Breeding fetish info/input requested!!

[switchbitch]

I keep coming back to this micro-story-prose...I really enjoy it!!

Finally remembered the check out that link, the map... LUV it!!

it isn't really a story its how I feel about my master.

 

[LiathLis]

Enjoying this story! I need to know what happens next, which is the mark of tale well written I guess. Looking forward to more.
For me on a personal level, I haven't actively thought of breeding as one of my kinks, but the more I examine it lately the more I realise the thought of it is very erotic to me. Example; if I'm reading a story, any 'boy meets girl' type of story, it is more pleasing and somehow more complete if the main characters get pregnant. Interesting!

 

[Marlene38EE]

Chapter 5

Owing to many complaints coming into my Private Messages, I'm bowing to public inbox-filling demand and removing this story form this thread.
My apologies.
I will be continuing it on my personal blog so that only those who choose to see it will and do not have to scroll through the length here or send me constant complaints and threats regarding the 'Inappropriateness' of posting it here in the forums.
My intentions were to offer a sneak-peek of the work and such, as it's plain this is not a fully-polished final revision.

It was meant as a courtesy, and a 'nice' gesture, not as a method as some of you have accused me of regarding 'shorting' the Submissions process.

However, as I am constantly being bombarded with 'reminders' that this is not the place to post works, I'm solving the issue to keep my messages inbox from flooding again.

M38EE

 

[Marlene38EE]

it isn't really a story its how I feel about my master.

Ah.

In any event, it's a very powerful piece...I don't know what you call it, prose, poetry, etc...but it's so compact and powerful!!

 

[Marlene38EE]

Thanks! Ch. 5 Posted now

Enjoying this story! I need to know what happens next, which is the mark of tale well written I guess. Looking forward to more.
For me on a personal level, I haven't actively thought of breeding as one of my kinks, but the more I examine it lately the more I realise the thought of it is very erotic to me. Example; if I'm reading a story, any 'boy meets girl' type of story, it is more pleasing and somehow more complete if the main characters get pregnant. Interesting!

Thank-You!!
That is a compliment, definitely!!
Chapter 5 is up now, and Ch. 6 is in the works...delays are;
We're on the road right now.
Internet connectivity is wonky at best.
I know what the place in the story looks like, but finding the right way to describe it....takes time. Experimenting with sentences, descriptions, erasing, trying again...

 

[gregy70]

Very Nice Ch 5

I love how she finds the mirror & the description that follows

 

[Marlene38EE]

Chapter Six

Owing to many complaints coming into my Private Messages, I'm bowing to public inbox-filling demand and removing this story form this thread.
My apologies.
I will be continuing it on my personal blog so that only those who choose to see it will and do not have to scroll through the length here or send me constant complaints and threats regarding the 'Inappropriateness' of posting it here in the forums.
My intentions were to offer a sneak-peek of the work and such, as it's plain this is not a fully-polished final revision.

It was meant as a courtesy, and a 'nice' gesture, not as a method as some of you have accused me of regarding 'shorting' the Submissions process.

However, as I am constantly being bombarded with 'reminders' that this is not the place to post works, I'm solving the issue to keep my messages inbox from flooding again.

M38EE

 

[Marlene38EE]

Marlene's Apologies...

The Flu and a cold have both taken my girl down, the only reason I'm still able to operate is dumb-luck I'm guessing.
In any event, she wanted me to extend her apologies for the delays in posting Ch. 6 , but she's pretty sick with a good fever going--so I think it's kind of self-explanatory.
I'm letting her sleep, looking after her and basically just being a mother-hen of a husband.
I'm not a writer, but I'm pretty good at handling things being dictated so we'll try to get Ch. 7 done that way--but between the fever, etc.. she's pretty woozy.
She'll be fine, I'm boosting her system with something called Oregamax that has certain benefits in fighting the Flu virus and I'm taking time off work to stay home with her until she's better enough to get by without me.
Technically she is right now, but, I don't hold to that idea so I'll stay home and look after my girl.
hell, maybe it'll teach my boss how to handle things on his own.

Martin

 

[LindsayRae]

Well, that's okay that she hasn't been posting in a while. The Fetish board (or any of the bulletin boards) aren't the play to "submit stories" anyway. But this is!

Hope she feels better.

 

[justherhusband]

Well, that's okay that she hasn't been posting in a while. The Fetish board (or any of the bulletin boards) aren't the play to "submit stories" anyway. But this is!

Hope she feels better.

You've made your point twice so far in this thread. You know what's in here so if you don't like it, just don't click on it any more.

 

[LindsayRae]

Still hope she gets over her flu. Being sick is never fun.

 

[LiathLis]

Loved the last chapter. Hope you're feeling better, I'm looking forward to some more.

