My first story was just published!

[Flowgo]

Congrats! Very hot story. Enjoyable reading

 

[quietuk1]

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Any feedback welcomed and appreciated.

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-guest-room-3

Hi,

I gave you a 5* rating. It is a well rounded story. The sex descriptions hit the right tone and are a quite arousing.

Two minor points:

1. I think a little more description of Dave and how he knew Jenny well enough to discuss Lily would improve the scene setting; and

2. To me it would have been hotter if Dave had used Lily's name throughout. Using 'baby' jarred and felt off. In everything else Dave shows consideration for Lily.

But, really a great first effort.

Q

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[Djmac1031]

I thought it was very enjoyable and well written. Left a comment and 5 stars. Looking forward to reading more