Possible Story Idea

LadiDarkMoon

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Possible Story Idea:Human Zoo

Two nights ago I had a dream that I think with a little tweeking from a pro might accually make a good story...I am posting it straight out of my journal so please forgive some of the personal side notes.

Should you choose to make a story out of it I will have happy to answer any questions:

I had been kidnapped by men and taken to an odd place somewhere out towards the desert. There were several people in cages there besides myself. We were all released and told to run by a tall heavy man with a big whip. Not being the atheltic type, plus being pregnant I didn't make it very far.

I thought for sure this was some kind of canned hunt; but using human instead of big cats. I was shot in the back of the right shoulder and after taking a few more steps I just went down. There was only a pinch of pain, but it was that odd sleepy feeling that made me realize it was just a tranc.

When I woke again I was in this odd bedroom setting and there was this dirty looking boy...I say boy because he must have been 15-16. But he was clearly horny. After waking I spent a long time running in circles trying to get away from him...Suddenly there was a loud buzzer and a door in the back of this bedroom opened up. The boy went running down so I followed at safe distance. Strange beasts were feeding us green jello, I could only guess they were aliens. I took my bowl and watched everyone else eat first...than I took a few bites. That sleepy dizzy feeling took me again. That's when I realized the boy was already passed out on the floor.

The aliens didn't wait for me to fully pass out, they just didn't want to fight him. They pulled me out and carried me down the long hall past all the caged humans from all over the globe. The aliens set me down on a new bed, this room was much bigger and it had a back section with a full bathroom, living room type area and a very sterile looking bed area. I think they realized in my blood work I was already pregnant....this was a family unit chamber. They had just added them on to the children's rooms.

That's why I was so much older than everyone, they wanted to start a captive breeding program. I was still feeling groggy when they handed me a 13 in flat handheld monitar type thing. At the top it said MALE. I didn't realizes they were letting me pick who I wanted to live with.

I started pressing buttons shaping face, hair, body, eyes, everything. It started to look famaliar when I realized the finished product was Kevin. I was going to erase it and see who else I could make, but they took it away and left me alone to sleep off that dizzy feel.

The next thing I know a very scared up hunter and a friend are carrying a drugged Kevin into my room. I would later learn from Kev, that the scouts had offered him a job in a healers shop out west. When he got there all the people were released and the hunt was on. Only Kevin didn't run, he charged the truck taking down the guy with the whip and went after the aliens with the guns. It took 5 trancs to finally take him down.

Time passed and Kev and I just took care of each other. There was no more drugs or anything odd slipped into our food. But feeders made sure to keep well away from Kevin's reach due to his tendency to grab them by the neck and try pulling through the bowl slot to kill them. The baby was born on time and healthy, but while I was giving birth the aliens had sheilded Kevin with a special glass that he couldn't break. I was in labor for hours but the birth went through without issue. In the dream I was right, a little girl. I named her Deva Ann Canali, knowing that Kevin would be her father figure and we were never going back to earth. But that honestly didn't bother me anymore.

I because that slightly over protective mother that everyone sees in wildlife shows. During a weight check and immunization shots they put up the glass wall for safety. I was so mad I busted through it on my 5 try to get my child. I was mad, she was screaming, I needed to see if she was ok. I ran across the small room, I smacked the alien around a little as a warning and took my child. I immdeatately checked her over to see if she was ok, she was not hurt just shocked from the needle. I walked away with Deva only to have Kevin scoop me up and put me on the couch to pick shards of glass out of the bottom of my feet. I hadn't even realized, I was just too concerned with Deva. After getting out all the glass, he drew me a bath and carried me and set me in. I feed Deva while he scrubed my feet and cleaned the wounds. It was so calm at that moment, I just couldn't help but fall a little deeper for him.

For the next several weeks we slept out in the main bedroom, the viewing area of our zoo cage. Deva slept between Kevin and I. As the weeks pasted I healed, feet and otherwise. Finally I was feeling up enough to have a little fun. I crawled around Deva while she was sleeping and looked over Kevin, Rem sleep had him mostly hard.

Very gently I pulled his underware out of the way. If he stirred I backed off, let him get comfortable again, soon I had his tighties off. Their he was in all his manly glory, twitching lightly from the cold. I smiled down and carefully straddled his knees. Lowering my head I licked at the head of his penis and got a happy "Ummm errmmm" from the sleeping Kevin. I dared to go a little farther licking and deep throating him...not as easy as it has been in the past, where he is noticeably bigger and thicker.
With more happy grumbles I pulled myself farther up, until hips were aligned. Slowly sinking down on to him, I couldn't help but moan myself, for he is a sizeable man as I said before. After a few glorious slow pushes and pulls, his eyes fluddered open with a devious grin. As I was pulling up he rammed himself deep with in me, taking me by surprise. I moaned and threw my head back...seeing my pleasure only pushed him onwards to try other new things...grabbing my hips he began to thrust himself faster in and out of my hot wettness. It only turned me on more to think that aliens on the other side of the one sided glass might be watching us. As my thoughts strayed for a moment he fliped me on to my back, grabbing my breasts and squeezing, milk dripping out from my nipples. He thursts harder and harder into me. Pulling himself and pushing with more force each time, sending me to a higher plane of pleasure than I had every known. I wrapped my legs about his waist and my arms around his neck as he started to lift me. Soon he was standing, walking, pumping in and out of me like a piston. Leaning in my lips might his with all the passion and force I could muster, we fell backwards. My back now on the viewing glass as he continued to thrust with all this strength. I moaned into his mouth as an orgasm took me. But he was not done, Sliding down we found the floor, he lay on top of me kissing and licking my milk soaked breasts continueing his rythmic pace. My teeth and lips found his neck and ears, my fingernails glide across his back, I came again for a second time as he groaned and grunted cuming deep inside me.

