Mass Effect: Chronicles (OOC)
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Right, in regards to my last post. I can never remember how Elcor speech is phrased.
Is it 'Satisfied. You will...' or 'Satisfied: You will...'?
Never mind, it's done now
Any while I'm asking stuff has anyone had chance to check out my Mass Effect fics? I've got one with Shepard and Garrus going at it and Jacob and Miranda going at it. Also, there's one coming with Liara and Ashley getting it on. The xenophobe with the Galaxy's cutest alien?! Whoda thunk it?
Is it 'Satisfied. You will...' or 'Satisfied: You will...'?
Never mind, it's done now
Any while I'm asking stuff has anyone had chance to check out my Mass Effect fics? I've got one with Shepard and Garrus going at it and Jacob and Miranda going at it. Also, there's one coming with Liara and Ashley getting it on. The xenophobe with the Galaxy's cutest alien?! Whoda thunk it?
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Oh, she's got nothing to worry about. I feel I love Garrus just as much as you do Dizzyfish
Totally gay for him. I'll also edit my last post to reflect the Elcor speech patterns. Opinions on the post? Too much?
I would need to give the post a few more reads before I could give a good opinion on whether or not it was "too much." But as it doesn't leap out at scream "too much" at me, that's a good sign. A technical note I have, however, would be finding a better flow for your paragraphs. As it stands right now, just trying to read the post makes the entire sequence seem jumpy, as there are line breaks after every two sentences or so. I can be hard to get a good and solid paragraph flow in forum posts at times, thanks in part to the misleading look we get in the text box for each of our posts.
With future posts you may want to work on combining sentences from various lines in to a more cohesive paragraph. A recommendation for everyone might be to add BOLD tags around spoken lines. It isn't necessary, however, I just find it is easier to distinguish between narration and dialogue this way. Although it doesn't come up as often, I find that when I have to write an "inner voice" I use italics. But most of us seem to prefer using narration to describe a character's inner thoughts.
I'm also glad that everyone is putting their character's name as the post title. I thought about putting that in the "rule section" but it didn't seem necessary. Once we start adding "Narrator" NPC posts, that will be a bigger deal. I would like your opinion, though, on how to label our posts.
We can just stick with adding our character name to the title, or we can actually put the character name as a header in the body of the post. I've been having a hard time remembering the title section, and it also doesn't stand out as much. Thoughts?
With future posts you may want to work on combining sentences from various lines in to a more cohesive paragraph. A recommendation for everyone might be to add BOLD tags around spoken lines. It isn't necessary, however, I just find it is easier to distinguish between narration and dialogue this way. Although it doesn't come up as often, I find that when I have to write an "inner voice" I use italics. But most of us seem to prefer using narration to describe a character's inner thoughts.
I'm also glad that everyone is putting their character's name as the post title. I thought about putting that in the "rule section" but it didn't seem necessary. Once we start adding "Narrator" NPC posts, that will be a bigger deal. I would like your opinion, though, on how to label our posts.
We can just stick with adding our character name to the title, or we can actually put the character name as a header in the body of the post. I've been having a hard time remembering the title section, and it also doesn't stand out as much. Thoughts?
Sorry for the delays in story progression, guys. I was having an "off weekend" with the triumphant return of spring allergies. My continuing battle with nature continues.
You read it, you can't un-read it.
Dizzyfish and I had planned for us to already have the team assembled and be on the way to the planet before the weekend was over, but stuff happens. I will do my best to get everything back to the right pace so your characters aren't just sitting in the wings and giving me the "hurry-it-up" hand twirl. Or in certain cases, the "hurry-it-up" gun aimed at my face.
Pimpmar and MeanBlackjack, I would be very grateful if you guys posted in here your definitive decision on how you want Kaito and Dante introduced. As you no doubt noticed, I can not make decisions like this because I have too many damned ideas and always have some sort of hole to poke in other people's ideas. So you guys make the decision, and I will shut the hell up and go with it. If for any reason I don't shut the hell up, just tell Dizzyfish and she will do something unspeakably wicked to me as a reminder that I talk too much.
You read it, you can't un-read it.
Dizzyfish and I had planned for us to already have the team assembled and be on the way to the planet before the weekend was over, but stuff happens. I will do my best to get everything back to the right pace so your characters aren't just sitting in the wings and giving me the "hurry-it-up" hand twirl. Or in certain cases, the "hurry-it-up" gun aimed at my face.
Pimpmar and MeanBlackjack, I would be very grateful if you guys posted in here your definitive decision on how you want Kaito and Dante introduced. As you no doubt noticed, I can not make decisions like this because I have too many damned ideas and always have some sort of hole to poke in other people's ideas. So you guys make the decision, and I will shut the hell up and go with it. If for any reason I don't shut the hell up, just tell Dizzyfish and she will do something unspeakably wicked to me as a reminder that I talk too much.