 

[goodsonformom]

the ultimate submission, to be bred, to be a walking cradle, to have his seed grow inside me, for it to be his will that I gestate for him. To be forced to take an alien substance inside my body that will essentially change my body for at least nine months.The inescapable understanding that in this we no different from any other breeding animal. The inexorable growth of another body inside mine that is part of him. For this most intimate of occurrences to be practical and deliberately achieved rather than by romantic serendipity is for me is the ultimate submission and carries a thrill of the taboo.that wonderful feeling of being his thing to use.
Ummmm I guess maybe that makes it clear that it turns me on too! No? Walking away a wet dribbling mess even thinking about it.

Again I revisit your words and my cock hardens with the hunger to breed........mmmm............you put it all so eloquently......yes you create a desire that is hard to quench........

 

[Marlene38EE]

I won, Pneumonia lost

It started off as a cold, then turned into the Flu with a cold, then I woke up and felt like my lungs were turning into swimming pools.
Ever heard one of those middle eastern Hookah water pipes?
That's what my breathing sounded like...except worse and louder.
I'll be continuing on with the story, Chapter 7 has been on my mind a lot.

As for why I post the chapters here, it's because I've tried multiple times to submit it normally, and I've had it rejected every time for spelling errors and such.
Yes, I've used Autocorrect after programming it with updated Dictionary data, and I've gone through things with a fine-tooth comb, I've checked the grammar manually and with the autocorrect, etc..
They don't ever say anything specific, just something general like 'Spelling Errors'...so it's a nitpicking hunt through a haystack for a needle.
I've tried submitting in all the various formats they accept and list as acceptable, but after so many attempts, it'll be a while before I try that route again.

 

[gregy70]

So glad to see your back Marlene.
Lit just woundn't be the same without your presence.

 

[KatieTay]

.... "Spelling errors"? Just off the top of my head... they let through a story that spelled "orgasm" as "organism" consistently throughout the whole thing... and they don't let this story through?

This is quite strange.

 

[Marlene38EE]

So glad to see your back Marlene.
Lit just woundn't be the same without your presence.

Thanks!
Just popping in quick to adjust my signature and look aound quick.

 

[Marlene38EE]

.... "Spelling errors"? Just off the top of my head... they let through a story that spelled "orgasm" as "organism" consistently throughout the whole thing... and they don't let this story through?

This is quite strange.

I know, that's what's driving me to the point of distraction!!
I've tried everything I can to find every last grammatical and spelling error and root them out/correct them.
I've submitted it in exactly the right formats as they specify, and mentioned specifically that it was a multi-chapter piece, which they ask you to do if it is.
So, while trying to figure that out, I'll be posting here on this thread and on my blog, established just for this purpose while I continue pondering what it is I'm doing wrong.
Please see the link in my signature.

 

[Marlene38EE]

Here's an example...

Of the kind of lazy kind of crap responsible for my rejections happening every damned time I submit my work.
Which I will doubtfully ever attempt again.
The lack of attention in any proper manner is pretty self-evident to anyone who's read this story of mine.

IF YOU ARE GOING TO REJECT MY WORK, TRY READING IT FIRST!!!!!!
I AM SPEAKING TO YOU Laurel & Manu!!!

In short, I'm pissed off pretty supremely.
Those of you familiar with my work know well I do NOT use characters under the age of 18 in any way, shape or form.

This is copied DIRECTLY off the 'Submissions' page from my Literotica profile.
****BEGIN COPY & QUOTE**********
Dear Writer,

Thank you for your submission to Literotica. We appreciate the time and effort you've taken to write a story and submit it to our site. However, we've found that we cannot post your submission in its current form. The checklist below may help you in re-examining your manuscript.

Was there an underage (under 18 years old) sexual relationship in my story?

Please feel free to re-submit the story after a Volunteer Editor has examined it, or after you've made revisions. You can find a list of Volunteer Editors here.

Please consult our Writer's Resources section and make sure you read our submission guidelines:

If you have any questions on these, please let us know.

Thanks for your time, and look forward to reading you again!

Laurel & Manu
Literotica.Com
*********END COPY & QUOTE********

 

[LindsayRae]

Since Lit is only making an issue regarding the POTENTIAL (they didn't outrightly say you "did it") of under aged sexuality within whichever story you tried submitting, and not the spelling error issue at all, it seems you must have a hint somewhere no matter what ages you intended for your character.

If you say that they're in high school, but DO NOT say "Sally was an eighteen year old senior", Lit will axe you. If you say "Sally was curious about her budding breasts" they'll axe you. If you say "Peter had just gotten his first boner ever in his life" they may axe you.

Things that sounds like "developing" post-pubescent young people will not fly. If they sound dumber than a box of bricks regarding their bodies and/or sex, it sounds like they're still in the developmental stages of life and not eighteen or older. It may be possible out there, and there may be very few cases, but it's not likely to have a sexually naïve eighteen, twenty, or twenty-six year old.

So, it sounds like the age thing is where you need to focus your attention. Simply not stating an age isn't an automatic "this character is over the legal age, thank you". In fact, that's why some authors write up the "disclaimer" before their story begins.

