Embarras de Richesse

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A Strong Debut, and an Old Pro with Weak Technicals

Rowdygal22 makes a strong debut with "It's Always Been You". Good, sweet and hot, and a well-drawn depiction of a relationship. Good technicals, no quibbles.

DG Hear is back with "An Affair I'll Remember". It's a long story, and the technicals are very weak for an accomplished author. In fact, there were so many errors I didn't bother quibbling. He says he has an editor; exactly what said editor contributed I could not tell. That said, the plot is very realistic. The commentators who want their stories wrapped up in neat packages may cavil, but DG leaves a number of details up in the air. Just like real life. And his characters are believable.

 

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Another Strong Debut - And A Strong Series

Legsbian writes a real good first-timer in So I Went To One Of Those Parties. A lesbian Huck Finn? Good narration, decent mechanicals.
And a plug for an author for whom I copy edit, Ilmonamour, now on board with Ch 4 of Reading the Defense. If it were a stand-alone story, she'd win the SA Penn Lady Stakes in a walk.

 

[estragon]

The Great Syd Scores Again

Ch 8 of How to Save a Life is tete-de-cuvee Sydney Blake. Just gets better. Brava to Syd for a wonderful series.

 

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And to make up for an omission, kudos to Irate Quaker for "Ah, The Life Of A Geek", a funny and happy Nude Day story. Good storytelling.

 

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Just When I Thought Sydney Blake Had Peaked

she brings out another stormer from "How To Save A Life". Chapter 9 provides a climax (pun intended) to Mack's and Rena's relationship. Good hot sex and really fine character development. Love it, Syd! More!

K'AnneMeinel had a great story idea with Ghostly Love, but the mechanicals were awful. I think s/he deleted my public comment, which is OK with me, if only s/he puts more effort into writing it right. She had a fine story line, Stacey is believable and Renata makes me want to suspend my disbelief, but the mechanicals are just appalling. I actually gave up a much-desired whiskey sour to quibble the whole thing, it was that good, but it felt like two hours of shoveling snow.

 

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Ilmonamour continues a fine series with Chapter 5 of "Reading the Defense". And I plead guilty to missing a typo in the second paragraph--"go to" should be "got to". It's a long walk back to the bench when you miss a block, even when you're hustling back.

Yes, there is a motivation issue in the conflict between Gabe and Sam, as one commentator pointed out; but that exceeds my remit as copy editor. I therefore leave plot and characterization to the author and the others who collaborated with her. She, with their help, has crafted a really fine story.

 

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Nigel Debonnaire's Nude on the Bering Sea deserves more credit than it's gotten so far. A sea story well told.

 

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PoissonSurLaLune Has a Good Story

in Dom and Lisa. Despite my copyediting quibbles, which Poisson disregarded as is his/her good right, the story is a good one. Poisson is a good storyteller. I gave it a high rating, as it certainly is sweet and hot.

Sydney Blake's "How to Save a Life" just gets better. I just beta-read Ch 10, and ol' Syd is on a roll. Not yet published, but watch for it.

DG Hear also has a new series, not yet published. I've been doing some light copy editing, and DG's many fans won't be disappointed. What's-his-name in VA, who always puts the blast on DG, will no doubt have his usual jeers, but who cares? Ol' DG can sure tell a tale.

 

[estragon]

A Very Fine Effort

mechanicals aside, which led to a nine-page quibble, was LunaEroticaMystica's Lavender and Love. What a beautiful concept, lovingly and erotically told! This lady can tell a tale. I don't do hours' worth of quibbles for any but the top of the class. Luna, you're professional grade!

 

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Vive La Corse!

And Letters From Tatyana's love story about the Corsican woman at Harvard is a winner. Extremely fine mechanicals (one tiny typo quibble), a really believable set of characters, and an ending that leaves you wanting more.

The Nude Day contest has produced some fine work.

 

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Sydney Blake rolled out Ch 10 of "How to Save a Life", and Syd is definitely on yet another roll. Can't praise the story enough.

And Stella Omega just posted a scorcher of a story, to go with the present heat wave. Meeting Robby is dynamite storytelling and ultra-hot sex. This writer is definitely premier league.

 

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Hail to the Victors

D_Lynn's stunning Tribal Unity certainly is worthy of high praise, and shows a mastery of plot and character; but on balance I still preferred LunaEroticaMystica's brilliant Lavender and Love. Howbeit, hail to the victors of the Nude Day Contest! Keep writing!! I eagerly await your next efforts.

 

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D_Lynn is throwing heat! Coming off her win in the Nude Day competition, her latest story, Games We Played, is hot, and her dialogue and characterization is spot-on, as our British cousins say. Incest is not my category. As a general rule I'm a Romance, EC and Lesbian fancier for my own reading pleasure, but this story is good stuff.

 

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DG Hear's new series "Am I Guilty?" is a crime story with a twist, Well worth reading, especially now that I copy edited it.

And Ilmonamour is about to conclude her wonderful "Reading the Defense" series, but she promises a return some day to Brad and Sam. Eagerly waiting.

 

[ILmonamour]

Much love....

You know I have much love for ya E. How have I missed your thread? Thank you for mentioning the bad boy that is! Happy Friday

 

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Il, it's a great series. You have real promise as a writer. More!

 

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A stroker with some really good writing is "A Daring Chance" by nymphobrainiac. Her scores are just below "H" so far, but her writing isn't. A better grade of stroke.

 

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Thucydides’ Share the Road is a winner, as is Pussrider’s IC3 Female, a police procedural that is anything but routine. Good stuff today.

And of course, the last chapter of Ilmonamour’s Reading the Defense, the finale to a monumental debut by a hot (in every sense of the word) new talent. You go, girl!!!

 

[estragon]

Fetish, Anyone?

Although not on my usual reading list, I must give kudos to GirlWithBoots for a watersports entry that transcends the usual piss-and-shit school of writing. Her story My First Bathroom Incident, once you get past the turn-off title, is hot, and psychologically interesting. Her protagonist becomes real. A very hot story, and more than just another stroker for the more exotically inclinded.

 

[SydneyBlake]

It has been suggested that a little more than copy editing has been going on behind the scenes of this thread, and I just want to set the record straight. I, Sydney Blake, have NOT been privately sending images of a lascivious nature to the originator of this thread in exchange for public praise.

I cannot vouch for PennLady, however.

Or those other little tarts.

 

[PennLady]

It has been suggested that a little more than copy editing has been going on behind the scenes of this thread, and I just want to set the record straight. I, Sydney Blake, have NOT been privately sending images of a lascivious nature to the originator of this thread in exchange for public praise.

I cannot vouch for PennLady, however.

Or those other little tarts.

Sydney, I'm appalled. As though a married mother of two like myself would do such a thing.

http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_la5j4fASNL1qb6ju7.jpg

He made me.

 

[SydneyBlake]

Sydney, I'm appalled. As though a married mother of two like myself would do such a thing.

http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_la5j4fASNL1qb6ju7.jpg

He made me.

I see you found some time to relax, you floozie.

 

[PennLady]

I see you found some time to relax, you floozie.

At least I kept my clothes on. Ahem.

Posted by Sydney: http://a7.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hpho...41755350_100002103842910_273595_6163582_n.jpg

 

[SydneyBlake]

At least I kept my clothes on. Ahem.

Posted by Sydney: http://a7.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hpho...41755350_100002103842910_273595_6163582_n.jpg

Maybe, but I see nipple!

 

[ILmonamour]

Loving this...

Oh how I am loving this on a Friday night, or is it because I have no life or wait a minute ; )

I am so confused..it's the wine! You two make me laugh!!