What's a good average score?

[Trombonus]

I don't think you need all that exposition... I think it could get easily incorporated into dialogue... what do you really tell us in those paragraphs? College kid (band geek who doesn't like himself very much) gets dumped by his girlfriend and walks in on two sorority girls... right? All we need to know can be teased out in the course of the action... it can be revealed a little at a time, instead of in one fell (and rather long and a little winded ) swoop... for example, the getting dumped thing could come out when he discovers the two girls. Instant turn-on (of course) and he could think to himself that it was a reminder that he hadn't been with a girl since what's-her-name... and a BRIEF exposition of what happened between them as he's standing in stunned silence at the nubile young flesh in front of him...

And I don't know who edited for you but they missed this one: "Everyone new Jenny was a wild girl" New should be Knew...

HTH!

lol, yeah I saw that too.

 

[MzDeviancy]

Nope, not very fishy at all -- the votes update in near real time, at least once an hour, but the views only update a couple of times a day -- every six hours at most. The seven views were probably from the approval process or you chicking on your story before it posted; by the time the first public views are added, you should have a thousand or so for that many votes.

Ahhhhhhhh. Gotcha. My pride would be hurt except later votes boosted it up to an H and I got lots of awesome feedback, so my ego is doing A-Okay.

I have an unposted story with something like 100,000 views; know what that's about? And when the hell do I get to choose the little caption that's under my name when I post?