Craft of writing: blowjobs

[Statius]

Easy, @anthrodisiac controls murderous thread jacking Polar Bears. Just nod and back away.

@anthrodisiac, let the record show I'm not the one who brought up the polar bears in this thread. This time

 

[anthrodisiac]

Easy, @anthrodisiac controls murderous thread jacking Polar Bears. Just nod and back away.

You think I control them?! If I controlled them, would I have lost 49 seal body doubles?

Ignore the fact I found out those 49 were embezzling my funds. Totally coincidental.

 

[Orangekayak]

I'll just touch on inner experiences. The rest is pretty straightforward in my opinion. You can certainly get creative and flowery with the descriptions of the action, but sex scenes can be about a lot more than the action. If you're going beyond a straight-up porn piece, where the characters are flat and the plot flimsy, then the sex scene is doing more work than simply two characters having sex. The act itself can establish dynamics, with the inner experiences fleshing out that dynamic and building on character depth and growth.

Your main driver of how to describe the scene is going to be voice. Who's POV is it from? Is this person more of a thinker, observer, analyst, a feeler? Most good BJ scenes both the action and also incorporate other elements of the POV character, thoughts, emotion, unique to that person, like you've mentioned.

But if you want to focus on the inner experiene of both persons you'll need omniscient 3rd. When you're doing that, you want to group action, thought, feeling, emotion, into distinct paragraphs so it's clear whose head we're in. Bouncing back and forth between the parties can easily get confusing if we're not just reporting the action, but also the inner experiences of both parties.

Focusing on both parties also can dampen the impact of both. By dividing reader attention between the inner experiences of two people for one action, they can't sit with a single character's experience and emesh themselves in the scene. Think of it like a comfy chair. You put someone in that chair, and just as they're getting comfortable and used to it, you yank them out and stick them in another chair. Fine, okay, they get comfy in there, and then you yank them out and plop them back into another chair. They never get settled and comfortable with the one chair, and you'd almost have been better off having them stand and watch the chairs fucking than to put them in one of the chairs.

Not sure what happened to that last sentence... Or really the analogy. Point is, yanking someone out of someone's head back and forth, back and forth, doesn't let the reader truly immerse themselves in the experience, and so even the emotion and thought is reported instead of experienced.

So, what do these thoughts and experiences look like? Depends on your characters, their voice, their thought styles, their personality, etc.

The following assumes consensual BJ. It's very, very different otherwise. But this is probably what you're going for. It also will differ on who is the primary driver of action, the blower or blowee (e.g. the blower doing most of the work vs. the blowee doing most of the work).

Analytical blower:
The focus of the pleaser is on the small details of the pleasee, the twitches and signs, verbal or otherwise, of what's working, what isn't. Does a particular movement or touch generate a stronger response than others. Is it ever too much? More teeth, more tongue, less tongue, deeper, shallowers. The focus is on discovery in a newer relationship, testing out new techniques in an established relationship.

Analytical blowee:
Kind of a trippy one. Mixing of the pleasure while also focusing on what exactly the person is doing. Sort of an inversion of the blower. The focus is on the technique, yes, but also the little details. This works better for a worrier, who's constantly looking for signs that perhaps the blower is uncomfortable. Are they wincing, was a thrust too forceful? Do they seem bored?

Emotional blower:
Focus is less on technique (which isn't to say there isn't technique, you would just focus less on that), more on the feeling elicited by the act. Do they feel good watching their partner squirm? Do they enjoy staying still while their partner is more forceful? Is there perhaps something that triggers a different emotion? You'll want to tie action to emotion, but make sure not to impede the flow of the action too much. You could also have it so the action is almost more implied, less the focus, and the scene is primarily one of emotionality.

Emotional blowee: Similar.

Thinky blower: Kind of a mix between analytical observer and emotional. You have emotion, yes, but you have associations beyond the emotion as well. Does this trigger memories of something? Are they wondering what their partner is thinking?

Thinky blowee: Similar.

Clearly, I got lazy part way through writing this.

This is super helpful! Thank you!

 

[Orangekayak]

All this chatter about blowjobs, where's the pussy licking, tongue fucking, clit lapping stuff! Damnt, I'm a card-carrying lesbian!

Somenof these were going to be some next threads! I’m currently working on a story with a bj hense the ask, but I’m hoping to keep these convos going. These is a lot of territory to cover!

 

[anthrodisiac]

This is super helpful! Thank you!

Glad to be of assistance!

Somenof these were going to be some next threads! I’m currently working on a story with a bj hense the ask, but I’m hoping to keep these convos going. These is a lot of territory to cover!

Sweet!

The inner experience advice is going to be consistent throughout all the actions, it's a general principle that you can apply to any sex act (or really any act or action generally). That's all character and voice-driven, fairly independent from whatever act is taking place. But the rest of it, yeah, bring it on!

 

[MillieDynamite]

Oh sure, she'd give me a punch in the nose, I mean pass!

I offer the same advice on that as I did for blowjobs, get first hand experience, as much as you can... Of course, I'd probably need a mentor. You think your partner would give you a hall pass???