In those moments where we lay on the floor in the aftermath of our joyious lovemaking, even in a dream, I realized I had never felt so happy. Never been so satisfied with my life. I would never be free to wander in a park, but I didn't care. I didn't have a job, no bills, I could have as many children as I desired and all with the man of my dreams...I was forever happy in that moment before waking.
 
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Re: Possible Story Idea:Human Zoo

LadiDarkMoon said:
When I woke again I was in this odd bedroom setting and there was this dirty looking boy...I say boy because he must have been 15-16. But he was clearly horny.

Better make the boy 18. Lord knows 18 year old boys are horny.
 
As I said it needs some tweeking...
But over all I thought the general idea of the dream would make a good story.
 
Re: Re: Possible Story Idea:Human Zoo

InsatiableMe said:
Better make the boy 18. Lord knows 18 year old boys are horny.

18 years olds of all ages:devil:
 
So many story ideas, so little time.

Now I just have to find a talented writer for them so that the Muse can continue typing out ideas before they turn to dust and fly away.
 
Well I had one some time ago; I tried writing it myself. Accually got it to a point that it was edited and needed to be rewriten...just never got there.

It was part one of a 5 piece story....never got past part one.

That's when I realized. I'm a Muse, I can think of stories, help others think of stories....can't write my own stories to save my life.
 
LadiDarkMoon said:
Well I had one some time ago; I tried writing it myself. Accually got it to a point that it was edited and needed to be rewriten...just never got there.

It was part one of a 5 piece story....never got past part one.

That's when I realized. I'm a Muse, I can think of stories, help others think of stories....can't write my own stories to save my life.

please try again
if you got part one done, at least get that posted
then you might do another
 
I'm really not much of a writer.

I really can't do my stories justice...That's why I come here now and post my ideas hoping to inspire a real writer.
 
new story Idea, comments welcome

Im thinking about a mob story, like the Sapranos, called the Cannolis. Big boss Tony, bunch of strippers, some mob guys, wifes, mistrersses, what do you think?
 
Re: new story Idea, comments welcome

Beco said:
Im thinking about a mob story, like the Sapranos, called the Cannolis. Big boss Tony, bunch of strippers, some mob guys, wifes, mistrersses, what do you think?

there was a really good nmob story or series a year ago or so. Which means :

~its a good idea
~ it may be time to do again
~you must decide whether to read that first, to ensure difference, or not, to avoid influence
 
Your original idea has lots of promise. I will consider taking it up, but you won't hardly recognise it, LadiDarkMoon, because I don't usually use first person, and I'm sure I couldn't write first person female.
 
snooper said:
Your original idea has lots of promise. I will consider taking it up, but you won't hardly recognise it, LadiDarkMoon, because I don't usually use first person, and I'm sure I couldn't write first person female.


ok, where else do you write?
 
I would be honored if you took up my story snooper. Feel free to make any changes you feel would make it a better and more interesting story.
 
LadiDarkMoon said:
I would be honored if you took up my story snooper. Feel free to make any changes you feel would make it a better and more interesting story.
I don't know if I'll have time to do this justice. Anybody else please feel free to take it up.
 
THANK YOU SNOOPER

I can't thank you enough for turning my dream into a story.
I could never imagine it would have come out so wonderful. I highly enjoy reading it and I am sure everyone else will too.
 
LadiDarkMoom Dream

I'd like to tak a stab at it

Please write so we can discuss

vargas[at]yahoo.com
 
vargas hun, your email doesn't work.

And yes I changed the [at] to an @ I still get:

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LadiDarkMoon, You truly are a Muse! I thought your dream/idea was very erotic just as it was. Who'd have guessed that it could be improved upon? Snooper, kudos to you. You have talent, my friend. I'll be reading any other stories from you with pleasure.
 
By the way, Snooper--here's some feedback. I really liked the way that you kept the human element of LDM's idea. What I mean by that is, the relationship between the two characters was the motivator in this story--not just the sex scenes. Don't get me wrong the sex was very hot but it wasn't the only thing that kept me interested. The way Keith and Sandra used each other as touchstones to keep their spirits up was wonderful and the insights you gave into the aliens slow and steady realization that these people were more than just zoo exhibits made the entire tale more real--if that makes sense. I had the feeling that this scenario could really happen andif it did that humans would react in just that way. Thanks for the good read.
 
To LDM

Lady,

What coul have gone wrong?

Could you ty again

vargas111[at]yahoo.com

Isn't there some way for posters to allow readers to respond outside the Board?
 
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