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I could get attacked and stow away on the ship? Offer to pay off the debt by working as muscle?
Stowing away might work. But that would be something you should discuss with pimpmar as it is his ship, and he would know how difficult it would be to sneak on his ship. I have a dozen things I want to say about the idea...but I will shut the hell up so Dizzyfish doesn't hurt me.
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Apologies, work has also been killing me. I'm going to write up a quick reply as well.
Pimpmar, expect a quick PM your way too,
Pimpmar, expect a quick PM your way too,
Just fair warning folks, Atina and Alec are not running from the law or hiding from criminal syndicates. If a potential ally looks like they might be way more trouble than they're worth, Alec is going to either not want to work with them, or he will lowball the crap out of their payments.
The more trouble a character seems like, the more work the player is going to have to make them seem like a good team member. Just keep that in mind when you're having random fights in the street.
Of course, there are plenty of tried and true methods of forcing people together at the start of an adventure. They're all "tried and true" to the point of being cliche, but hey, we can't get too picky, right? I will bend Alec's character to a certain point, but they are not desperate for their team. I mean, if the pilot just says "sure I'll take the job, but let's negotiate everything after I have you on my ship so I can run from the authorities and make you all accomplices to my escape" Alec will want to get far far away from that guy.
The more trouble a character seems like, the more work the player is going to have to make them seem like a good team member. Just keep that in mind when you're having random fights in the street.
Of course, there are plenty of tried and true methods of forcing people together at the start of an adventure. They're all "tried and true" to the point of being cliche, but hey, we can't get too picky, right? I will bend Alec's character to a certain point, but they are not desperate for their team. I mean, if the pilot just says "sure I'll take the job, but let's negotiate everything after I have you on my ship so I can run from the authorities and make you all accomplices to my escape" Alec will want to get far far away from that guy.
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Oh I had a feeling you had more planned out, but I just wanted to make sure you knew how Alec would respond to that type of situation so you have your plan in mind. Even if that isn't the real situation, that will likely be how Alec will view it or at least spin it.
Apply the "you're going to get us all killed" discount and Dante wouldn't have enough money to pay for refueling. If I haven't established it enough yet, I will just come right out and say it.
Alec Kaiser is a jerk. A well meaning jerk, perhaps. But a jerk, nonetheless. Thankfully, Atina, with her mind numbing optimism, is calling the shots.
@ Avellan13
We will be there soon. Perhaps some sort of fever/drug/poison induced hallucination scene is in order? I'm thinking "Sgt. Pepper"-esque level of messed up visions. Ah, now that's a good old fashioned family LSD trip.
@ MeanBlackjack
Have you settled on a good way to get Kaito in to the group? At the very least, I think all of our characters can support the killing of batarian slavers. If Kaito accidentally brings a fight down on our head Alec will be pissed, but Atina might be impressed enough to offer him a job. I'd suggest waiting for Dizzyfish to weigh in on that before we jump in to it, though.
Also, I have a funny conversation in my head.
Dante : "Great, another stupid and violent human."
Alec : "I know, man. Humans are a bunch of ignorant, greedy, and aggressive savages."
Dante : "You are aware that you're human, too. Right?"
Alec : "I'm comfortable with my self-hatred."
Sorry that I'm not posting as regularly as I normally do. I have been having internet and computer problems on top of being sick for the past week. I am feeling a little better every day, so I hope to be back to normal by tomorrow evening.
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Hey guys,
I'm re-emerging with bad news I'm afraid.
On top of work making me move around a hell of a lot (I help open up retail stores when I'm not working at them) it also looks like my bank details have been... What's the right term? Leaked? Phished? I dunno, but some cunt in Spain had them.
Add onto that not getting into the wedding and well life's pretty shitty.[/joke]
It looks like I've hit a complete mental block with my writing. I've been forcing myself to write and frankly, I think I've managed to burn myself out for the time being.
So, I'm going to kill off Kaito.
Sorry to let you all down but if I'm in a shitty mood when I'm writing then it will probably show. Again, really sorry do some cool bitoics for the old guy huh?
MBJ
I'm re-emerging with bad news I'm afraid.
On top of work making me move around a hell of a lot (I help open up retail stores when I'm not working at them) it also looks like my bank details have been... What's the right term? Leaked? Phished? I dunno, but some cunt in Spain had them.
Add onto that not getting into the wedding and well life's pretty shitty.[/joke]
It looks like I've hit a complete mental block with my writing. I've been forcing myself to write and frankly, I think I've managed to burn myself out for the time being.
So, I'm going to kill off Kaito.
Sorry to let you all down but if I'm in a shitty mood when I'm writing then it will probably show. Again, really sorry do some cool bitoics for the old guy huh?
MBJ
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