Trojan War Story

[Colleen Thomas]

If you are going for historical accuracy, you would do well to study up on Schleiman. If you are simply writing a companion story to the myth cycle, IIRC there were few survivors of Troy, Man woman or Child. The city burned, that is usually not good for the taking of hostages or slaves.

I would think, your best bet, is to decide exactly how much historical/mythological accuracy you wish to impart before you set the first word to paper. It should have an affect on everything from you rbackground to stylistic questions.

Good Luck.

 

[TheCaptain]

If you are going for historical accuracy, you would do well to study up on Schleiman. If you are simply writing a companion story to the myth cycle, IIRC there were few survivors of Troy, Man woman or Child. The city burned, that is usually not good for the taking of hostages or slaves.

I would think, your best bet, is to decide exactly how much historical/mythological accuracy you wish to impart before you set the first word to paper. It should have an affect on everything from you rbackground to stylistic questions.

Good Luck.

hmmmm, well I get the feeling that alrem is going for some depth, but not too much to get the readers swept away in the confusion that overwhelming detail can sometimes provoke - remember, after all, that this is going to be an erotic story set in a historical/mythological framework.

Capt

 

[alrem]

Greetings Ma'am Coleen

I admit that I dont intent to be 100% accurate in regards with history because I'm not writing for history books but I'm writing for Literotica.

I still want to stay in the track of those important events but with some twisted approach to give more flavors in Mythology.

All authors who publishes Greek Mythology in movies, web and books have their own versions or approach. Well then, this story is the version of a Literotica fan.

I'm glad that you give effort to comment on this idea and I hope I can satisfy your interest once the story were published. *hoping it would not be rejected*

 

[alrem]

I just bumped this to say that I'm still working on this and currently finding a volunteer editor.

If everything goes fine, my first story on Lit will be available very soon

I hope there's someone interested to do it

 

[Colleen Thomas]

hmmmm, well I get the feeling that alrem is going for some depth, but not too much to get the readers swept away in the confusion that overwhelming detail can sometimes provoke - remember, after all, that this is going to be an erotic story set in a historical/mythological framework.

Capt

When you write a period piece, you are letting the reader's general knowledge set your back drop for you. To keep that setting with its attendant ambieance and atmosphere, you must be meticulous in providing detail to fit. For every slip, you loose any reader who is knowledgeable of that particular area.

Erotic stories are no less dependant on this than non erotic. For that reason, you are constrained to either follow some historical accuracy based on what is known or you are constrained to keep in at least something f a route step with the illiad. You can do both to some degree, but where they diverge, you have to follow one or the other.

I wasn't suggestion the writer need a degree in contemporary archeology or Ancinet Lit. I was saying you should choose which path you intend to follow before you being writing. Otherwise you may well find yourself wirting a situationthat is at cross purposes to your theme.

 

[TheCaptain]

I wasn't suggestion the writer need a degree in contemporary archeology or Ancinet Lit. I was saying you should choose which path you intend to follow before you being writing. Otherwise you may well find yourself wirting a situationthat is at cross purposes to your theme.

lol . So noted

I've actually READ alrem's first chapter on the Trojan War, which he called The Fall of Troy (don't think that's a major spoiler or I'd get in trouble with saying it ), and for the most part it's needing a good editor to keep the tenses consistent, as well as a little more length and substance to the story as a whole. I know it's only the first chapter of the whole story, but this was pretty dang small regardless...

I personally found that it had enough detail, but maybe then I was able to fill in the litte gaps here and there with my own knowledge... still, there's enough there IMO for someone with only a passing knowledge to pick up on the story and enjoy the erotica.

Just my thoughts.

Capt

 

[snooper]

... and for the most part it's needing a good editor to keep the tenses consistent, as well as a little more length and substance to the story as a whole. ...

Isn't it a little unkind to post this? If the author listens to the editor and fixes the problems, then why need the general public know what it looked like in draft?

 

[TheCaptain]

Isn't it a little unkind to post this? If the author listens to the editor and fixes the problems, then why need the general public know what it looked like in draft?

true none of that is really necessary to state out loud, my bad, but if alrem wants can let me know and I'll change the post asap but that's how it was to begin with, I was privy to his first attempt, and as far as I knew I didnt have to contain my thoughts on what I read of it.

I'm not an editor nor do I have the patience/disipline to be one, so I couldnt really help other than state a few things that needed help and reworking.

Capt

 

[alrem]

Snooper...

Your concern was greatly appriciated . But I'm not offended on what the captain commented. Infact I'm asking for advices and comments on my works to improve my writing skills. I accept that my first try was not really good enough to give interest on its erotic contents. (I'm a noob )

Captain...
I've given you a copy of my revised version of my story a couple of days ago but I've forgotten to PM you so maybe you didn't noticed that's its there. Sorry . Anyway, I became impatient to hunt for an editor and submitted my story on lit (I tried for several days though).

So... here it is! My first try: Fall of Troy

And please give feedback on this thread.

Currently I'm working on part two and definitely needs your feedback for improvements.

 

[TheCaptain]

Captain...
I've given you a copy of my revised version of my story a couple of days ago but I've forgotten to PM you so maybe you didn't noticed that's its there. Sorry . Anyway, I became impatient to hunt for an editor and submitted my story on lit (I tried for several days though).

So... here it is! My first try: Fall of Troy

And please give feedback on this thread.

Currently I'm working on part two and definitely needs your feedback for improvements.

Okay I've read through that copy, yes I do not check that email regularly so thanks for letting me know that you sent it there - and I've sent you a PM. Get back to me about the offer to help you out with editing your next work... I have my own projects I want to work with, too, but this is a great concept close to my own personal interests and would be more than happy to help you out when the time is available.

Capt