DreamInNoir
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The Apartment
Looking for an editor for long, slow burn story (novella-size) of approximately 29k words. This wil be my second published story on Lit.
Genres: Taboo/Incest, Brother/Sister, Romance
Requesting feedback on style, pace, voice, and overall thoughts on the work. Also, if you catch anything that screams needing changes for spelling/grammar.
Can send in .doc file or in Google Docs (it's too long to C&P into even two emails, sorry).
Short sample below, a page about one-third into the story...
Hours later, the sound of the lock clicking pulled Brian out of the half-sleep he was in on the couch in the dark. He heard muffled laughter and voices from the other side of the door before it opened.
Heels tapped on the linoleum alongside heavier footballs. The two people paused as the door closed. Whispers. The sweet, gentle laugh of a female joined the huskier chuckle of a male.
And then quiet. Too quiet. The rustle of hands on clothing. Slow. Intimate.
The wet sound of a soft kiss.
Brian sat up. “You’re late,” he said, annoyed.
Up to three paragraphs allowed on the forum per Lit guidelines.
EF Mod
Looking for an editor for long, slow burn story (novella-size) of approximately 29k words. This wil be my second published story on Lit.
Genres: Taboo/Incest, Brother/Sister, Romance
Requesting feedback on style, pace, voice, and overall thoughts on the work. Also, if you catch anything that screams needing changes for spelling/grammar.
Can send in .doc file or in Google Docs (it's too long to C&P into even two emails, sorry).
Short sample below, a page about one-third into the story...
Hours later, the sound of the lock clicking pulled Brian out of the half-sleep he was in on the couch in the dark. He heard muffled laughter and voices from the other side of the door before it opened.
Heels tapped on the linoleum alongside heavier footballs. The two people paused as the door closed. Whispers. The sweet, gentle laugh of a female joined the huskier chuckle of a male.
And then quiet. Too quiet. The rustle of hands on clothing. Slow. Intimate.
The wet sound of a soft kiss.
Brian sat up. “You’re late,” he said, annoyed.
Up to three paragraphs allowed on the forum per Lit guidelines.
EF Mod
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