too well.

She read his prescription and pulled it from a low shelf.

"Hello, fellow Taurus, if you believe that bullshit," she said. "30 on April 23rd."

Both are in 3PO perspective. Note the difference, and this is for relatively short natural paragraphs.

With longer paragraphs, the difference is worse, How do you other authors manage this divide?

 

[briancamdudetenger2018]

what is better lol

laptop or cell phone

well its a actually a hard question

 

[Britva415]

Don’t worry about it.

People read e-books on phones all the time. There aren’t different e-books for phones versus tablets versus 89 inch televisions. And the e-book version doesn’t have different paragraphing than the print version. People who read fiction on their phone are used to this. Just format your story in the way that is most natural and serves the story best.