Looking for feedback on short story.

[Honeybabylove]

Hi!

I just finished my first short story and I am looking for fellow erotica readers to review and provide constructive feedback. I did post the story on scribophile, but immediately got reviews from others who “have never read erotica before” and “could never picture this happening in real life”. Safe to say they were not big fans I’m hoping this story ends up in the lap of people who understand immersive fantasy and desire. I’ve been trying to get it published on Literotica, but it keeps triggering the AI detection system, despite not using AI to write or edit my story in any way (sigh).
I’m more than willing to trade, I could read your story in and provide feedback in exchange. It’s my first story, so I’m hoping to be pointed out any weak spots to improve my skill level. Message me if you’re interested and I’ll send you a link to my story.

Brief Summary,

Kiss me through the Ouija:
Three friends summon a lustful spirit at a sleepover.

Themes included:
Lesbian sex
Reluctance / Brief non-consent
Non-human entities

Thanks

 

[TheWritingGroup]

You are probably best off either:

1. Actually publishing the story, or
2. Posting in the editors forum.

 

[Honeybabylove]

Ok I’ll try posting in the editors forum since I already explained I can’t get my story published on the site. Thank you.

 

[ZinJ]

Hi!

I just finished my first short story and I am looking for fellow erotica readers to review and provide constructive feedback. I did post the story on scribophile, but immediately got reviews from others who “have never read erotica before” and “could never picture this happening in real life”. Safe to say they were not big fans I’m hoping this story ends up in the lap of people who understand immersive fantasy and desire. I’ve been trying to get it published on Literotica, but it keeps triggering the AI detection system, despite not using AI to write or edit my story in any way (sigh).
I’m more than willing to trade, I could read your story in and provide feedback in exchange. It’s my first story, so I’m hoping to be pointed out any weak spots to improve my skill level. Message me if you’re interested and I’ll send you a link to my story.

Brief Summary,

Kiss me through the Ouija:
Three friends summon a lustful spirit at a sleepover.

Themes included:
Lesbian sex
Reluctance / Brief non-consent
Non-human entities

Thanks

I read somewhere else in forums that the AI detection can be triggered if you're using Grammarly/something similar

 

[TheWritingGroup]

I read somewhere else in forums that the AI detection can be triggered if you're using Grammarly/something similar

Basically anything where the AI gives you suggested wording is said to be a trigger. "Said to be" because we actually have no idea how the detector works.

 

[Honeybabylove]

I read somewhere else in forums that the AI detection can be triggered if you're using Grammarly/something similar

Never used any editing software either, I wrote the story on my notes app and edited it myself

 

[ZinJ]

Never used any editing software either, I wrote the story on my notes app and edited it myself

Maybe resubmitting could help?

 

[Sign54]

The editors are who need to read it.