~~Haiku River~~

[Unbridled_Passion]

tired and grumpy,
I head out the door into
another work day

 

[templeminded]

Every time you hear
the click of a camera
and someone's picture is taken
Time stands still
frozen forever

 

[templeminded]

All the people
that are in my life
is what makes
LIFE what it is today

I had a dream
to pay close attention
to my dreams
There was something they had to say

The dream i dreamed
was of you and me
In each others arms
smiling
for all the world to see


What this means
I'm not sure
Guess I'll have to dream
another dream
Or so,
it would seem

 

[hmmnmm]

wasp writes a solo
displays it on the way home
enters paper door

 

[My Erotic Trail]

wasp writes a solo
displays it on the way home
enters paper door

(~_~) I like...


............................

five syllables
then seven more please
haiku river write

 

[hmmnmm]

(~_~) I like...


............................

five syllables
then seven more please
haiku river write

Shhhh...
this better?

wasp writes a solo
displays it on the way home
paper door entry


Shhhh...

 

[hmmnmm]

lone osprey aloft
acrobatic feats performed
wordless reverence

 

[My Erotic Trail]

Shhhh...
this better?

wasp writes a solo
displays it on the way home
paper door entry


Shhhh...

actually, I should have made two posts.
I liked your Haiku, and we rarely meet perfect syllable counts on this thread. The reference to the syllables was to help templeminded understand how haiku is generally written. Thanks for the reads! (~_~)

 

[hmmnmm]

actually, I should have made two posts.
I liked your Haiku, and we rarely meet perfect syllable counts on this thread. The reference to the syllables was to help templeminded understand how haiku is generally written. Thanks for the reads! (~_~)

My apology, I meant does "paper door entry" work better than "enters paper door"
Or, I thought of "slips through paper door"

So they qualify as Haiku or at least Haikuish?

Thanks for the encouraging word.

 

[hmmnmm]

endless bluest blue
resuscitating us all
skylight pharmacy




???????????????

 

[templeminded]

hummmmmm, thanks for the info. didn't know it was meant for me (big grin)
I know that i am not good with the way that all is written on LIT. I have never been good with anything other than just writing what I feel and not good with anything other than what on LIT. is called a & B writing. when I was raised I was taught that this was the correct way to write. not sure if it is just new times with new rhymes or if I just didn't pay attention in school.
do not mean to offend anyone with the way that I write. i just try to join in the best that I can. and yes, I think that the thoughts you come up with is awesome. makes the mind work which is what I like
have a wonderful day
nin-

 

[hmmnmm]

waxwings center stage
flock and flutter for cherries
reroute, fir alight

 

[hmmnmm]

wasp improvises
plays zigzag solo homeward
slips thru paper door





?????????????????????

 

[hmmnmm]

cherries torn apart
gangbanger cedar waxwings
leave no leftovers

 

[hmmnmm]

?????????


waxwings rapacious
shred red virginal cherries
leave no leftovers



??????????​

 

[hmmnmm]

!!!!!!!!!!

waxwings rapacious
shred red virginal cherries
leave leftovers strewn


????????​

 

[My Erotic Trail]

hummmmmm, thanks for the info. didn't know it was meant for me (big grin)
I know that i am not good with the way that all is written on LIT. I have never been good with anything other than just writing what I feel and not good with anything other than what on LIT. is called a & B writing. when I was raised I was taught that this was the correct way to write. not sure if it is just new times with new rhymes or if I just didn't pay attention in school.
do not mean to offend anyone with the way that I write. i just try to join in the best that I can. and yes, I think that the thoughts you come up with is awesome. makes the mind work which is what I like
have a wonderful day
nin-

Well in japan they may be very strict on the syllable count and content of nature scenes but here in america we adapt and over come (grinin' and use HAIKU ...more for a guide line... or the base for a short poem. So enjoy the thread and spill your poetic soul in 3 short lines (~_~)

..................


hmmmmmm.....

"I meant does "paper door entry" work better than "enters paper door"
Or, I thought of "slips through paper door"


I like 'enters paper door' ....

... getting a handle on, a paper door... (grin (~_~)

 

[hmmnmm]

I like 'enters paper door' ....

... getting a handle on, a paper door... (grin (~_~)

now that's intresting.
when to ed it, or leave it
"enters paper hole"?


for now staying strict
syllables of seventeen
later blur, break, play

 

[hmmnmm]

waiting for haikus
my sense and their existence
today disconnect


waiting for haikus
friday they were ev'rywhere
fucking smoke returned


seems that most formats
were invented by someone
for a reason, then


could call 'em tres-kus
but haiku sounds pretty good
love japanese feel

could call 'em tre-kus
mix orient and romance
then it's real english

buna, papa san
que se ra, yaki soba
please pass the spleef, chief
​

 

[templeminded]

Well in japan they may be very strict on the syllable count and content of nature scenes but here in america we adapt and over come (grinin' and use HAIKU ...more for a guide line... or the base for a short poem. So enjoy the thread and spill your poetic soul in 3 short lines (~_~)

..................


with you being from JAPAN you would know (big grin)
yea we all know that we americans are lazy with our words
that's what makes all the other ones so wonderful to hear

 

[templeminded]

hummnmm

i may not can write right
but enjoy what you do
so do more please

 

[hmmnmm]

nature nature! but
the view obliterated
catch something within?

the sky should be blue
if I shall catch a haiku
oops, that was a rhyme

was there long ago
but recall very few words
really dug the food

my fingers are sore
from counting the syllables
wish I had a joint​

 

[templeminded]

a rose today
or just the thorns
not sure, which, i will be

 

[hmmnmm]

a rose today
or just the thorns
not sure, which, i will be

Looks
haikuishly good
to me.

 

[templeminded]

Looks
haikuishly good
to me.

thank you
my haiku friend
have a haikuishly good day