Roll Call ~ Poetry Forum

Since I have taken to posting a few poems in this past week or so, I thought I should perhaps post in this thread.

Firstly, I should say that I am hopelessly archaic in taste and that a great deal of the poetry which I adore was written by long dead people from East Asia (Ono no Komachi, Lady Ise, Li Po, Yu Xuanji, etc.). Even my favourite contemporary poets mostly write in traditional East Asian styles (my favourite living poet is probably the Empress of Japan, incidentally). Most of my poetry at this point is subsequently likewise, with Western hints and occasional outright Western work—but still in hopelessly archaic fashion (in spite of the fact that I am terrible with stress-timed metre). Form is lovely in poetry, to me: I like to play a bit with form and structure, I find that a certain element of constraint in writing is paradoxically freeing. Playing with language is likewise something in which I regularly partake, I do so love puns and word play (sometimes and especially in dead languages).

However, I am actually a spontaneous writer, I cannot force work or create without being in the appropriate mood, and I mostly write in minutes, not hours, days, weeks, or months; I am not as industrious as my formality might imply.

Lit, I hope, will be a place to receive feedback and criticism on poesie and a place with little pressure to help me in exploring my writing and finding my poetic voice. Furthermore, I find something wonderfully amusing and enjoyable about posting pretentious and decidedly non-erotic poems on an erotic fiction website. I have no hope for real contribution to this community, although I will perhaps ramble on about occasional topics until no one can tolerate me.

I am of the opinion that there is no such thing as a bad review except a dishonest one, so I will say that I am relatively open to any depth and breadth of critique, even serious, harsh criticisms (at least now, having not yet received such). Condescend to me, though, and I will be forced to engage in third rate imitation of Dryden or Pope.

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With that, here is what I have submitted to Lit. In my opinion, my most successful poems are Our yesterdays and A cuttlefish, which are my favourites as well.
 
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...although I will perhaps ramble on about occasional topics until no one can tolerate me.
Not possible. :rose:
You contribute gallons of gorgeous thoughtfulness to this forum, Sparrow. To this language.

But if you really want to fight about it you and I could have a ramble-off and see who falls asleep first...
 
Not possible. :rose:
You contribute gallons of gorgeous thoughtfulness to this forum, Sparrow. To this language.

But if you really want to fight about it you and I could have a ramble-off and see who falls asleep first...

Thank you. :rose:

Ooh, a ramble-off!

I just realised that almost all of the sentences in my introduction are longer than most of my poems.
 
But does size really matter? Well, maybe to UYS or BJ...

[As a charter member of The Society of Persons Who Often Respond to Things Which Are Obviously Jokes in a Serious Manner, and Occasionally Respond to Things Which are Not Jokes in Any Way in a Manner Somewhat Less Serious Than Their Nature Might Reasonably Be Thought to Require, I'm going to respond in an entirely serious manner to this.]

Oh, most of what I have submitted here are haiku, tanka, or quatrains of a Sino-Japanese nature, so I'm quite pleased with my ability not to be long-winded for once.
 
[As a charter member of The Society of Persons Who Often Respond to Things Which Are Obviously Jokes in a Serious Manner, and Occasionally Respond to Things Which are Not Jokes in Any Way in a Manner Somewhat Less Serious Than Their Nature Might Reasonably Be Thought to Require, I'm going to respond in an entirely serious manner to this.]

Oh, most of what I have submitted here are haiku, tanka, or quatrains of a Sino-Japanese nature, so I'm quite pleased with my ability not to be long-winded for once.
*squish-poke*
Just once I wish my own fingers would cease the long-windedness...
Is my jealousy peeping through?

Anschul said:
But does size really matter? Well, maybe to UYS or BJ...
Oh? Just them, eh?
I thought I heard Champagne chime in on that once or twice...*cough*
 
New to the Scene --- Greetings

*What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

In all honesty, I demand -- well Honesty. What is good about it, what is bad about it, but more importantly, a good explanation for any comment so I can pretty much gauge where my work is reaching and where its simply not meeting the pulse of the said reader. I have posted two sporadic, off the minute ones that I didn't quite go back and fix ( or for that matter, tune-up) --- but just to throw some raw ideas out and see what the grill can cook off.

Academic, Hard Core, Light, or just average critique is all right with me --- I only learn from others and if it so happens that someone likes it, then that is one of the many awards of sharing written work.

*What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?

