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[Neonurotic]

Ooops sorry Neo your subject is Write a poem from the perspective of a villain in a fairy tale

Little Porky Tartare

The story did not end with a huff and a puff,
our dear author left out their little pig-sister
who went to visit her big pig brothers
in their new windproof red brick house.

Near out of steam, I caught a piggy
girl by her plump and scrumptious ankle
Tickled that fanny with a spankity-spank
until her curly-q tail unfurled with delight.
She squealed and squealed for more,
so loud the three little pigs came
to her rescue, but were much too late to win.
I already ate her inside and out, left her
as I huffed and puffed a cigarette back to my den.

 

[Angeline]

Little Porky Tartare

The story did not end with a huff and a puff,
our dear author left out their little pig-sister
who went to visit her big pig brothers
in their new windproof red brick house.

Near out of steam, I caught a piggy
girl by her plump and scrumptious ankle
Tickled that fanny with a spankity-spank
until her curly-q tail unfurled with delight.
She squealed and squealed for more,
so loud the three little pigs came
to her rescue, but were much too late to win.
I already ate her inside and out, left her
as I huffed and puffed a cigarette back to my den.

Ahahahahaha! You big bad coffee swilling wolf, you!

 

[butters]

*Margaret Tobin*

They bring them in
special, damaged goods
viewed from behind inch thick
sheets of bullet proof glass
help is what they're here for,
I question how much help
is actually had, imprisoned
shackled to beds, drugged, drooling
while friend's, lover's and children's
tears pool on pale cheeks

a lady looked on at me,
asked if I were her son,
voice quivering slight octave quaver
why are you people torturing me
wails of despair, more tears, matted hair,
drug glazed stare,
her abject terror infectious
shaking my head no words for
this disheveled mess of humanity

wails evolve into screeches,
I want out,
I want OUT,
I WANT OUT
alarms blare,
monotone computer voice radios,
Code black room 2,
Code black room 2,
4 people descend on this wreck of a creature
she spits and claws,

pin her to the glass so they can pull
down her pants, jab her with
liquid sleep, 5 seconds she
slides down the glass,
reduced to a window licker,

2 hours later windows are cleaned,
polished of her unclean taint
ready for another of life's
crazies
ready for us to peer through
the looking glass and pity

what an intelligent and interesting choice of response, tods

you had me googling Margaret Tobin, and the 2006 'state of the art' mental health institution in her name.

especially liked this: liquid sleep

4 people descend on this wreck of a creature
she spits and claws,

in this part, i found myself substituting 'hesperus' here, and adding something about 'lost in her own tempest' to link 'hesperus' and 'liquid sleep'

4 people descend on this hesperus
she spits and claws,
lost in her own tempest

also liked the social commentary aspect of the final lines. nice one, T

 

[todski28]

what an intelligent and interesting choice of response, tods

you had me googling Margaret Tobin, and the 2006 'state of the art' mental health institution in her name.

especially liked this: liquid sleep



in this part, i found myself substituting 'hesperus' here, and adding something about 'lost in her own tempest' to link 'hesperus' and 'liquid sleep'

4 people descend on this hesperus
she spits and claws,
lost in her own tempest

also liked the social commentary aspect of the final lines. nice one, T

Another day in the life of Todski, I worked there as an emergency response guard for 12months thanks for the feedback Butters

Neo that is spectacular! You need to submit that!!!!

 

[Neonurotic]

Neo that is spectacular! You need to submit that!!!!

I'll do that once I figure out which poetry category it goes!

 

[champagne1982]

really really really like this one, champers!

one niggle only, and that is i would have preferred a different phrase instead 'to young dancer' even though it translates from 'la jeune danseuse'. for whatever reason, my brain wants to read one word instead of two, or a prettier(?) phrase. might be that 'la jeune danseuese' is such a prettily ornate phrase that is renders 'young dancer' sort of flabby by comparison. can i suggest an alternative? why no, no i can't

What about:

We have followed her from enfant,
to fourteen, to chorus,
to prima ballerina and what wrong
has he done to paint her into adulthood?​

I think that makes us recollect the sculpture which gave me the idea for the poem.

petite danseuse de quatorze ans

 

[champagne1982]

Little Porky Tartare

I keep coming back to this and giggling, remembering Disney's Silly Symphony and the Big Bad Wolf in that one. I just went googling for the youtube video and just about died laughing at the family photos on the wall at 5:35 and 5:49 in. Silly Symphonies indeed!

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Tess your subject is a trip to Africa, either the actual trip or what you do there (or both)

In the Steps of Mary Slessor

After my sea journey this boat
is a toy skimming murk
and the mysterious between
walls of green so solid
they threaten swallowing
the outboard's throaty purr.
The guide and I watch for
hippos, a dip in these waters
is not advised.

My arms still aches
from viral invasion,
suffering to be safe
from unfamiliar ailments
something Mary never had.

Oscar's presence reassures,
I lie back, and watch the water
slide by.

This is not what
what I expected, oily water
instead of grassy plains,
the Africa of Attenborough.

But the Congo is the heart,
the blood, the life of Africa
and I am here to spread the word.

