I got the inspiration for the story and put my other story I was writing on hold. I have never written an abduction story that includes domination and training with a master slave theme to it. I started writing the story in the 1st person from the side of the abductor and soon to be master. Now I am contemplating writing the rest of the story from the slave's POV. Should I keep the story as is with it being from the POV of the master/dom or should I switch it up?
Need help, abduction story
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Cover all bases and write in the 3rd person.
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Do you have a moment to talk about 2P POV?
More seriously: personally I hate 1P POV stories with that shift POV. If you're going to tell multiple POVs, use 3P.
More seriously: personally I hate 1P POV stories with that shift POV. If you're going to tell multiple POVs, use 3P.
So you think I should scrap what I have, rewrite and tell it in the 2nd POV? Should there be a shift from master to slave in the POV?
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Ha, no! There are very few stories that work in 2P, even fewer writers who can make it work, and almost no-one who can agree on what 2P actually is.
I'd stay stick to 1P with a single POV, or else use close 3P. Or get artsy and write the same story twice, from two perspectives.
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You could write them as 2 separate chapters. As a suggestion.
From a reading perspective I hate stories which switch perspective mid flight. IE, In the same chapter.
When I see the perspectives flip, I drop out and stop reading. It bugs me, irritates me. If you're writing 1st person. Then write it, you can still include thoughts about what you think the other character is thinking...
Or if you want to speak from both chsaracters, write 3rd person. It would mean rewriting what you already have, but would solve your problem.
Or, you could just ignore all of us, who are really only offering opinions, and do what you want to do.
My advice.... Do what you feel most comfortable with.... You are the most important person in your story....
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From a reading perspective I hate stories which switch perspective mid flight. IE, In the same chapter.
When I see the perspectives flip, I drop out and stop reading. It bugs me, irritates me. If you're writing 1st person. Then write it, you can still include thoughts about what you think the other character is thinking...
Or if you want to speak from both chsaracters, write 3rd person. It would mean rewriting what you already have, but would solve your problem.
Or, you could just ignore all of us, who are really only offering opinions, and do what you want to do.
My advice.... Do what you feel most comfortable with.... You are the most important person in your story....
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It seems people in this thread really dislike switching 1st person POVs, but I'm a little partial to it because my favorite piece of my own writing uses it and I think I did it successfully enough. But because a lot of BDSM and NC/R categories (the categories I frequent) play with ideas of control, I do think that 3rd person can be inherently limiting and get confusing if you're unused to writing it.
Personally if I read a story with only one perspective change I'd find it odd.
Cagivagurl's suggestion is pretty solid, to have a separate POV for each chapter. But if you think that switching POV within your work or chapter adds enough to your writing, I would either (1) switch completely to 3rd person, or (2) add enough perspective switching so that you're telling a multi-faceted view of the whole story.
I chose to do the latter with my writing because I liked being able to play with what my characters know vs. don't know, as well as incorporate more of their thoughts, especially during sex and romance scenes. You do risk alienating readers who don't tolerate it, but of course it's your own art.
Personally if I read a story with only one perspective change I'd find it odd.
Cagivagurl's suggestion is pretty solid, to have a separate POV for each chapter. But if you think that switching POV within your work or chapter adds enough to your writing, I would either (1) switch completely to 3rd person, or (2) add enough perspective switching so that you're telling a multi-faceted view of the whole story.
I chose to do the latter with my writing because I liked being able to play with what my characters know vs. don't know, as well as incorporate more of their thoughts, especially during sex and romance scenes. You do risk alienating readers who don't tolerate it, but of course it's your own art.
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Just gonna weigh in to agree with the consensus that 3rd person is your best best if you're looking to write from multiple perspectives.
it also allows you to get inside both Master and Slave's head, explore their inner thoughts and feelings.
Switching between 1st person perspectives CAN be done, but it has to be done carefully and clearly or readers will quickly become confused.
transitions are also important; where in the story you swap perspectives and why.
its a fun experiment, I've done it for one story.
but 3rd person is definitely easier and less annoying to the average reader.
it also allows you to get inside both Master and Slave's head, explore their inner thoughts and feelings.
