The castle
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BeautifulDream
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Alright, now I'm going to be nice... or try to be nice.
Wolfgirl, we are fucking with you. It's mean, I know, and I'm sorry for that. Well, sorta sorry. Please don't let this discourage you from writing, but in all honesty, you're writing skills are not up to par. Simple one-liners are not good reads. You write like your in some Chat Avenue lounge. A large majority of us here are more interested in longer interesting post. We type out word after word, at least most of us do try.
Work on your writing skills. Add more. Make it interesting. Instead of saying one simple action, do MORE. Think about it. One does not simply "walk into a room." One "walks into a room, kicks off her shoes, falls onto the couch like she owns the bitch." See! Right there! I made it more interesting by just adding a few extra things!
Read some of the work that is in the SRP area, look at how they write and then try again.
Wolfgirl, we are fucking with you. It's mean, I know, and I'm sorry for that. Well, sorta sorry. Please don't let this discourage you from writing, but in all honesty, you're writing skills are not up to par. Simple one-liners are not good reads. You write like your in some Chat Avenue lounge. A large majority of us here are more interested in longer interesting post. We type out word after word, at least most of us do try.
Work on your writing skills. Add more. Make it interesting. Instead of saying one simple action, do MORE. Think about it. One does not simply "walk into a room." One "walks into a room, kicks off her shoes, falls onto the couch like she owns the bitch." See! Right there! I made it more interesting by just adding a few extra things!
Read some of the work that is in the SRP area, look at how they write and then try again.
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I shoot all three with tranct darts. "Anyone else?!"
zydrate
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And adding 'bitch' to anything makes it more interesting!!
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My Thread Is Hell!
BeautifulDream
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Again....
Dear, please read what I wrote you. And honestly, I'll offer my services if you need some help or something. But, your writing is dreadful and many of us find it insulting.
PM me if you have questions, I'll help you because I know what it's like to be in your shoes but PLEASE reevaluate your writing!
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I mean litterally my thread is now HELL
Firmhanded_Daddy
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"uuuuuuuuungh"
The soft shuffling gait was unheared over a louder, ear piercing sound. A cacophony of sound, like thousands of damned souls wailing, mingled with razor blades being drawn over the surface of a chalk board. The source of this terrible noise was the sound of metal grating over the solid stone floors. The heavy chain link end of the chain saw was carelessly dragging behind him.
It was a male, in life. In unlife gender didn't matter. Only one thing mattered, the need to feast upon the flesh of the living. The need to tear flesh with teeth, to feel hot vitae slide across cold lips, to crack bones and suck out the marrow.
The zombie's phalanges protruded through flesh that looks as if it had been baking too long in the sun. Still somehow the sinew tightened, the muscles jerked. It seemed a blissful release that the chain saw blade was lifted from the floor. The silence was perfect for just that one moment. Then the motor gave a grunt of life. Another, and another as the undead monster yanked the rip chord.
Finally the engine gave a violent roar as it spewed unspent gasoline into the air in a blue cloud. What was left of his lips twisted into a sick mockery of a smile. Long dead fingers tugged the trigger, the engine howled with glee.
He charged through the castle looking for his newest victim. Running with the pure joy of a fat kid in a candy store
The soft shuffling gait was unheared over a louder, ear piercing sound. A cacophony of sound, like thousands of damned souls wailing, mingled with razor blades being drawn over the surface of a chalk board. The source of this terrible noise was the sound of metal grating over the solid stone floors. The heavy chain link end of the chain saw was carelessly dragging behind him.
It was a male, in life. In unlife gender didn't matter. Only one thing mattered, the need to feast upon the flesh of the living. The need to tear flesh with teeth, to feel hot vitae slide across cold lips, to crack bones and suck out the marrow.
The zombie's phalanges protruded through flesh that looks as if it had been baking too long in the sun. Still somehow the sinew tightened, the muscles jerked. It seemed a blissful release that the chain saw blade was lifted from the floor. The silence was perfect for just that one moment. Then the motor gave a grunt of life. Another, and another as the undead monster yanked the rip chord.
Finally the engine gave a violent roar as it spewed unspent gasoline into the air in a blue cloud. What was left of his lips twisted into a sick mockery of a smile. Long dead fingers tugged the trigger, the engine howled with glee.
He charged through the castle looking for his newest victim. Running with the pure joy of a fat kid in a candy store
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"Oh fuck! Now zombies? This getting fucking annoying! Go away zombie or ill fucking sucker punch you!" I threaten
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I hop on the dragon as she flees. "SAVE ME DRAGON!"
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The sound of the threat reaches his ears. Zombies feel no fear, no remorse, they feel nothing except the need to devour. So he simply turns toward the sound, pulling the trigger on the chain saw. The slow shamble turns into a shuffling run. He will feast on the flesh of the living.
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I morf into a a pure midnight black werewolf. "Lets rumble mr Undead! Im gonna kick you from this hell to the next!"
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I simply just place my face in my palm. A small shake of my head as I walk away. "I'm done... I'm done...."
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"YES IT WORKED!" I grab a delicious coke, as i call my friends and turn back to human kicking off my shoes and telling them to come over and to bring anybody or thing they want. We are gonna throw a death to teachers party!
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A robotic monotone voice offers quietly
Nuclear Launch Detected.
Nuclear Launch Detected.
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*whispers* Need to be sexier...say it sexier and then they'll listen...
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... Oh i keep wanting to forget the conneticut thing! But every five minutes someone brings it up or some how reminds me of it!
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The castle and the strange shape shifting occupant are vaporized as the atomic payload is detonated. Movie over
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Starring: Scuttle as The Dashing Hero
