Lesbian bank robbers

[Olds84]

I've had this idea for quite some time now. A lesbian couple tries to rob a bank, but are stopped by a security guard. The women run out of the bank, taking a girl from the local community college as a hostage. They race out of the city to a small town where a few of there lovers live. The story would center upon all the things the women and there friends do to the coed while on the run. What do you think? Feel free to take this idea if you want.

 

[Cadere]

Yes. I'd find this an interesting read.

Now, I do think that a few things need to line up in order for this to be logical and plausible:

I assume this is an attempt that failed to steal any significant amount of money, since you did not state otherwise. Yes, the cops would chase them down for an attempt at robbery, but then the fact that they take a hostage after their plan failed (utterly, as I'm still assuming) just seems redundant and ineffective on the couple's part. Hopefully, you plan to make their attempt successful to a degree.

Also, having their hostage come from a community college seems irrelevant to the scene. Why head to a campus off a ways from your target building, the bank? The girl, I assume, has no ties to anything involving the bank, so it would feel rather random--unless she at the bank while this is happening? If so, that would be alright. It might be more interesting and easier to make the woman a bank teller.

Lastly, I would want to focus more so on the couple and the hostage as a threesome, instead of introducing another lot of people. A focus on a small group makes it easier to enjoy all the subtle actions one inflicts on the other. It's hard to keep track of a cluster of minor characters and convey their actions, thoughts, and emotions realistically and compellingly.

 

[Olds84]

Thanks Cadere! I planned on the hostage scenario because I had the security guard chase them out of the bank. I see this as a non consent story, what do you think?

 

[nakdsub]

May I put my two cents in?

I don't think it matters who the hostage is unless you make her a female cop who was the first on the scene but let the robbers get the drop on her.

As for how many are going to ravage the girl. You could have the robbers take their hostage to the hide out where it would be the 3 or them, but the cops are closing in so they escape to another hide out where there are more girls to take advantage of her.

 

[dutchsmurf]

Lots of ways you can go with this. I see no need to introduce any other characters then the original three women tho. More just makes it more complicated both for the writer and the reader. And with three women you have options enough.

Couple questions tho. Why are they robbing the bank (who the hell does still rob banks these days anyway?)? Do they need the money or is it something they do for a living? The guns blazing approach is slightly old-fashioned. People usually rob money transports now.
Why would they take a hostage, since that would only make the police more eager to track them down and slow themselves down in the progress? And after they took the hostage, why would they do anything to harm her? Your hostage is your way out after all. Unless this is about two not so smart bank robbers, in which case it is no surprise they failed.

Another way you can take this is a slightly different approach. No hostage this time, but this was their 10th bank so the police has set someone to permanently hunt them. This woman learns more and more about the two robbers and as they play their cat and mouse game, she starts developing feelings for them.

 

[Cadere]

Thanks Cadere! I planned on the hostage scenario because I had the security guard chase them out of the bank. I see this as a non consent story, what do you think?

It ought to be non-consent! I wouldn't call it any other thing, my friend.

Now, a security guard is just a person who was assigned from a security company, not an actual police officer. An officer works for their local state government. So to take a hostage simply because they are being chased out by personnel seems not to do the girls any good, as he isn't a legal threat. The guard can't arrest them in the name of the law. He'd have to call the cops while he constrains them. I'm sure those two women could handle one person, anyway.
If he were a security police officer, his authority would certainly be stronger. But, once again, there is just one.
Many banks have security systems that, once triggered, automatically alert the nearest police station, but we don't want that. What we're aiming for is a brief confrontation, right then and there. Without that, no need for a hostage or a swift getaway. You want some action in this piece, right?

I propose two things:

1) If you want to keep the security guard as a mere guard, you could incorporate a scene where one of the robbers has the hostage and the other has the guard at gunpoint. After somehow cracking the vault/atms/atm vault, they run with the money and the hostage, leaving the guard free to call for police.

2) If you want to upgrade the security guard to security police, you could instead have a few of them working on the premises, they hear the alarm, rush around to see the girls running off with the money and the human shield, and it all turns out into a shoot off in the parking lot between the two parties until the women can slip in the getaway and ride off. Old-fashioned, but nothing wrong with that, eh?

Throw in some injuries while you're at it. A clean heist isn't a fun one.

These are just suggestions, anyway. You can always tweak them or ignore them--it's your story.

