shoulder angel, meet shoulder devil

[echolalia]

I believe it's impossible to write a good story without conflict. This may be conflict with an adversary (you'll see lots of this any time you switch on your TV) or inner conflict (will she, won't she?). Inner conflict can even just be someone struggling in anticipation of something or lusting for someone but not acting on it (yet).

Sometimes cartoons show inner conflict as an angel and a devil debating or fighting on someones shoulders, which changes it into adversarial conflict.

I think it would be interesting to combine this with "slap-slap-kiss", in other words someone is in doubt about something, the little angel and devil appear, fight each other, and then have angry sex with each other while the "real" character watches.

It's easy enough to write a silly story in which this happens, but I doubt I could make it HOT. Sure, events before and after can be hot, but this specific thing? I would really like to see it though!

So, if anyone is looking for a challenge, please write a serious(-ish) story in which the shoulder angel and devil have sex observed by their owner, in a way that turns on the reader.

 

[Carnevil9]

And if possible, please have the angel and the devil be brother and sister!

Hah, just kidding. It's actually a very interesting idea......Carney

 

[echolalia]

Usually the angel and devil look similar to their "owner", so they would be two brothers or two sisters in a sense.

Incest is a good cause of strong inner conflict. Maybe the devil will tell the angel "Incest wrong? Why don't you try it before you judge it?" and then the boy who desired his sister gets be horrified watching his good and evil selves have steamy gay sex! But then in the end he thinks it's hot after all and has a threesome with his sister and... who?

 

[JaxRhapsody]

I think it would be interesting to combine this with "slap-slap-kiss", in other words someone is in doubt about something, the little angel and devil appear, fight each other, and then have angry sex with each other while the "real" character watches.

This is what I was thinking when I clicked on this thread. I've seen in some situations the little angel and devil actually say the same thing. Usually that happens when the person has little conscience.