Story Critique Queue

[LillyRoses]

My Story

September 21: Sabrina's Education in Novels and Novellas by Lillyroses

 

[LillyRoses]

My story

Is about a visit between a dom and his sub. They met online and have been meeting regularly. It is a sex driven visit... Not much plot yet. It is two pages long. I went into descriptive content more than plot driven for this attempt.

The sub is kind of new to bdsm and is experiencing bondage and different aspects of the lifestyle for the first time.

 

[Pure]

lily roses and cool s. sorry about the delay. make a thread for your story, and title the thread as you see others: SD, date, title and your name.

Like so.

Story Discussion: 6 March 2012 "The Crush" by misterstan

best,
pure

 

[TamLin01]

Hello. Since there's nothing in the queue right now, I'd like to present my new story for critique. Just let me know when I have the green light for a thread. Thank you.

 

[PenelopePendergasp]

Hello. I'm a Newbie to Literotica. I've never submitted any material to the site and am just trying to get my bearings here. However, I do have some material for critique. If anyone would be willing to offer advice or input on the work, I'd love to read it. Here are three pieces I've submitted to the Reddit /r/eroticliterature subreddit:

May I Buy That For You?

http://www.reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/16cn8e/may_i_buy_that_for_you/

I Will Do My Homework! (Natalie Part 1)

http://www.reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/15wv20/i_will_do_my_homework/

Squash. Tomorrow Morning, 7am? (Natalie Part 2)

http://www.reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/161a7f/squash_tomorrow_morning_7am/

Thanks!

 

[Hitman7]

Greetings everyone,

You can all call me Hitman7. I've just recently published my first ever story here at Literotica. I'm seeking some constructive criticism so that I can improve my writing skills and also make the next chapter better.

The story Filius is basically about a son who finds out that his mother is having an affair with a classmate of his (who is Black) at school.

Here is the link to the story:
http://www.literotica.com/s/filius-ch-01

 

[LWulf]

critique wanted for 2nd story

I wasn't aware there was a "critique area" in addition to the "feedback area."

Please see my thread "Tales of the Bad Girl Bar" to comment there.

edit: truncated post and added thread link in accordance to Moderator Pure's post

 

[Penelope Street]

It's pretty clear that no one is or has been monitoring the queue for some time. Anyone wishing to start a discussion should simply do so.

 

[Pure]

Posting a story

Use a standard label, such as the most recent:

Story Discussion: Sept 10, 2013. "Awakening" by Funinthesungirl19

State specific issue you want feedback on.

Best,

pure,
mod