Making a story better

[LovesDancing]

I've written a story (Helping Melinda Part 7) where a man masturbates a woman to an extremely powerful orgasm (which is why it's a story instead of real life). Could I ask someone (preferably a woman) to critique it and make any suggestions to make it more believable or compelling?

 

[anthrodisiac]

If you've already published it, go ahead and share a link. But it sounds like you haven't, which means you might be better off asking in the Editors Forum, because it sounds like you're looking for beta readers, and most of them frequent the Editors Forum. Story Feedback is primarily for stories that have already been published, as far as I can tell. I'd recommend asking again over there and see what you get.

You'll be more likely to get someone interested if you also give more information about the story, maybe share links to some of the earlier chapters so someone can get a sense of if they like your work and would be willing to help you out. Requests that don't have a ton of information are, unfortunately, more likely to be ignored than one that provides more details about the story, tone, voice, kinks, any content warnings, etc., so the person who reads your post has some idea of what they're getting into.

Also, I'd drop the ask about "preferably a woman," because some female beta readers have taken up requests like that, and then they turn into requests for RP or something sexual besides actually beta reading and giving feedback, which means a lot of them won't bother to take up the request. So for the best chance of success, I'd drop that, include links to your previous works, and go into a few sentences about your story.

Good luck!

 

[EmilyMiller]

I've written a story (Helping Melinda Part 7) where a man masturbates a woman to an extremely powerful orgasm (which is why it's a story instead of real life). Could I ask someone (preferably a woman) to critique it and make any suggestions to make it more believable or compelling?

I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt / break the habit of a lifetime and take a look, so long as: a) no non-con / incest, b) it’s less than 10k words, c) I don’t have to read parts 1 - 6 in order to know what’s going on.

Also, I have a 10,000 beta read to do for a friend, so it would be after that.