Switching between 1st person perspectives CAN be done, but it has to be done carefully and clearly or readers will quickly become confused.
transitions are also important; where in the story you swap perspectives and why.
its a fun experiment, I've done it for one story.
but 3rd person is definitely easier and less annoying to the average reader.
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There is no way to answer this question for you, because only you know what kind of story you want to tell, and we don't.
In most abduction stories, I think the story works better from the point of view of the abducted rather than the abductor. It's more dramatic, it involves more surprise, etc. But that doesn't have to be so. The abductor's point of view could be interesting, too.
Focus first on the story you want to tell, and then choose the POV that best tells that story.
I agree with those who say that most of the time multiple first person POV is not the way to go. If you want to tell the story from the POV of both abductor and abductee, do it in 3d person.
In most abduction stories, I think the story works better from the point of view of the abducted rather than the abductor. It's more dramatic, it involves more surprise, etc. But that doesn't have to be so. The abductor's point of view could be interesting, too.
Focus first on the story you want to tell, and then choose the POV that best tells that story.
I agree with those who say that most of the time multiple first person POV is not the way to go. If you want to tell the story from the POV of both abductor and abductee, do it in 3d person.
I agree and thats why I wanted to switch over. I just had the idea to explain the reasoning for the abductor before telling the events fom the other side.
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Here's a thought, which may or may not be helpful for your purposes. I think sometimes authors want to do too much, when they would be better off providing less not more. That can be true with perspective. Sometimes it's better NOT to disclose what everybody is thinking and everybody's perspective. In a murder mystery, we typically see only the detective's perspective, so part of the pleasure is learning the solution to the murder only as the detective does. In an erotic story, it's sometimes enjoyable to see an erotic experience unfolding through the eyes of just one of the characters, while the other character's perspective is something of a mystery. If you offer both perspectives, the elements of mystery and surprise may be gone. That may or may not matter to you.
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would stop right at the abduction and then finish the story in 2nd person from the abducted. The rest of the story would be her view point since I started with his in the 1st person.
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would stop right at the abduction and then finish the story in 2nd person from the abducted. The rest of the story would be her view point since I started with his in the 1st person.
I love the feedback that I am getting and am going to use it. I am going to write an intro in the 3rd person POV from the abductor side but then make what I wrote a journal entry before a new chapter and a switch to the abductor side in the 3rd person POV where I will finish the story. Maybe sometimes the simple is the best and I was trying too hard.
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Oh, my dear friend, @StillStunned, you've forgotten Millie's helpful hit about 2ND person. Don't use it!? Just don't go there.
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I've been there. I've seen things, things no writer should have to see...
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And then you shared them, you foul demon-spawn, you fucking shared them.
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I have successfully used split first person perspective. It might be a way to go for this story. 1st chapter is from his perspective, 2nd chapter from hers. Each chapter around 1200 words or more. I got very few complaints on it.
https://www.literotica.com/s/aunt-tina-recovering-slut-vol-01
https://www.literotica.com/s/aunt-tina-recovering-slut-vol-01
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And yet, you've learned nothing!
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I've also written the first half from one person's point of view, the second half from the others (actually covering the same incident), and then a 3rd person's conclusion. It isn't here, because it's a rape story that doesn't follow the rules for rape stories here.
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You begin reading the story. Suddenly, you realize it's a second-person tale, and you're the two-bit whore they are talking about. You wonder, when did you grow a pussy and lose your cock?
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I've also done this, but using pocket stories; stories within a story. Concept is two old friends catching up. The main story is told in 1P from the main characters POV with vignettes, also in first person, of each of them telling their own back story using 1P. It worked pretty well, I think. 4.75 with almost 12K views with the following snippet from one of the several positive comments:
"A wonderful story as always. I realy liked the different perspectives. It's surely a trick you should try again. ..."
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Millie, Don't tease me like that...
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For the record, my profile pic has always been a pussy.