I am here to produce and bring fourth quality reads and get motivated by other's works in hopes to refine my own vision and craft. Erotica is just one of many genres I delve in, and just here to hang, make productive comments ---- and who knows --- meet new friends.

*How would you describe your writing?

I suppose everyone hopes that their writing doesn't suck ( hah hah hah hah), in truth, I believe my writing is pretty good, but I claim nothing but someone who is open to new ideas to enhance my own style. In fiction, I like to put heavy detail and plot twists, something that throws the reader off from the usual norm to keep them thinking or experience something new than what others may provide. In Poetry, I like to capture intense motion/emotion, attempting to put the reader in the shoes of the prose in order to put him/her directly into context of the poem itself.


*List of some of your favorite poems/stories you have at Lit, in case anyone wants to get a taste of your work

The two mentioned as I said are raw off the mental grill pieces to see where it can do or maybe not change at all, just a slight flavor of what I do. It comes from self practice and reading over the years while being dragged across the world as a Marine. Complaints, Suggestions, Pros, Cons, or a simple " Thats Awsome" are all welcomed they are:

The Guamese Rose

and

The Pause

Pleasure to meet you all! Thank you
 
I “suggested” to someone that they would be remiss if they didn’t post here so that people could get to know them; I ended up shaming myself into doing the same thing. So here goes:

I am an unbelievably happy lesbian mother of two (at the moment). My twin girls are beyond a doubt the most fantastic kids in the world. I am legally married to my “Hubby” Amy who is the love of my life – seriously – I adore my boi! We live in southern California where Amy runs a successful Financial Management company and I am a stay at home mom. My interests are: my kids, Amy and sex (funny how they are relate, isn’t it?) I am an exceptionally cheerful individual and very few people can tolerate me before their first cup of coffee. Oh, and I play a pretty fair game of poker.


What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

Jeeze! Makes it sound like a prison term or something! I’m here cuz I like to write and I like to write as well as I can. Here I can take advantage of GREAT poets who incidentally are fellow pervs (settling the “can we relate” issues immediately). I can read wonderful poems and learn new stuff; I can read poems that I don’t “get” and actually ask the writer “WTF are you talking about” and get a terrific explanation and most of all I am here because “perverted poets” (meant in the nicest way :D ) are witty, funny, interesting people and I enjoy their company.

As for critiques? Sure! Remember my first one? LOL The first two pages were people arguing on how to “properly” tell me my poem sucked! Seriously (yeah, right), any critique is welcome as long as it is well reasoned. Tell me “It sucks” and don’t ‘splain why is a waste of cyber ink and it makes you look stupid, especially when REALLY GOOD writer says “Your poem sucks” and give wonderful, insightful feedback.


What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?

Good God, who came up with these questions? Hell, I don’t know how I can contribute. I’m not good enough to review (not that that stops me from leaving unsolicited BS comments on your poem’s door step); I guess the best thing to do is offer myself to the mods (oh shit, no not that way! - hmmmm… maybe) to help them where ever they need it. Poetry cheerleader? Town whore? Sweep up all of the letters at the bottom of the screen every night? Lesbian whipping girl? (personal fav!!!!) I don’t know – ask and I’ll try. For now I suppose what I will try to do is a.) Do my best to help maintain the fantastic sense of “community” here. b.) Continue to write poetry (thereby providing unintended comic relief) and c.) be the Lesbian whipping girl (aw, come on – I WANT to!)

How would you describe your writing?

Progressing from diarrhea to soft stool – it’s still shitty, but firming up nicely.

Amy says that I don’t write with my heart on my sleeve – I write with my heart, lungs, liver and spleen on my sleeve. I guess this is true. Everything I write comes from my experiences and what I see and experience on a daily basis – oh, and from the fact that I’m a perpetually horny slut.

LOL, just incase you haven’t noticed: I am RARELY described as shy (i.e. if I got fisted this morning, you’ll read about it this afternoon) Hey, what can I say – I’m a sharing kind of person.


URL to your work at lit, personal website etc.

Here's the link to my crap: Safe_Bet
 
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Home Again Home Again Jiggity Jig

Hello,

In a different life I used to visit here and post a bit. Relocation and the odd bit of living carried me away. Upon my return I find that I forgot my password. I went from irritated to illuminated for this is a different time and I am who I was but not the same. So a new persona for this incarnation is apropos.

