I give up!

[Softouch911]

Yeah, I know, I don't think guys understand. Tried a bit of flashing in one story but couldn't do the full pizza boy fantasy. Oh yes! It is a fantasy!

You two are hysterical! Great stuff -- have you thought of writing them from the cop, or UPS driver, or Pizza boy POV? Might be pretty funny stuff! Or horny.


Softie -- don't go there (for each of you)

 

[zukethecuke]

LMAO. Very funny.

I had the same thoughts when the UPS man brought me a package. I wanted to invite him in....

SJ

A lively fantasy life can cause problems in real life if you aren't careful....

When I was 18 or 19 I had a summer job on the grounds crew at an apartment complex. Lots of fantasies about bored housewives inviting me in for a glass of lemonade, etc. On the rare occasions one of the residents spoke to me at all I practically froze up waiting for the invitation, but all they ever wanted was for me to pull a weed or pick up litter I'd missed. Really, who was interested in a skinny, sweaty college boy? Maybe a skinny, sweaty college girl would be, but they were all waiting tables while I was mowing lawns.

 

[sophia jane]

A lively fantasy life can cause problems in real life if you aren't careful....

When I was 18 or 19 I had a summer job on the grounds crew at an apartment complex. Lots of fantasies about bored housewives inviting me in for a glass of lemonade, etc. On the rare occasions one of the residents spoke to me at all I practically froze up waiting for the invitation, but all they ever wanted was for me to pull a weed or pick up litter I'd missed. Really, who was interested in a skinny, sweaty college boy? Maybe a skinny, sweaty college girl would be, but they were all waiting tables while I was mowing lawns.

Lol. So true. I can't look my UPS man in the eye now (truly).

SJ

 

[JamesSD]

More feedback

I liked Special Delivery. There's a certain level of camp to the whole "I have a PACKAGE for you" sort of thing, but you executed it well and did a nice job of implying this was the culmination of a smoldering mutual curiosity/lusting.

Night Noises cuts to the action pretty quickly. Its a great fantasy regardless of perfect realism in how it starts. And that's a real perk of fantasies! And again you execute it quite well.

Speeding Ticket has a certain eloquent brevity to it.

About the only suggestion I can offer to you is to try deeper, more complex stories. You have a great grasp for sex scenes, and set up interesting scenarios. I suppose the next step is deeper characterizations and relationships between the characters involved. Or you can stick to the great work you've been doing!

Didn't touch the poems, as I'm not really into poetry.

 

[sophia jane]

About the only suggestion I can offer to you is to try deeper, more complex stories. You have a great grasp for sex scenes, and set up interesting scenarios. I suppose the next step is deeper characterizations and relationships between the characters involved. Or you can stick to the great work you've been doing!

Didn't touch the poems, as I'm not really into poetry.

Thanks so much for the comments and feedback. I am working on a longer story right now- so I absolutely agree that's my next step. But I'm sure I'll go back to write a few short ones, too, since they're so much fun to do.

SJ

 

[elfin_odalisque]

SJ

Don't ever change or listen to them 'inter-lick-to-ells'. Your stuff is just great as it is - don't ever change.

Can I suck your toes tonight?

 

[MagicFingers]

Your Stories are nice, but...

I had to add how refreshing it is to see such simple and direct, to the point titles like the ones in your poems:
Fucking
Tattoo
Who
Intimidating

Very nice titles & poems, and they match the works.