Okay what form should I try next?

[LadynStFreknBed]

a Hynde Hypersonnet?

*ears perked*
*breath held*

a Hynde Hypersonnet?

 

[Angeline]

*ears perked*
*breath held*

a Hynde Hypersonnet?

From the fevered mind of Lauren Hynde, the hypersonnet:

A freakish mutant fusion of the classic and english sonnets, and this 20 iambic pentameters estravaganza, respects a very tight rhyming scheme: ABBA CDDC CDE CDE ABBA EE. As you can see, each of the five rhyming sounds appears four and only four times.

And a sample hypersonnet:

Romeo Is Bleeding: a hypersonnet
by The Poets©

The Poets:
Lauren.Hynde, WickedEve, REDWAVE, JUDO


If you were to come meet me in the eve,
At dusk, that hour of magical hushed weep
When moonlit fragrance softly lulls to sleep,
To slowly hold me tight, and never leave

A serpent's slither with my silken hem,
The gentle sway leaves trail behind my shade.
With silence go and seek me unafraid.
Before I fade from view and light grows dim.

And yet I know that it would be too grim
For many times my heart has been betrayed.
So, why do I risk love, lest hurt subsist?

I feel my breath expire on but a whim.
My question's answered soon as it is made
Abandonment's preferred before not missed.

Where wave on wave pounds rocks upon dark eve,
My heart entreats love's grace its claim to keep.
A sudden kiss quite soft and knife thrust deep
To take me fast on death... and never leave.

Upon my soul I swear, "Beware the mist
Of many lips - those thousands never kissed."

 

[Angeline]

GOD! You are such a show off! lol Do you remember how to write a Hynde Hypersonnet?

I wrote a villanelle, too.

Actually I am sucking at the Survivor competition. I've written way less than others. And I'm about to mostly disappear for a week or two to get an editing job done.

But maybe you or La Hynde can write a hypersonnet for us. Or a Bob. Or a Boob-ku.

 

[champagne1982]

I wrote a villanelle, too.

Actually I am sucking at the Survivor competition. I've written way less than others. And I'm about to mostly disappear for a week or two to get an editing job done.

But maybe you or La Hynde can write a hypersonnet for us. Or a Bob. Or a Boob-ku.

I refuse to show you my hypersonnets. Both went over like unfilled balloons. I was here too late for boob-kus although I'm sure a few could be enticed if Lauren were to bring back the black shirted AV. I still have a Bob on my Lit list, I think. (eta: yep, Weave (an interlocked bob)).

 

[Angeline]

I refuse to show you my hypersonnets. Both went over like unfilled balloons. I was here too late for boob-kus although I'm sure a few could be enticed if Lauren were to bring back the black shirted AV. I still have a Bob on my Lit list, I think. (eta: yep, Weave (an interlocked bob)).

Lol. I wrote one hypersonnet, and Lauren promptly told me that it was NOT a hypersonnet, so I gave up.

I've always thought there should be a thread of tribute poems to Lauren's boob. Just the one.

 

[champagne1982]

Lol. I wrote one hypersonnet, and Lauren promptly told me that it was NOT a hypersonnet, so I gave up.

I've always thought there should be a thread of tribute poems to Lauren's boob. Just the one.

uhm, BTW Ange, the survivor thingy goes on for a year... Take your time. Store them up even and wallop us at the end if you want. LOL... I can hear the reviewer of the day's scream now.

Angeline brings us 250 assorted poems today... I'm sure there's some good things there but right now... Aughhh! I'm melting.... I'll get you Angie and your little EE too!...

 

[annaswirls]

uhm, BTW Ange, the survivor thingy goes on for a year... Take your time. Store them up even and wallop us at the end if you want. LOL... I can hear the reviewer of the day's scream now.

Angeline brings us 250 assorted poems today... I'm sure there's some good things there but right now... Aughhh! I'm melting.... I'll get you Angie and your little EE too!...

Just make sure it isn't a Wednesday, please.....


Okay which form should I do next? I am not afraid anymore. I need to get the hard ones done in the spring, because summer I am useless with all of the boys home all of the time, going to visit family, etc.

Then there is Fall, and the readjustment period of school, which is always a joy with O-dog especially, IEP meetings, this that then Christmas and then it is over!!! Ahhh what do you mean we ONLY have a year???

ha

So yes. I need to finish the forms before school is out.

I can do it. Yes we can.

http://z.about.com/d/politicalhumor/1/0/V/x/1/obama_yes_we_can.jpg

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Just make sure it isn't a Wednesday, please.....


Okay which form should I do next? I am not afraid anymore. I need to get the hard ones done in the spring, because summer I am useless with all of the boys home all of the time, going to visit family, etc.

Then there is Fall, and the readjustment period of school, which is always a joy with O-dog especially, IEP meetings, this that then Christmas and then it is over!!! Ahhh what do you mean we ONLY have a year???

ha

So yes. I need to finish the forms before school is out.

I can do it. Yes we can.

http://z.about.com/d/politicalhumor/1/0/V/x/1/obama_yes_we_can.jpg

*giggle giggle* this catch phrase was taken from Bob the Builder

 

[annaswirls]

help!

Okay, which form should I use for my Immunity???

10. Pantoum
11. Rondeau
19. Villanelle
20. Ballad
23. Ottava Rima
25. Terza Rima


They all look equally scary to me.