 

[butters]

What about:

We have followed her from enfant,
to fourteen, to chorus,
to prima ballerina and what wrong
has he done to paint her into adulthood?​

I think that makes us recollect the sculpture which gave me the idea for the poem.

petite danseuse de quatorze ans

what about 'jeunesse'?

We have followed her from enfant
to jeunesse, chorus
to prima ballerina

how do you feel about ensemble instead of chorus?



beautiful sculpture

 

[champagne1982]

what about 'jeunesse'?

We have followed her from enfant
to jeunesse, chorus
to prima ballerina

how do you feel about ensemble instead of chorus?



beautiful sculpture

I love ensemble but I didn't want to create a piece full of francais, as it were, because I'm not really a French speaker. I used the language in the title but avoided it elsewhere in the body. I thought about your suggestion though and decided on enfant instead of child but fourteen to relate to "little dancer age fourteen". So, peut etre:

We have followed her from enfant
to fourteen, ensemble
to prima ballerina​

 

[bronzeage]

Bronz your subject is walking in high heeled shoes

She is barefoot walking in high heel shoes,
her heels never touch the ground.
She lives on her toes,
a few inches above the world,
halfway to a spin, almost a leap,
a dance hidden in every step.

 

[Neonurotic]

I keep coming back to this and giggling, remembering Disney's Silly Symphony and the Big Bad Wolf in that one. I just went googling for the youtube video and just about died laughing at the family photos on the wall at 5:35 and 5:49 in. Silly Symphonies indeed!

I remember that. Love the old Disney. The knew Bugs Bunny is just sad in comparison to the old one.

 

[todski28]

She is barefoot walking in high heel shoes,
her heels never touch the ground.
She lives on her toes,
a few inches above the world,
halfway to a spin, almost a leap,
a dance hidden in every step.

Bronze, this is a special little piece!

 

[bronzeage]

Bronze, this is a special little piece!

Thank you. I appreciate it very much.

 

[butters]

She is barefoot walking in high heel shoes,
her heels never touch the ground.
She lives on her toes,
a few inches above the world,
halfway to a spin, almost a leap,
a dance hidden in every step.

such lovely pictures

 

[champagne1982]

Champ your subject is a clandestine meeting (yours or someone else)

Punctuality

There on Craig’s List I thought I languished,
ignored and exposed; pleading for your attention.
Why wouldn’t you just text the code words
to my phone? I have a special ringtone for you.

Reservation time plus eight minutes
I feel like a Nassau engineer
ready for launch, but there’s no
All clear from the capsule.

Sweat clammy palms wringing
anxiety out of my hands.
Tension is not a precursor
to relaxation, just show up.

The hostess looks exasperated
leading you almost by the hand
to my secluded corner.
I question your desire for this.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Sorry sorry sorry I'm running late here like the White Rabbit (off with her head!)

 

[champagne1982]

Sorry sorry sorry I'm running late here like the White Rabbit (off with her head!)

LOL! I bow to you mistress of quick comebacks.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I must get back to my duties, you're all writing such wonderfully inventive 'stuff' I am impressed and there's me not keeping up my end of the bargain!

Neo your subject is The G Spot
Champ your subject is If you were a man in bed with a woman
Bronz your subject is If you were a woman in bed with a man
Tess your subject is literally getting lost in a book (The Karma Sutra)
Tod your subject is getting caught Skinny dipping

Yeah I'm in a weird frame of mind

 

[todski28]

I must get back to my duties, you're all writing such wonderfully inventive 'stuff' I am impressed and there's me not keeping up my end of the bargain!

Neo your subject is The G Spot
Champ your subject is If you were a man in bed with a woman
Bronz your subject is If you were a woman in bed with a man
Tess your subject is literally getting lost in a book (The Karma Sutra)
Tod your subject is getting caught Skinny dipping

Yeah I'm in a weird frame of mind

You missed Butters

(sorry to throw you under the bus there hehehe)

I think I need to steer clear of reality based poems but I have a funny one for this one... So best get to work.......

 

[UnderYourSpell]

You missed Butters

(sorry to throw you under the bus there hehehe)

I think I need to steer clear of reality based poems but I have a funny one for this one... So best get to work.......

Think I probably missed Will and Mollie too but I'm lost as to who has written what now. Who would have thought I would need a spreadsheet when I started this thread?

Butters your subject is Frottage on a packed train
Will your subject is Waking up next to a stranger
Mollie your subject is Making mayonnaise sexy

 

[butters]

Think I probably missed Will and Mollie too but I'm lost as to who has written what now. Who would have thought I would need a spreadsheet when I started this thread?

Butters your subject is Frottage on a packed train
Will your subject is Waking up next to a stranger
Mollie your subject is Making mayonnaise sexy

 

[butters]

You missed Butters

(sorry to throw you under the bus there hehehe)

I think I need to steer clear of reality based poems but I have a funny one for this one... So best get to work.......

i was kind of keeping my head down and hoping she wouldn't notice me at the back

looking forward to reading yours, and the next batch from the poets

 

[champagne1982]

<snip> Who would have thought I would need a spreadsheet when I started this thread? <snip>

Moreso, who'd have thought you'd trick us all into writing an erotic poem at the same time... I wonder how I can put a different spin on this... oy.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Moreso, who'd have thought you'd trick us all into writing an erotic poem at the same time... I wonder how I can put a different spin on this... oy.

I thought the time was right