Story Discussion: March 23, 2009, "Vice Cream" by Keroin

[Keroin]

Sounds good to me ----

I've found you have to go in and manually input the bolds or italics ... now that the earthday contest is up and running - it will be even more important to make sure you get it right or it will take upwards of 10 days to post, longer sometimes - unless you put it in there for earth day -

hope that helps!

Thanks and yes that helps!

 

[Penelope Street]

I do want to make sure that I stay within some bounds of reality, though.

I agree- it's an absolutely valid concern, but in the end it's still a fictional story and not an article in the New England Journal of Sadomasochism.

I've decided to put this in the BDSM category but I've written a brief forward. What do you think?

Vice Cream is a collection of seven short stories, with a common narrator, featuring nature’s most perfect food. Not all of the flavours are BDSM but I hope you will sample each one. As the saying goes, “Life is short, eat dessert first”. Enjoy…

Also, if I upload my story in a .doc format, will the italics, underlining and such be retained or do I need to make a mention of that when I submit it?

If you upload a file, I don't know that you need to do anything- however, then a site editor will have to, and they do make mistakes.

The safest choice is to copy & paste the text into the form. This option allows you to view the story in the manner it will appear before committing. If you choose this option, surround italics with <i></i> and bold with <b></b>. The brackets are different from those used for forum posts.

P.S.
I didn't grasp that the same character narrated all the stories?

 

[Keroin]

If you upload a file, I don't know that you need to do anything- however, then a site editor will have to, and they do make mistakes.

The safest choice is to copy & paste the text into the form. This option allows you to view the story in the manner it will appear before committing. If you choose this option, surround italics with <i></i> and bold with <b></b>. The brackets are different from those used for forum posts.

P.S.
I didn't grasp that the same character narrated all the stories?

Doh. I submitted yesterday, uploaded in .doc file. Wish I'd known about the brackets - I tried pasting in the text and using the forum style brackets with no success. Oh well, cross my fingers that it doesn't get too mangled.

I don't think it's overly obvious that it's the same narrator and it doesn't really matter but I thought it might help show a tie between the BDSM and non-BDSM stories.

Thanks for getting back to me!

 

[kaithel]

Just curious...now that you've already submitted, are you still looking for more feedback? Or are you 'closed for business'?

I'm new here, thought I might at least pitch in a bit...

Kaithel

 

[Keroin]

Just curious...now that you've already submitted, are you still looking for more feedback? Or are you 'closed for business'?

I'm new here, thought I might at least pitch in a bit...

Kaithel

Hi Kaithel and welcome!

I am always happy to recieve feedback, however MEH's story is the one currently being critiqued so maybe you should comment on his first? Or you could always PM me with comments. Whichever you like. I just hate to step on toes, LOL.

Cheers,
Keroin

 

[Penelope Street]

Just curious...now that you've already submitted, are you still looking for more feedback? Or are you 'closed for business'?

I'm new here, thought I might at least pitch in a bit.

Hi Kaithel,

While it's true we try to have only one discussion active at a time, few discussions ever officially close; so if a thread is still open and you want to contribute your thoughts, feel free to do so, regardless of whether it is the most recent discussion.

Take Care,
Penny

I am always happy to recieve feedback, however MEH's story is the one currently being critiqued so maybe you should comment on his first?

How'd 'Vice Cream' do with the readers?

 

[Keroin]

How'd 'Vice Cream' do with the readers?

Well, I've got one of those little red H's, which is nice and all the comments have been very positive. This is encouraging.

I'm glad I put it up for discussion here first though, as I think the changes I made, based on the feedback I received here, really helped tighten it up.

Thanks again to everyone!

 

[Keroin]

Just curious...now that you've already submitted, are you still looking for more feedback? Or are you 'closed for business'?

I'm new here, thought I might at least pitch in a bit...

Kaithel

I should also mention, if you're interested in critiquing Vice Cream, to read this version: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=413852

I posted on here before I submitted to Lit and the story that's up now has had several changes made to it.

Thanks,
K

 

[kaithel]

I should also mention, if you're interested in critiquing Vice Cream, to read this version: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=413852

I posted on here before I submitted to Lit and the story that's up now has had several changes made to it.

Thanks,
K

Ok! Now, what happened to all of that free time I had for, oh, 2 days or so?