SA waves goodbye and DocktorWu says hello.
 
Just Checking in

Im new to lit but not so new to writing poems. I am new to having people read and comment on my poems and i now find myself either smiling from ear to ear or crying .. in a good way!

I do not have any published works as i was always afraid that they are too emotional and that i would not be able to handle the rejection if they were not accepted. So far all my fears has been for nothing. Im ecstatic that people actually read my poems and like it.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=386916
http://www.booksie.com/sharvanem

hope you will go easy on me :))

Shar
 
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Welcome aboard Shar. :) I hope you find this a productive environment for your creativity. Your voice is a nice addition to the mix here.
 
newb comin' thru!

Ok, I'm new - you guessed that, though.

*hopes and dreams & all that jazz --> I want to become a writer. I already dabble but don't do it well. I try not to babble but here is my tell... I'd love to have anyone comment with specifics or generalities on any of my posts. I will do my best to respond with something intelligent (1/2-way, maybe?) as I go through the posts of others.

*i'd settle for being able to make an interesting contribution. I don't think I'll ever make people dig terribly deep but if I can get them to smile, laugh, giggle, harumph, pshaw, or something of that sort I'll be fairly happy... so long as I don't contribute drivel I'll be somewhat content.

*my writing is newbish :) I used to write constantly but got out of the habit. Over the years I've been stuck in my own head or talking to animals (yes, I know - make no judgments, please) so I have developed a different way of articulating my thoughts. Sometimes I think I try to hard - other times I should try harder... but I am usually up for trying anything once - harder or not.

*http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1028620&page=bio

*favorite things I've posted at Lit so far:
Argument --> http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=390644
Landing --> http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=390533
Off the map --> http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=390642
She Cries In the Grass --> http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=390671

thanks for the thread to make us feel welcome - I am the new kid in school, teach me
 
I suppose I'll introduce myself as a poet.

My style is mostly intended to communicate. Function before form, I guess. It really is about that need to connect, to share. Some things about my inner world are ineffable but I feel like, with poetry, I can at least point to them.

I like poems that seem to be about one thing but then it turns out they are about something entirely different, 2 of the 3 I have up are like that.

Don't judge that technique by me, here are a couple by poets who, unlike me, actually know what they are doing:
8 Count and You Fit Into Me
 
Hi Everyone,

I joined literotica for the stories but have found i enjoy writing poetry much more. Hopefully you will see my stuff appearing regularly. I dont write overly explicit work and i guess im a bit of a romantic at heart.

Hope to see you all around
 
I have been gone for a short time and I have found that I cannot keep track of the cast of characters here in poetry world.

Please, if you will, check in on this thread-- if you are a poet, reader, troll, lurker, or just like to look at the pretty poet av's.... lets all check in.



Some possible information to include:



*What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

*What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?


*How would you describe your writing?

*URL to your work at lit, personal website etc.

*List of some of your favorite poems/stories you have at Lit, in case anyone wants to get a taste of your work


Suggestions:

**Please keep it brief
........ think of it as a reference for newbies or us old folks with failing memories

**Please don't post off topic
......... unless you absolutely cannot help yourself

**If you don't post your own bio within 2 weeks, I will make one up for you without hesitation. :)


*** Note: this is not part of the Patriot Act. Also please do not include your political affiliation, your social security number or your mother's maiden name.


thanks!

~anna

:heart:

*What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

Honest criticism with some tact and respect thrown in for good measure. I've already met asshats elsewhere that nearly kept me from ever sharing my poems again. If you don't like it, why? Honest praise. If you like it, please say why. What about it strikes a chord with you? Please realize that many were written when I was between 13 and 18. They may reflect the mindset of a teen ager and not the adult I am now.

*What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?
I honestly don't know. I'd like to contribute some of my writings, and hopefully encourage others that are just starting to share their also.

*How would you describe your writing?
Definitly poetry. Many have described it as "dark" It comes from a place and a time when my thoughts were dark. I tried to convey some hope when possible, but......

*URL to your work at lit, personal website etc.
Not right now. I'll wait a bit to edit this.

*List of some of your favorite poems/stories you have at Lit, in case anyone wants to get a taste of your work

None yet. Getting ready to post in a day or so. Got to find them again!!
 
Welcome all ye Newcomers. I was a newcomer not so long ago. I hope you find what you are looking for. My only advice is don't take anything seriously here but the poetry. And have fun! :)
 
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