Oh, I almost forgot!

Is this going to be during the day or night? I keep assuming it's nighttime, which is selfish of me.

I don't think it matters who the hostage is unless you make her a female cop who was the first on the scene but let the robbers get the drop on her.

I think who the person is makes quite the difference. A female officer certainly makes the difference, no? But wouldn't she be the feisty captive! The only issue would be that the woman is trained in self-defense as required by her profession. If they could disarm and subdue her, it would most certainly be a grand story. A woman in authority forced to submit!
But keep in mind, police are trained so that it should be difficult to do such things. And if she arrived first on the scene, there are bound to be many others seconds behind her. They'd overwhelm the girls. Cops don't come from just anywhere, you know. They're all from the station--and whoever else happens to be in town.

Why are they robbing the bank (who the hell does still rob banks these days anyway?)?

Lots of people rob banks, still. Check the recent news online. Why not a bank? It's where the money's at!

Why would they take a hostage, since that would only make the police more eager to track them down and slow themselves down in the progress? And after they took the hostage, why would they do anything to harm her? Your hostage is your way out after all.

Precisely. It's a thrill, isn't? A race to have as much fun as one can before they get caught. It's a rush! How long can it last?
The women can't be so violent with her that they bang her up, if that's what you mean by harm. She'd be a bloody hinderance. It's a sexual abuse, I'm sure.
I do like your suggestion, I must say~

(Oh, and Olds, your PMs are turned off, but my answer to both questions is "yes.")

 

[sirhugs]

I always feel a tad creepy culturally appropriating lesbian porn... but it appeals to my voyeur streak

 

[Dazzle1]

I like the earlier idea of them taking a female police officer or guard as the hostage.

 

[Olds84]

I planned on it being a person passing by because I wanted it to be the tough criminals vs. the innocent schoolgirl kind of thing. Banks are being robbed all the time, even by teenage girls. This story has a bunch of possibilities, but to do it justice I think it has to be multi layered and have an involved plot.

 

[Cadere]

I planned on it being a person passing by because I wanted it to be the tough criminals vs. the innocent schoolgirl kind of thing. Banks are being robbed all the time, even by teenage girls. This story has a bunch of possibilities, but to do it justice I think it has to be multi layered and have an involved plot.

Well, ultimately, this is your story.

Sort through all of our suggestions and craft up the base of the plot before we dwell too much into the details, eh?

Get back to us on what you've decided. This is certainly a novel idea.

 

[Olds84]

It is a story idea of mine Cadere, but I recognize that I not only don't know a whole lot about writing, but other people may have a better vantage point. I think I'm up in the air right now as far as what direction to take on this. On one hand, the younger vs. older angle is hot, but the ravishment of the police officer is something not entirely explored.

 

[Virtual_Burlesque]

Does it have to be a bank robbery? A criminal who goes into a bank to rob it at gunpoint and takes a hostage would be both violent and limited in mental capacity. It would be difficult to write them sympathetically.

On the other hand, burglars of a jewellery store, or some such thing, would be less desperate characters. The break in could be foiled by an alarm, which they thought they had suppressed, going off.

A by-passer --- someone young and innocent as you desire --- who knows them by sight could see them. Then they would have to take her hostage so she does not identify them to the police.

If it is only a jewellery store alarm going off and not a bank robbery, the police would not be very hot on their trail. Indeed, no one needs to know that their hostage is missing until several days had passed, which would give the crooks time for as much action as you wish to write about while the hostage is in their custody.

If you wish to bring other characters into your story, traveling successfully from one location to another would be more believable if there were no dragnet out for them.

Finally, if it is not a bank robbery and the police are not directly involved, you would gain another plausible ending for your story. As before, the police could catch up with your felons. The girl could escape or be released. She could join them in their life of crime. And in addition, you could even end up with their hostage (who has come to enjoy her treatment, and is possibly brighter than her captors) devising a legal way to solve the problem which motivated their burglary attempt on the jewellery store in the first place.

 

[Olds84]

Good point Virtual_Birlesque. It doesn't have to be a bank robbery, so your idea is intriguing. I was thinking about writing the story so that it has some substance away from the sexual part. The sex is certainly going to be there, but I want a little more to it. My "thing" is lesbian dominance, mostly the older vs. younger variety, but I'm open to other ideas about plot and characters.