Let me know what you think...

[kittyvan]

Please Stop Posting Here. I Dont Want Any More Feedback. I Was Hoping For Feedback On The Content Or Actual Story...what I Got Was A Lot Of People Who Are Really Serious About Punctuation And Hung Up On The Seriousness Of Their Craft. Thats Great But Not What I Was Looking For. Or At Least...to The Exclusion Of Things More Relevant To Me... Go Pick On Someone Else Mistresslynn

 

[alricflaim]

aww Kitty, you were a virgin before today. 1 post and one post only. Glad I'm the one who got to collect your cherry!

 

[kittyvan]

cheeky

oh there are allllllllllllllll kinds of cherries to pop and collect in this world

 

[CWatson]

Umm... I admit I couldn't get very far in. The overuse of ellipses jagged on me; and once I got to the real thrust of the story (the Dom/sub stuff) I gave up, 'cuz that just isn't my cup of tea. Long story short, it would behoove you to learn proper punctuation; there are other marks. And you have a sense of that, because you were using ellipses to substitute for them. But why not take it all the way?

 

[kittyvan]

thanks for your comments.................................................................. I like them though. But fantastic use of the word behoove.

 

[CWatson]

Thanks, I do my best. And, seriously, if you like ellipses you're allowed to use them; that's an artistic choice, and because you're the writer, artistic choices are completely up to you. Just keep in mind that, with each one you make, you turn off X amount of readers because they disagree with it. Now, you also gain Y amount because they did like it, so it's a trade-off. All I'm saying is, "Here's one of the X number of readers who got turned off because of an artistic choice, and here's what the choice was."

 

[kittyvan]

i do like them and I use them on purpose...not because I don't know how to punctuate. I have an English degree....which is part of why I feel entitled to use them...artistically...regardless of the ... you wouldn't have enjoyed the story....not your cup of tea. right? so I scared you off on 2 counts. You and I seem to differ a lot in topic choice...your "in school" stories...well...not my cup of tea...so its an even trade...lol
be well.

 

[kittyvan]

oh...and i still appreciate that you shared your opinions...regardless. Thanks

 

[_Lynn_]

I started writing naughty stories a few years ago...turned into a whole persona...Kitty...
please read my story and let me know what you think! I need ideas for the next one...so if you have a fantasy to share..Id love to hear that too!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=409692

Umm... I admit I couldn't get very far in. The overuse of ellipses jagged on me; and once I got to the real thrust of the story (the Dom/sub stuff) I gave up, 'cuz that just isn't my cup of tea. Long story short, it would behoove you to learn proper punctuation; there are other marks. And you have a sense of that, because you were using ellipses to substitute for them. But why not take it all the way?

I read a few paragraphs but have to agree with CW here. The punctuation is jarring. Also the multiple 'she/he/this/that' sentence beginnings is very boring.

I'm not sure I would let it be known about that English degree if I were you.

 

[kittyvan]

ok now i see that i dont want feedback...since all i get is negative...lol I like my jarring writing...its how I think and how I choose to express myself.
I write for one reason. It makes me happy. So I realize that I do not want to informed of all my issues or snarky snips at my education. I am the author. Thats ok. I just like to make people smile. if my story is so horrible...then by all means, skip it.
And because I cant stop myself, just because you have an English degree doesnt mean you have to write everything perfectly. I know how. I chose not to. My expression has been haulted too many times by the "correct puntuation" and the forced style of writing needed to get the A. That said, thank you to those who read it. And especially to those that read the WHOLE thing before telling me their opinion.

 

[kittyvan]

ok now i see that i dont want feedback...since all i get is negative...lol I like my jarring writing...its how I think and how I choose to express myself.
I write for one reason. It makes me happy. So I realize that I do not want to informed of all my issues or snarky snips at my education. I am the author. Thats ok. I just like to make people smile. if my story is so horrible...then by all means,
skip it.
And because I cant stop myself, just because you have an English degree doesnt mean you have to write everything perfectly. I know how. I chose not to. My expression has been haulted too many times by the correct puntuation and the forced style of writing needed to get the A. That said, thank you to those who read it. And especially to those that read the WHOLE thing before telling me their opinion.

 

[_Lynn_]

ok now i see that i dont want feedback...since all i get is negative...lol I like my jarring writing...its how I think and how I choose to express myself.
I write for one reason. It makes me happy. So I realize that I do not want to informed of all my issues or snarky snips at my education. I am the author. Thats ok. I just like to make people smile. if my story is so horrible...then by all means,
skip it.
And because I cant stop myself, just because you have an English degree doesnt mean you have to write everything perfectly. I know how. I chose not to. My expression has been haulted too many times by the correct puntuation and the forced style of writing needed to get the A. That said, thank you to those who read it. And especially to those that read the WHOLE thing before telling me their opinion.

I tell it as I see it, whether that means reading an entire piece or the first part.

Some people are serious about their writing here and strive to make each story better with less errors.

You'll find intelligent readers here as well.

You asked for feedback, you got it. If you only want people gushing over your work, then you should ask your friends.

 

[kittyvan]

please stop posting here

 

[kittyvan]

does anyone know how to erase a thread? sheesh I just want this one to die die die... I dont need more grief.