 

[lovecraft68]

Since Lit is only making an issue regarding the POTENTIAL (they didn't outrightly say you "did it") of under aged sexuality within whichever story you tried submitting, and not the spelling error issue at all, it seems you must have a hint somewhere no matter what ages you intended for your character.

If you say that they're in high school, but DO NOT say "Sally was an eighteen year old senior", Lit will axe you. If you say "Sally was curious about her budding breasts" they'll axe you. If you say "Peter had just gotten his first boner ever in his life" they may axe you.

Things that sounds like "developing" post-pubescent young people will not fly. If they sound dumber than a box of bricks regarding their bodies and/or sex, it sounds like they're still in the developmental stages of life and not eighteen or older. It may be possible out there, and there may be very few cases, but it's not likely to have a sexually naïve eighteen, twenty, or twenty-six year old.

So, it sounds like the age thing is where you need to focus your attention. Simply not stating an age isn't an automatic "this character is over the legal age, thank you". In fact, that's why some authors write up the "disclaimer" before their story begins.

Somebody should have really told "youbadboy" all this. His stories are rife with the stuff you just described. Either they are getting tigher-as he has not done anything in awhile- or they let some stuff go in the case of very popular authors.

Back last year I had one rejected for saying someone was 16. It was a non sexual situation, but they still tagged it. I fixed it, but another author made the remark that once you've been around awhile you can get some leeway. two months ago I posted something not blatant, but close enough to get the axe. Nothing.

End of the day they are consistently inconsistent.

 

[Darkniciad]

If what's posted here is what you submitted, I can tell you exactly what's causing the spelling and punctuation rejections.

When you end dialogue on a statement and use a dialogue tag, you need to end the quote with a comma, not a period.

"I don't know," she said.

Instead of

"I don't know." She said.

That's the most common grammar rejection reported throughout the years I've been here.

As to the underage, I don't see it in anything posted here. Nor do I see any of the usual triggers that cause an erroneous underage rejection. That's assuming that the rejection in question wasn't for a chapter not shown here.

 

[lloyd_5]

Like LindsayRae said, you need to be explicit that characters are 18 or over and you write,

"The first new Mare I saw was a woman who couldn't have been more than eighteen -" - which may be the problem. She MAY be under-18.

The spelling is better than a lot that gets published but I find the layout a bit difficult. All those asterisks in Ch1 should go.

 

[Marlene38EE]

Like LindsayRae said, you need to be explicit that characters are 18 or over and you write,

"The first new Mare I saw was a woman who couldn't have been more than eighteen -" - which may be the problem. She MAY be under-18.

The spelling is better than a lot that gets published but I find the layout a bit difficult. All those asterisks in Ch1 should go.

Just had a look...yes, the asterisks SHOULD go.
Because I Didn't Put Them In There To Begin With.
Went through the other chapters I posted here in the forum...
what the hell happened to the formatting and layout??
....does it change it's default setting day-to-day??
Case in point, the vertical line of asterisks in Ch. 2.
WTF???????
What's here doesn't look anything like what the originals do.

If you want to read the originals, they're at my blog, and will NOT be made available here.
These were 'rough' sneak-peek copies, before their polishing for submission.

That under eighteen thing...right, they're gonna penalize for a common expression type, that folks use everyday, have for centuries...if that IS the problem, whatever...

I really don't care anymore...they were finding spelling errors that don't exist.
...and there are accepted stories here with spelling erors galore.

So, yeah...I'm done caring about the issue anymore.
It's a waste of my time, I have better things to do than endlessly search for spelling errors that after six complete teardowns and word-by-word, line-by-line searching and checking along with a standalone up-to-date spellchecker shows me to anyone's satisfaction the manuscripts I sent into the Submission channels were spelling error free.
I did that kind of checking after every Rejection before every re-Submission...there were 6 Rejections.
Do any of you have any idea how much time and nit-picking detail-oriented concentration that takes doing once, let alone 6 times?

As I said, I've already put in far too much time on this, nothing's going to be done about it, and I'm just going to hang out in the forums.

I'm much more disheartened than angry.
I've heard that this exact same thing has happened to several other women here, so at least I know I'm not being singled-out precisely.

If you want to read my work, don't look for it here, my blog address is in my signature.

CASE CLOSED​

 

[sr71plt]

I see you didn't calm down. Most of the rest of us pass stories into the collection without any trouble and have been doing so for years. So I'm not even close to believing that this is something the submitting system is doing to you. It's something your own submission procedure is doing--but you aren't calm or polite enough to begin to pay attention to attempts to help you figure out what is very likely YOUR problem.

I don't try any fancy formatting (it's the publisher, not the author who designs formatting in the publishing industry), and I simply cut and paste from word into the submissions box, and it's always worked a charm. You might try that too. Use no coding except italics (rendered with angle brackets: <i> and </i>) and you should be fine. It has already been suggested that your punctuation problem is that you incorrectly mark dialogue and you've never really explained away the rejection for underage that I can see. So, these most likely are legitimate problems established by you if you are still being rejected for these reasons.

I've posted over 500 stories here and haven't needed to have the meltdown you are having on two boards.