Erotica and details

[jeninflorida]

I’m not sure if this is the best forum to post a question like this. If not, I apologize ahead of time.

When you read an erotic story what type of details do you want? Does the conversation have to be very detailed or can some things be skipped (like introductions and stuff, so that the story gets moving into the good parts)?

The story that I’m currently working on is about going to get a massage and the girl at the spa greets me. I’m planning on skipping the detailed conversations and just keep things to a minimum so that the story can quickly move to sexy massage. Once the massage starts the I go into details about the massage, the feelings and sensations, and the thoughts about being exposed to this hottie.

Does that make any sense?

 

[soflabbwlvr]

I’m not sure if this is the best forum to post a question like this. If not, I apologize ahead of time.

When you read an erotic story what type of details do you want? Does the conversation have to be very detailed or can some things be skipped (like introductions and stuff, so that the story gets moving into the good parts)?

The story that I’m currently working on is about going to get a massage and the girl at the spa greets me. I’m planning on skipping the detailed conversations and just keep things to a minimum so that the story can quickly move to sexy massage. Once the massage starts the I go into details about the massage, the feelings and sensations, and the thoughts about being exposed to this hottie.

Does that make any sense?

It depends on the audience you are trying to reach. Some readers like to get to the action quickly without a lot of plot and character development getting in the way. Others prefer a more traditional story arc, with fleshed out characters, conflict, resolution, and some sex thrown in to spice it up. In the end, it its your story to tell as you see fit.

 

[jeninflorida]

It depends on the audience you are trying to reach. Some readers like to get to the action quickly without a lot of plot and character development getting in the way. Others prefer a more traditional story arc, with fleshed out characters, conflict, resolution, and some sex thrown in to spice it up. In the end, it its your story to tell as you see fit.

I think, in this case the story is hot and doesn't really need the open chatter it works. maybe it doesn't. hum...

 

[StevenWill]

Depends

It depends on how you want to portray this "hottie." You could establish her as extremely professional and then you worry about being exposed as being aroused when you shouldn't and you fight to hide your arousal. Or she could be flirty and warm and friendly and she pulls your excitement out of you with her knowing ways, hands and words. Whatever way you want to paint her should only take a sentence or two.

steve

 

[laceNlthrgrrl]

If it's not directly relevant to the rest of the story, I think glossing over details is reasonable.

"She greeted me and checked me in" works just fine, keeps the story moving and lets the reader know that your main character has moved forward from walking in the door without teleporting.

If, however, the receptionist then joins in on a hot & heavy 3-some, a few extra details earlier on might be helpful.

 

[yuna1981]

I personally don't like a lot of introductory stuff, but I don't like it to get too action-y all at once. If you can start the sexual tension right away, so that there's a burn all the way up to when the massage transitions from just a massage to much much more, that would be great.

 

[KarlMartinK]

I think it all depends on the flow of the story. If it's a story that's all bang bang bang, then skipping unnecessary conversation is appreciated. If it's a story about reluctance or self-discovery, the conversation is a big part of the set-up and is necessary.

 

[JuanVato]

oh boy....

This is a good question.

I know I always wrestle with this. The "safe" rule is "sight-touch-smell-feel".

What does the character see?
What does the character touch?
What does the scene smell like?
How is the character feeling?

 

[silverwhisper]

jen, i think it's really about what you write, and how the story wants to be written. for some types of writing--and some writers--those little details are important because they establish the relationship and the characters. maybe the narrator hasn't cum before but she does with the masseuse. the reason why it works with the masseuse can be seeded here.

but ultimately, if your story doesn't improve with such inclusions, it's probably better to omit them.

ed

 

[jonicaswift]

I agree with what SteveWill said upthread - you can get to how the sex is going to come about as quickly or slowly as you want - I've always liked a component of mental control to be exposed, i.e. one of the 2 (or more!) characters knows what the other wants and how to get them to give into it. Establishing who is control develops the arc almost for you, and the type of sex you're writing about will help dictate the length. Drawn out or quick and dirty . . . or slow and dirty