New Member: Story Suggestions (Meet Pixie)

[JayG88]

I think it's got to be done. I'm going to change the character's height from 5ft 1, to 5ft 5 (I think that makes her the same height and size as Pamela Anderson back in the day) so that should work better. So for any future readers she grows five inches between story 1 and 2!

 

[nikyc]

What you may want to keep in mind regarding measurements and precise details is that in the vast majority of readers, they just don't care. You got to ask yourself, what does it add to the story? Many times the answer is very little. Unless it's vital to the plot mentioning her cupzise at all can actually be, depending on how you do it, at best, a distraction, and at worst, a reader clicking away.

What do you have to gain by telling the reader her exact height as opposed to just saying she's tall or average height? Same with her breasts. By just mentioning she has large breasts(in a creative way) you allow the reader the use of their imagination, to project a 'desirable' image.

If her cupsize really is important to the story then that's fine too, but more often than not you will benefit from adding it in in a creative and not obvious shoehorning way. Like, for example, say you have a story about a guy who lends his friend his car. When he gets it back he finds an abandoned bra in the backseat. Curious as to who it might be he looks it over, reading the measurements on the tag. He has some fun with ribbing his friend, dropping the bra off so he can give it back to his lady friend. Once back home he decides to take a shower, only while in the bathroom he finds one of his sisters discarded bras on the floor. For some reason he decides the check the tag. Lo and behold, the exact same size as the one in the car. Coincidence, or the plot to a juicy story?

But yeah, that's just my 2 cents.

Oh and right, feet and inches to describe height. For those of us living in countries that don't use that system it means extra little seeing an exact measurement. Anything around six feet means tall to us and anything around five is average, so why not just use tall or average. Even then, if it's not important to the story it just doesn't matter and is nothing but a distraction.

At least that's my experience. Other's are surely different.

 

[JayG88]

For those of you who are interested, Pixie has made her debut on Literotica! I hope you enjoy it and I find it a 'stimulating' read! Thanks again for all your comments, advice and support. Much appreciated.

https://www.literotica.com/s/the-pixie-stories-01

 

[EquinoxRising]

Congrats! I love seeing stories come to life because of SI!

 

[Strangebuddy]

Hooray! Can't wait to give it a read

 

[frenchknickers]

My opinion is not that of others on the board, but my honest answer to where she needs to go: The cutting room floor. You have hit almost all of my anti-fetishes. I am sure that your character will catch others in similar ways. You have her built as a short barbie doll.

Give your character minimal physical traits. Well endowed should suffice for breast size, I never measure her tits before diving in. Flighty is a better way to describe her intelligence. Let the reader picture their ideal girl, give them enough to start her off, things that are needed for the story.

This character needs the nice ass and rack, but being blonde, 5'1" slim, with balloons on her chest? I would look, but not touch, and it probably kill the story for me too.

same here

 

[gunhilltrain]

I see you wrote six stories about her that mostly did well, but they were all published in a single month at the end of 2016. You seem to need a new character or something new for Pixie to do - or both! Maybe she needs a new job. Since she's already so sexualized, maybe she should try being a cam-girl, an escort, an exotic dancer - something along those lines. Maybe she has some knack for acting, and she gets a supporting role on a TV show.

 

[Carnevil9]

I see you wrote six stories about her that mostly did well, but they were all published in a single month at the end of 2016. You seem to need a new character or something new for Pixie to do - or both! Maybe she needs a new job. Since she's already so sexualized, maybe she should try being a cam-girl, an escort, an exotic dancer - something along those lines. Maybe she has some knack for acting, and she gets a supporting role on a TV show.

Zombie alert! Hide your BRAINS!!!

I doubt the OP is going to see your advice. He/she hasn't posted since 2016.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Zombie alert! Hide your BRAINS!!!

I doubt the OP is going to see your advice. He/she hasn't posted since 2016.

Yes, you do have to assume that he is long gone. Why did frenchknickers restart this thread? He must have dug pretty deep into the board to even find this.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Damn, I had a good idea for the Pixie character. She becomes, for a while at least, a dominatrix. ("I really don't want to hurt these guys, but they pay so well for it!") I guess I'll have to write it myself.

 

[Carnevil9]

Yes, you do have to assume that he is long gone. Why did frenchknickers restart this thread? He must have dug pretty deep into the board to even find this.

Most of these Zombie Resurrection threads, you'll note, are caused by newbies. I'm guessing it was a non-member doing a Google search, found a thread that caught their interest, and just had to join up to post on it, unaware how old it is. It happens on lots of message boards that have diverse topics.

 

[sirhugs]

Most of these Zombie Resurrection threads, you'll note, are caused by newbies. I'm guessing it was a non-member doing a Google search, found a thread that caught their interest, and just had to join up to post on it, unaware how old it is. It happens on lots of message boards that have diverse topics.

Are you suggesting a zombie story?