words to avoid in erotic poetry

[LightningSeed]

“Manhood”

 

[cherries_on_snow]

Engorged.

 

[todski28]

“Manhood”

Engorged.

Blargh...... guilty of both on numerous occasions :/

 

[cascadiabound]

Eve used to create "forbidden" word challenges that really made you stretch your mental thesaurus around a topic to create a decent poem. For instance an Eve-ish challenge would be to write a 6 line poem about Night without using the words

night
dark
black
moon
stars
day​

Raven skies blanket the mountain
Inky water laps the shore
The evening’s fire casts no light
Now curled in shared warmth
Will there be fog in the morn?
Dreamless sleep awaits


I am not sure mine is any better...


moist makes me wince in porn poetry.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

bumpety bump

 

[thespeedbender]

certainly agree with everyone on the overall cheapening effect MOST words have when writing sex.

it's all the more important in this genre because even one distasteful word can sour a scene or break immersion. taste is already subjective enough, much less worrying about words that can be contextually distasteful as well.

but dammit there are only so many ways to have a boner!

don't worry bros. we gotchu.

 

[OneFineYoungCannibal]

bumpety bump

No I definitely wouldn't use "bempety bump" in a poem.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

No I definitely wouldn't use "bempety bump" in a poem.

Oh I don't know, it's quite descriptive

 

[SimonDoom]

Love pump/muscle/gun
Man meat
Throbbing gristle
She-flaps
Hot box
Petals of venus

There are others, I'm sure, but these seemed obvious.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Love pump/muscle/gun
Man meat
Throbbing gristle
She-flaps
Hot box
Petals of venus

There are others, I'm sure, but these seemed obvious.

That reads like one of the Japanese forms lol sorry only kidding you

 

[Tzara]

Love pump/muscle/gun
Man meat
Throbbing gristle
She-flaps
Hot box
Petals of venus

There are others, I'm sure, but these seemed obvious.

This Poem Is Titled "Heat"

My throbbing man-meat
may only be gristle

to the hot flaps
of your she-box, opened

like the petals of Venus
for my muscle-pumped love gun,

Baby. Make sure
your legs are spread for me. (I am at a loss for an appropriate emoji here. Is there a :gag: emoji?)



Thank you, Simon. Those are truly awful "sexy" words and phrases.

 

[Mrtenant]

This Poem Is Titled "Heat"

My throbbing man-meat
may only be gristle

to the hot flaps
of your she-box, opened

like the petals of Venus
for my muscle-pumped love gun,

Baby. Make sure
your legs are spread for me. (I am at a loss for an appropriate emoji here. Is there a :gag: emoji?)




Thank you, Simon. Those are truly awful "sexy" words and phrases.

Hysterical, love it

 

[UnderYourSpell]

This Poem Is Titled "Heat"

My throbbing man-meat
may only be gristle

to the hot flaps
of your she-box, opened

like the petals of Venus
for my muscle-pumped love gun,

Baby. Make sure
your legs are spread for me. (I am at a loss for an appropriate emoji here. Is there a :gag: emoji?)



Thank you, Simon. Those are truly awful "sexy" words and phrases.

Phawwwwww lol

 

[CuteSlaveLisa]

"I am a freak,
I like the girls with the boom,
I once got busy in a Burger King bathroom."

Although Gregory Jacob's personal banker or portfolio manager might say otherwise.

Love and Kisses

Lisa Ann

 

[AmericanTrash]

'tain't (unsure of spelling)

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Bumpety bump

 

[Lyricalli]

Bumpety bump

Would take some real skill to make that work in an erotic poem

 

[HarryHill]

..
Notch

 

[MorpheusLunar]

it's really not meant to be taken so seriously, pelegrino

having said that, it can be a useful reminder to writers that what might be their first word-choice isn't necessarily the best one for their poem. if you, as a writer, want your work to be received well, it's sometimes worth considering the reactions your words evoke. what might be a decent poem can be ruined by lazy, uninspired or simply poor judgement.

i am not saying anyone should never use any of the words we're coming up with here, in what's intended as a light-hearted thread; context is everything. and we, as writers, are perhaps a little more jaded than your non-writing readers - a word that might be terribly clichéd to us might still have the impact you desire for your intended audience.

so lighten up, dude... there has to be at least one word that makes you mentally wince when you come across it, surely?

right now i am considering how to write a piece that makes the 'c' word (gawd, i hated typing that) appealing - or at least not obnoxious.

Very well said Ms. Butters. Might I suggest something of the sort....."Above him she had squatted, eyes fixed in a stare, she slid her slippery moist (cat) deliberately and nervously over his (bat). When she finally accepted all that she could - her eyes rolled back and her lip it did quiver.".........

Hmmmmm leaves one wanting. Perhaps there is a better CNC word worth considering.

 

[Piscator]

This Poem Is Titled "Heat"

My throbbing man-meat
may only be gristle

to the hot flaps
of your she-box, opened

like the petals of Venus
for my muscle-pumped love gun,

Baby. Make sure
your legs are spread for me. (I am at a loss for an appropriate emoji here. Is there a :gag: emoji?)

The eggplant emoji came to mind but isn't on this threads menu. However, it seems there are a number of fruit, vegetable and other options.