I know I am using Lesbian Counter-Attacks as the trigger although I guess I should do the illustrated....

 

[pushkine]

See next post.

 

[pushkine]

Never mind. I re-read the question.

 

[PandoraGlitters]

Okay, which form should I use for my Immunity???

10. Pantoum
11. Rondeau
19. Villanelle
20. Ballad
23. Ottava Rima
25. Terza Rima


They all look equally scary to me.

I know I am using Lesbian Counter-Attacks as the trigger although I guess I should do the illustrated....

I'd ditch the Ballad.

 

[annaswirls]

Never mind. I re-read the question.

oh that's okay, you can answer whatever question you want to. Which one SHOULD I do next?

 

[annaswirls]

I'd ditch the Ballad.

yeah, I was leaning away from the ballad...

 

[UnderYourSpell]

The ballad was the easiest one of the lot!

 

[annaswirls]

The ballad was the easiest one of the lot!

which was the hardest?

 

[UnderYourSpell]

which was the hardest?

Flipping haiku who would think 3 lines would be so elusive. Surprisingly enough the Heroic couplets are proving a pain too and I have put them to one side for now and am working on the Terza Rima. Would have been easier if I hadn't decided to use word like 'mouth' and 'valley' to rhyme!

 

[annaswirls]

Flipping haiku who would think 3 lines would be so elusive. Surprisingly enough the Heroic couplets are proving a pain too and I have put them to one side for now and am working on the Terza Rima. Would have been easier if I hadn't decided to use word like 'mouth' and 'valley' to rhyme!

oh my!

Guess you could go South to O' Malleys, just don't dilly dally.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I did actually find an old english word 'routh' that means abundance that fitted in quite well

 

[annaswirls]

I did actually find an old english word 'routh' that means abundance that fitted in quite well

oh you could write about the Thornbirds, Maggie and Ralph

 

[pushkine]

Okay, which form should I use for my Immunity???

10. Pantoum
11. Rondeau
19. Villanelle
20. Ballad
23. Ottava Rima
25. Terza Rima


They all look equally scary to me.

It probably depends on what you find congenial, or at least not irritating, as a writer and what aspects of form you feel you do well.

I personally feel the ballad is the easiest to write, since it can be either accentual-syllabic or podic (meaning, basically, you only count the stressed syllables in a line, not count by metrical foot). It also only requires that you rhyme on two of the four lines of each quatrain. All the other forms have much stricter rhyme requirements.

The problem with the ballad is that it has a very archaic feel. Plus, it's most suitable for very long, story-telling poems (see Elizabeth Bishop's "The Burglar of Babylon").

If I was to skip a form, it might well be the one I'd choose.

Both the pantoum and the villanelle have a lot of repeated lines. This makes them something of a challenge (to select lines that make sense when and where repeated) and easier than other forms (meaning once you've picked your two refrain lines in a villanelle, you have eight of the nineteen lines of the poem).

But I like repeating line poems, so I personally would not choose these forms.

The rondeau also has a repeating element, but it's truncated. Pick a good one and two fruitful rhymes and you're clear.

I don't think it's that hard to write a competent one. A good one, really good one, is an entirely different thing.

I am personally fond of ottava rima, as it's a form associated with mocking, witty, funny poems (Byron's Don Juan, Koch's Ko; or, A Season on Earth). The main problem with ottava rima is that it's best suited for very long poems (See ballad, above). The form itself is no more (in fact, not as) difficult as a sonnet.

Finally, terza rima. You've already done this in your terzanelle, which had even more restrictions than simple terza rima does. My own feeling is that this is perhaps the easiest of what you've identified as potential immunities.

I personally would skip the ballad (or, perhaps ottava rima) as I think it is, while easy to write, extremely difficult to write well.

I know I am using Lesbian Counter-Attacks as the trigger although I guess I should do the illustrated....

Either would be a good choice. I'll likely pick that first one next time I have a chance.




I mean, for that trigger I was going to write a poem about Sam Ronson, who's way over her fifteen minutes of fame, by my clock.

I really really don't want to write a poem about Sam Ronson. Don't have anything against her, actually. Just don't want to write a poem about her.

Nor do I want to write a poem about Paul Blart, Mall Cop.

But that's just me. Someone else might want to, after all.

 

[pushkine]

Never mind. I see you've chosen.

 

[annaswirls]

Never mind. I see you've chosen.

Actually this was helpful, Pushkine-- I am going to play the odds and save the ballad for last

 

[annaswirls]

I mean, for that trigger I was going to write a poem about Sam Ronson, who's way over her fifteen minutes of fame, by my clock.

I really really don't want to write a poem about Sam Ronson. Don't have anything against her, actually. Just don't want to write a poem about her.

Nor do I want to write a poem about Paul Blart, Mall Cop.

But that's just me. Someone else might want to, after all.

I am so isolated. I never heard about any of this! Of course, I have heard of Mary Poppins though, so I suppose we are kind of even.

I am currently writing a Rubaiyat Quatrain on the Bird Lady from that charming tale. It is as juvenile as the audience.

But you are correct, anything linked to Lindsay Lohan is best avoided.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

oh you could write about the Thornbirds, Maggie and Ralph

one of my favourite bits of music the theme of that