 

[EmilyMiller]

All this chatter about blowjobs, where's the pussy licking, tongue fucking, clit lapping stuff! Damnt, I'm a card-carrying lesbian!

https://www.literotica.com/s/69-minutes

 

[KittyOfSteele]

• different ways to describe a penis

This might not be your concern as I doubt this is for the Transgender category... but I know that some dicks can rather have a very feminine appearance. It's mostly us femme dick users who sport those, but feminine can have rather different meaning according to the person.

I don't know if this adds or removes anything to the thread, but that's one rabbit hole to go into... and a possible free plot bunny to any of you voyeurs who love to read my posts and leave an out of context like.

 

[anthrodisiac]

I guess if you want some kind of first-hand experience without sucking an actual cock, you could have a bit of a half-measure and suck a realistic dildo. Try dual-density silicone, it's pretty close to the real thing, especially if you warm it up first. It's not quite the full experience, but you'd get the basic idea of what a cock feels like in your mouth and what techniques you could utilize.

 

[anthrodisiac]

This might not be your concern as I doubt this is for the Transgender category... but I know that some dicks can rather have a very feminine appearance. It's mostly us femme dick users who sport those, but feminine can have rather different meaning according to the person.

I don't know if this adds or removes anything to the thread, but that's one rabbit hole to go into... and a possible free plot bunny to any of you voyeurs who love to read my posts and leave an out of context like.

I think dicks writ large (heh) have a very wide range of appearances, so give your characters whatever penises you want!

 

[KittyOfSteele]

I think dicks writ large (heh) have a very wide range of appearances, so give your characters whatever penises you want!

Hmm... Thinking about a werewolf t-girl who is struggling about having a knotted cock now.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Oh sure, she'd give me a punch in the nose, I mean pass!

I kinda figured with a partner like you, she might be a touch possessive. Good thing y’all are in Oklahoma and I’m down here in Texas. She’d probably kick my butt for even thinking about it.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Hmm... Thinking about a werewolf t-girl who is struggling about having a knotted cock now.

There is just so much going on in that image. So many possibilities, so many ways to tie things together. It’s hard not to get stuck on one at the expense of the others.

 

[anthrodisiac]

Hmm... Thinking about a werewolf t-girl who is struggling about having a knotted cock now.

That's a whole litter of plot bunnies right there. I love it so much

There is just so much going on in that image. So many possibilities, so many ways to tie things together. It’s hard not to get stuck on one at the expense of the others.

I can knot believe you went there!

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

That's a whole litter of plot bunnies right there. I love it so much


I can knot believe you went there!

I know. I can be such a knotty little bitch sometimes...

 

[MillieDynamite]

She can be a bit possessive. Not as much these days as before we were married. In the first two years of our relationship, she got, um, rough with men and let them know, hands off. While it wasn't necessary, it was sort of sexy in an overbearing agressive sort of way.

I kinda figured with a partner like you, she might be a touch possessive. Good thing y’all are in Oklahoma and I’m down here in Texas. She’d probably kick my butt for even thinking about it.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

She can be a bit possessive. Not as much these days as before we were married. In the first two years of our relationship, she got, um, rough with men and let them know, hands off. While it wasn't necessary, it was sort of sexy in an overbearing agressive sort of way.

When you find a jewel, you protect and defend it.

 

[MillieDynamite]

Thanks, I needed that. Jo finally admitted she was so proud I lost the weight, but it wasn't necessary for her to love me. I told her, I did it for me, so I don't end up with health issues like my Mum. Her weight has a major impact on her health over the past few years. That scared me.

When you find a jewel, you protect and defend it.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Thanks, I needed that. Jo finally admitted she was so proud I lost the weight, but it wasn't necessary for her to love me. I told her, I did it for me, so I don't end up with health issues like my Mum. Her weight has a major impact on her health over the past few years. That scared me.

From my limited exposure, you’re a truly special woman. Happy for both of you.

EDIT: and if you need to assauge any concerns my comments might have given Jo, just let her know i’m not a ‘real’ lesbian…yet.

 

[FrancesScott]

I’m looking for some discussion around the craft of writing specific to blowjobs.

Fellatio with only monosyllables:

https://www.literotica.com/s/cum-for-me-750-words

 

[MK_Whimsy]

Fellatio with only monosyllables:

https://www.literotica.com/s/cum-for-me-750-words

That's pretty novel!

 

[FrancesScott]

That's pretty novel!

It’s hard to use polysyllables when your mouth is full. I don’t just write lesbian.

 

[MK_Whimsy]

FWIW, I attempted some oral sex scenes in a few nonhuman/monster stories. One thing that (I think) helped me was looking for colorful similes and terms to describe the act. In The Minotaur's Underling, I used phrases like "sealing an envelope" and "figure-eight patterns."

Also, in Sphinx and Mouse, I described the act as "eating" and "feasting" to tie it to the overarching predator/prey theme of the story.

 

[anthrodisiac]

FWIW, I attempted some oral sex scenes in a few nonhuman/monster stories. One thing that (I think) helped me was looking for colorful similes and terms to describe the act. In The Minotaur's Underling, I used phrases like "sealing an envelope" and "figure-eight patterns."

Also, in Sphinx and Mouse, I described the act as "eating" and "feasting" to tie it to the overarching predator/prey theme of the story.

Anthro buddy!

Sorry, I'll calm down now.

 

[MK_Whimsy]

Anthro buddy!

Sorry, I'll calm down now.

A Minotaur could be considered an anthro buddy